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May 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
YES! For many reasons.
But mainly everything that happened in the end. Marriage... yay!
Also, mind giving me a hint when the MPREG comes into play? ;)
But mainly everything that happened in the end. Marriage... yay!
Also, mind giving me a hint when the MPREG comes into play? ;)
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May 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, I meant to review the last time, but I didn't get to read the chapter. And oh well, if something happens to where your beta can't do it, my offer still stands. Also, nah, I'm still going to read it, editted or not.
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May 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. I cannot what for you in wright more. I can see the old man's plains falling apart when Jun comes down PG. Some thing that has been pashed down the line.
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May 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
A couple things. First, holy crap. Your description of of Hoshi is exactly the same as my perfect dream gay guy. The hair, the eye patch, the coat. Woah.
Second, not to be bitchy, but are quite a few mistakes. I've probably done just as bad before. I'm only on the sixth chapter, so I don't know if there are more or less in the next couple chapter, but, if you want, I'd be more than happy to beta a bit. I mean, I will NOT touch the tenses, but I could help with the spelling, or just check over it a bit if you want. You can catch me up at Fictionluver(at)yahoo.com. I've got plenty of free time nowadays.
I really do like your story so far, and I don't doubt that I won't farther along. So far it's pretty good.
Second, not to be bitchy, but are quite a few mistakes. I've probably done just as bad before. I'm only on the sixth chapter, so I don't know if there are more or less in the next couple chapter, but, if you want, I'd be more than happy to beta a bit. I mean, I will NOT touch the tenses, but I could help with the spelling, or just check over it a bit if you want. You can catch me up at Fictionluver(at)yahoo.com. I've got plenty of free time nowadays.
I really do like your story so far, and I don't doubt that I won't farther along. So far it's pretty good.
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May 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow this is getting interesting. Do we know Caleb already? Please update soon
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May 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Loved this chapter. Junko is so sweet. Please update soon
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May 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good for you demon, it's people like Lisa that makes it so damn hard for people who genuinly enjoy writing. I got bashed so badly, and people giving out adivice for me to get a beat, none of those assholes offered to beta for me. Keep writing chicka I'm pissed at myself for letting peopel like her bring me down and quit writing.
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April 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
loved this chapter. Poor Hoshi. :-( I feel so sorry for him.
Cannot wait for more
I really love this story
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Cannot wait for more
I really love this story
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April 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The ending to this chapter was just precious. Junko and Hoshi are still my favorites, but Jacklon taking care of Youji like he did... that was sweet.
I still wonder how Junko will react when he finds out about his mom. I'm sure that will be.... explosive. I just hope he can realize that it's better for everyone. He doesn't have to stress about taking care of her on top of the twins and Youji, and she gets to be in a safe place with people who are trained to take care of people like her.
I still wonder how Junko will react when he finds out about his mom. I'm sure that will be.... explosive. I just hope he can realize that it's better for everyone. He doesn't have to stress about taking care of her on top of the twins and Youji, and she gets to be in a safe place with people who are trained to take care of people like her.
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April 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Loved this chapter. Poor Youji. Please update soon. Cannot wait for more
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