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March 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
=w= I like this so far! With a bit of editing and, some longer chapters telling more of the story it could turn into something amazing!
I hope you continue but, if not I look forward to any future things you write. Keep on trucking!
Always
~Spicy~
I hope you continue but, if not I look forward to any future things you write. Keep on trucking!
Always
~Spicy~
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March 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Liked the story please update soon.
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
really enjoyed it. it has a lot of potential. could use more explanations here and there. none the less it's good. continue it and let's see where it leads to.
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Extremely promising. Good writing and mouthwatering premise. A little short though.
Please continue.
Please continue.
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good start! I can't wait to read more to this story. I hope you elaborate a little more on how Yuki and Damon met. As well as how Yuki cared for Damon when he was a cub.
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
yay!!! very good, keep up the great work i'd certainly like to see more!
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I think you should definitely continue. You might want to proofread your chapter, since there are some grammatical and spelling errors. Those are an easy fix, however. I can't wait to see what Damon will do to Yuki next. Will Yuki actually listen to his instincts and just follow along or will he actually try to fight it? Is Yuki older than Damon? I can't wait to find out more. Good luck with writing!
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I think this has the potential to be a great story, but yes, some more details would be nice and some of your grammar is a little off. I hope to see the next chapter up soon! :)
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
great start! I can't wait to see the next chapter!
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March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait for more, you've starting off great, you've hit on all my favourite subjects.