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July 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I don't know how I missed that this story was updated. I try to check daily on AFF to see if there are stories I missed. I forget some days and I guess it slipped onto the second page by the time I checked! *gasp* I missed a chapter >8( Not good.
-But thank God my wife is so stupid that she doesn't notice me calling you every night-
I lawled. Such a unique line that could have gone a lot of different ways, but surprised me with this one!
-Sensational sensations, too.-
Love small bits of alliteration like this. I think they make moments memorable in writing. It can be over done or played really well. This was just... really pretty writing. IMO ofc =D
- primitive lubrication -
I love this wording. It's so descriptive without being overly purplish-prosy. It fits so completely with the rawness that's happenign between Daniel and Joshua. Just so perfect.
-"Yeah," Daniel interrupted him, "but not between girls and you."-
I may, or may not, have squealed.
Aloud.
I loved the chapter. Loved getting to know Joshua more. I like him better every moment he's written.
Daniel is becoming a more sympathetic character. I enjoy how you don't just suddenly throw better traits at him to make him more likeable, he just IS that way because we understand what he's going through a little better. And he understands it, too.
Intersting fact about Kosovo: I'm writing three novels at the same time. All three of them (as part of a theme) have refugees from Kosovo. One Serbian, and the other one appears in two books as a supportin character in one and a main in the other. He's Albanian muslim (from kosovo).
I hope your trip there was beautiful and that you're not abducted, simply busy enjoying summer.
-But thank God my wife is so stupid that she doesn't notice me calling you every night-
I lawled. Such a unique line that could have gone a lot of different ways, but surprised me with this one!
-Sensational sensations, too.-
Love small bits of alliteration like this. I think they make moments memorable in writing. It can be over done or played really well. This was just... really pretty writing. IMO ofc =D
- primitive lubrication -
I love this wording. It's so descriptive without being overly purplish-prosy. It fits so completely with the rawness that's happenign between Daniel and Joshua. Just so perfect.
-"Yeah," Daniel interrupted him, "but not between girls and you."-
I may, or may not, have squealed.
Aloud.
I loved the chapter. Loved getting to know Joshua more. I like him better every moment he's written.
Daniel is becoming a more sympathetic character. I enjoy how you don't just suddenly throw better traits at him to make him more likeable, he just IS that way because we understand what he's going through a little better. And he understands it, too.
Intersting fact about Kosovo: I'm writing three novels at the same time. All three of them (as part of a theme) have refugees from Kosovo. One Serbian, and the other one appears in two books as a supportin character in one and a main in the other. He's Albanian muslim (from kosovo).
I hope your trip there was beautiful and that you're not abducted, simply busy enjoying summer.
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July 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i stayed up later than i should have to read the 8 chapters that are up so far, and it was worth it! looking forward to more!
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July 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story is really great! I'll be looking forward to more chapters. ^-^
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June 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, Lordy, 'D&D' how could I forget this story. Nice to see you again.
Well about chapter 8 Daniel is a real sweetie his a bit clumsy with this relationship but that was what made him charming this time. His reaction and the confession that he only liked Joshua were also sweet. I would say that he takes the relationship seriously, because he is so nervous about it and can't really think clearly I just hope that it will work out in their favour.
*sigh* Joshua is also sweet as a guide of course he sometimes looses his patience but that's just human. It was nice to see how insecure Joshua felt about their relationship in spite of his acceptance of it. I was a bit worried when he acted cold toward Daniel but it seems like now they are finally going to start their relationship.
It will be entertaining to see how their relationship will develop I wonder how Daniel will introduce Joshua to his family. Hmm they already met him as a girl and they 'know' that Daniel is in a relationship and Joshua already met them, does it really matter? I think he will at least introduce the real Joshua to his cousin. Now I'm starting to think and I don't really want to write it, but now that I think about it a member or acquaintance of Daniel's family could see them.
I love the titles it's nice that you have a theme and still stick to it. That's the reason why there were no update because you had some difficulty to come up with a decent title *wink*.
Well about chapter 8 Daniel is a real sweetie his a bit clumsy with this relationship but that was what made him charming this time. His reaction and the confession that he only liked Joshua were also sweet. I would say that he takes the relationship seriously, because he is so nervous about it and can't really think clearly I just hope that it will work out in their favour.
*sigh* Joshua is also sweet as a guide of course he sometimes looses his patience but that's just human. It was nice to see how insecure Joshua felt about their relationship in spite of his acceptance of it. I was a bit worried when he acted cold toward Daniel but it seems like now they are finally going to start their relationship.
It will be entertaining to see how their relationship will develop I wonder how Daniel will introduce Joshua to his family. Hmm they already met him as a girl and they 'know' that Daniel is in a relationship and Joshua already met them, does it really matter? I think he will at least introduce the real Joshua to his cousin. Now I'm starting to think and I don't really want to write it, but now that I think about it a member or acquaintance of Daniel's family could see them.
I love the titles it's nice that you have a theme and still stick to it. That's the reason why there were no update because you had some difficulty to come up with a decent title *wink*.
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June 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow! i love this story. I do actually know of a woman who dated nothing but men, but one day found herself becoming interested in a woman she was working with. So I know it's totally possible. Sometimes people are just attracted to certain people regardless of gender. Well, thank you for the update. I so look forward to reading more of this story! :-)
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June 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Omg, I did a fucking happy dance when I saw this was updated! You just made my whole week! :)
I am SO glad Daniel finally bit the bullet so to speak, and visited Joshua on his business trip. It's good they're getting to know one another better, (snicker, snicker). lol
Very interesting about the once-in-a-lifetime gender switch! Never knew that, but anything's possible, right? Sexuality is such a funny thing, with such a wide range of not sure what the right word would be, choices maybe?
