rate_review Reviews

I thought I reviewed this at the end of Chapter Four, but I was mistaken. This is overdue for a review (from me, anyway).

I'm very much enjoying this story, especially Zayne's internal conflicts. He has this...power, I guess you could call it, but never really wanted it, and to personify it, it just doesn't want to leave him alone. Just seeing how it's starting to affect his once-quiet life is an adventure in and of itself.

I don't want to put ideas in your head because it's your story, but I wonder if there's something else, an element in the story that hasn't been introduced yet. I can't help but think that there has to be a yin to his yang, if you will.

All the same, I'm enjoying your work. Keep it up!

Possibly the most ridiculous thing I've read in a while and I mean that in a good way, it's funny, witty and completely over the top. I like your characters and the conflicts they deal with and the overall plot line. It makes for a good story that I'll have to keep an eye on. Looking forward to where this all goes.

Excellent. Hope you get Zayne and Jessica together (like, in love) in the end.

Damn this is hot, keep it coming man!!!!

It wasn't what I expected, but I can't say that I'm displeased. Very well written, sort of reminds me of the stuff I used to write. I find it a funny coincidence that I had a character in my story called Cayne, and you have one called Zayne, & we both have Veronica's! haha :] I felt like I could relate a lot to your writing, I really enjoyed it! I am eager to read an update! :) When Jessica came into the scene I was sort of reminded of Alice from the *shudder* Twilight series, was it loosely based off of her? Oh! and great description of the incubus, I take it you've seen the, "Some Times they Come...Again" movie, or read the book? :D

When I read chapter 1 I couldn't wait for more. I was so pleasantly surprised to find a new chapter the next day! I'm intrigued, I can't wait to see what happens next. Please keep going! I love it.