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'I moaned at the sight of that beautiful sight in front of me;'

Ooooh now I really wanna know how it all started, like what Talen started asking Jayden to do, how it progressed, their first time with Jayden all confused and young... LOL. Thank you so much for updating! Talen's possessiveness is yummy. I want to read your other story as well, but since I haven't read it yet, I want you to update this story more. Does that make sense? Hmm, my brain must be scrambled. After this I'm going back and rereading this whole thing. =)

ARGH COME ON!!! seriously thats just a mean cliffhanger. What happens next? Do they get together? Does Talen actually really care about Jayden or noy? Will Jayden instead cross that line and be with Ethan? PLEASE update soon.

i think you did a good job on this few chapters . its funny, interesting and youhave to love the drama lolo :) and i cant wait to read more

Great update! I read it again from the beginning, and was again impressed by the hotness that is sex with Talen, lol, and the whole dynamic going on with the main character. I like Ethan, too. I'm waiting to compare him with Talen, or to find out how Talen is going to react when he realizes his "boyfriend" is basically cheating on him...sorta. :)) Bravo!

Hi guardian. Thanks for the new chapter. It made my day. I am so glad to see that you are still working on this story. I really enjoyed chapter 4. Ethan and Jayden are an interesting pair of BFFs. They give each other emotional support. How did Ethan guess about Talen? I am guessing that Talen will bet quite jealous if he sees Ethan and Jayden acting so close at the wedding. Especially after Jayden told him that he would not flirt with other guys. Talen is the mysterious figure. He is the one whose behavior is confusing our poor Jayden. It seems Talen has been falling in love with Jayden but what are his true intentions? I am eager to see the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Oh yeah. I also hope we get more smex!

Hey! Glad to see you didn't abandon this story! Ethan is pretty funny; they do seem rather "close", him and Jayden! Is he another best friend, like Alex? And how old is Ethan? He was in Japan on business, so he's much older, right? How did Ethan and Jayden meet? Sorry for all the questions!

I noticed that you STILL don't like periods! You're still leaving them out on the end of most of your sentences. If you want someone to look over the chapter before you post it, let me know. Your spelling is good, but a few times you switch tenses. Anyway, if you do, you can email me at LisaT25@msn.com.

I can't wait to read the next update about the wedding!

Great beginning. I like how you unfolded the identity of the lovers, and the way you're developing the relationship between them. It's fascinating. Please do put me on your alert list -- tmelange at gmail

I love the new chapter. The relationship between Talen and Jayden is quite amusing. Poor Jayden seems to be quite confused about what their relationship really is. He obviously likes Talen, he just does not want to admit it. It will be interesting to see if Talen gets jealous despite everything when Ethan enters the picture. I cant wait to read more!