Anyway, awesome chapter, as usual! But now I'm sad b/c I don't know when you'll update next and you know the next chapter will be the yum, smex chapter! hhahaha, so don't be getting in trouble in Kosovo or anything! :)
Good luck! :)
(This is still in my top five favorites!)
I am SO glad Daniel finally bit the bullet so to speak, and visited Joshua on his business trip. It's good they're getting to know one another better, (snicker, snicker). lol
Very interesting about the once-in-a-lifetime gender switch! Never knew that, but anything's possible, right? Sexuality is such a funny thing, with such a wide range of not sure what the right word would be, choices maybe?
Anyway, awesome chapter, as usual! But now I'm sad b/c I don't know when you'll update next and you know the next chapter will be the yum, smex chapter! hhahaha, so don't be getting in trouble in Kosovo or anything! :)
Good luck! :)
(This is still in my top five favorites!)
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May 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
While I wanted to leave a review for every chapter, I decided instead that I would do that for future updates and use this opportunity to just write a really long review.
Firstly, I /love/ this story. I mean /adore/ it. It's not very often that I can say that about internet fiction (especially on this site). I'm always pretty leery of starting a story on AFF, even moreso when the story is a WIP. But I can't say enough how very glad I started this one.
Daniel is very likable, even when I want to slap him very hard. The detail of both his thoughts and the /way/ he thinks is so realistic that I can relate to him even through his stupid, assholery decisions - hanging up on Joshua indeed. I seriously cursed ... /aloud/. I'm glad my husband was out of town so he couldn't make fun of me for yelling at my computer screen.
Joshua is so very adorable and sweet. He has this kindness that shines through (thanks to Daniel's assholery heh). I really find myself relating more to him than Daniel because of his kindness and compassion. Rather than berate or vilify Daniel for - somewhat - understandable behavior, he shows his true awesome nature by forgiving and just enjoying the relationship. I wonder if he knows how very much more mature he is than Daniel? And by immature I don't mean that Daniel should be just accepting this new aspect of himself - if anything, at his age, he should be more freaked out than someone in their twenties. I mean that Daniel seems very unable to walk a mile in someone's shoes or to grasp the importance of communication.
Anyway, I adore the story - as mentioned. I'm glad you're continuing to update and I'm very /very/ glad this was recommended on the_slash_pile because I might not have found this gem of a story otherwise.
Firstly, I /love/ this story. I mean /adore/ it. It's not very often that I can say that about internet fiction (especially on this site). I'm always pretty leery of starting a story on AFF, even moreso when the story is a WIP. But I can't say enough how very glad I started this one.
Daniel is very likable, even when I want to slap him very hard. The detail of both his thoughts and the /way/ he thinks is so realistic that I can relate to him even through his stupid, assholery decisions - hanging up on Joshua indeed. I seriously cursed ... /aloud/. I'm glad my husband was out of town so he couldn't make fun of me for yelling at my computer screen.
Joshua is so very adorable and sweet. He has this kindness that shines through (thanks to Daniel's assholery heh). I really find myself relating more to him than Daniel because of his kindness and compassion. Rather than berate or vilify Daniel for - somewhat - understandable behavior, he shows his true awesome nature by forgiving and just enjoying the relationship. I wonder if he knows how very much more mature he is than Daniel? And by immature I don't mean that Daniel should be just accepting this new aspect of himself - if anything, at his age, he should be more freaked out than someone in their twenties. I mean that Daniel seems very unable to walk a mile in someone's shoes or to grasp the importance of communication.
Anyway, I adore the story - as mentioned. I'm glad you're continuing to update and I'm very /very/ glad this was recommended on the_slash_pile because I might not have found this gem of a story otherwise.
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May 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I began to read this thanks to a rec on the slash pile community on livejournal. I only read this first chapter so far, but I really like the way you introduce things. In that short chapter you managed to paint distinct personality to your characters already.Love it :)
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May 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Loool! These two are hilarious! That scene in the bar was funny lol. I really like Joshua
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May 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I said it already but I love, love Joshua. He's awesome. But there was a thing that bugged me a bit as a reader who loves details. I know, you probably already had a solution to this in the next chapter(if so ignore this part of the revies- but what about Judy's addam apple? lol. Or is Joshua that effeminate. So I pictured him with a very light and elegant silk scarf that would go with the dress to make this more believable in my mind. I am the kind of reader bugged by those little details when they are not addressed in a story: like brushing teeth, taking a shower while describing the day of a character, you know?
Also, it's a good thing that nobody there tryed to speak with hand signs with Joshua huh?Or maybe if that happened he would surprise us and do it as he'd been doing it all his life and then we'e know that he had someone close to his who were deaf, mute or both XD. Let's see what chapter four has in store. So far, I've immensely enjoyed this fic, and your writing style is absolutely delightful. I like your humour, I like your descriptions and the rest of this actually lol.
Also, it's a good thing that nobody there tryed to speak with hand signs with Joshua huh?Or maybe if that happened he would surprise us and do it as he'd been doing it all his life and then we'e know that he had someone close to his who were deaf, mute or both XD. Let's see what chapter four has in store. So far, I've immensely enjoyed this fic, and your writing style is absolutely delightful. I like your humour, I like your descriptions and the rest of this actually lol.