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for Under The Sea Romance

by TheMysticalOne

person mw0627
schedule January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
How sad, he is just a replacement.
schedule January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hehe, thanks for commenting on the Velvet Shadow! And I caught you! I was already following this story here and was wondering why the heroes were also called Raven and Logan like in the one you're posting at Xen's forum :P This ist a really nice piece of work, by the way - finally someone to do away with all the mermaid cliches^^
schedule January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
awww hot and sweet it was a nice chapter none the less and i rely am getting into this story and i thing that you are doing a great job regardless of what you think so keep you the good work!
person Juana13
schedule January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
awww! how cute. although i do wish there were more merpeople that those two could get more accquainted with....
looking forward to next chapter!! can't wait : )
schedule January 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like Logan's "subtle" moves he made on Raven. It was like he was fishing, waiting patiently until Raven was comfortable around him. Cute.
schedule January 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
awwww thats so sad :( but a good plot chapter none the less and i rely cant wait to see how this unfolds it is such a good little story and it truly is a pearl! well cant wait for the next update.
person Anon
schedule January 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I think it's excellent. You need to watch some of the physics tho...

Did you feel queasy writing this story? I only ask because I was freaking out whenever I
imagined this under water world. I guess the images my mind produced was so vivid that my brain believed
that I was under water too! I was having a mini-panic attack. LOL.
I suppose that's a credit to you as a writer for creating such a realistic atmosphere and giving
my brain such stimulating descriptions.

Fantastic Work!
~WR



person JJ
schedule January 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
thanks for updating....

Logan sure has been getting hands on with Raven...and hey kissed...looks like their friendship is starting to grow into a relationship. Now we know what Logan has been hiding from Raven - that he had another lover Aron...that was so sad, with Aron killing himself and then Logan feeling so lonely and desperate.
person circe266
schedule January 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting concept. Poor guy, changed into a merman and dumped in the middle of the ocean. I can't wait to see where you take this story.
schedule January 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I found this story an dI am glad that I have.. It is really good.