rate_review Reviews

Hehe. I'm uberly glad the brownies worked. Pff. who can say no to that? Honestly.

Love the two new chapters. ^^

-offers icecream and brownies this time for more chapters soon.-

Squeal little piggy, squealllll! ...erm, anyway! Bahahah, T_T Please continue the story! PEOPLE REVIEW DAMNIT! *begs*

Anyway... Alex point of view was funny, they are both being adorable and cute. Though I found Jason's behavior toward the end a bit weird, but I guess since Alex did sort of turn him down again, he thought that Alex didn't want anything to do with him.. Right now, my favorite character is Jason. I think it always has been, but ..yeah and I like Jullian too! I need to see more of Matt before I decide how much I like him first, :P

I also wanted to add, maybe if you rewrote your summary? Say something like, not exactly, but you get the gist:

"Jason is a blue haired punk -literally- living in the middle of Nowhere. His greatest aspiration in life used to be closing down the local arcade, that was until he meets Nowhere's newest resident, a quiet and mysterious boy that he can't quite stop thinking about. Alex is living at home with his alcoholic mother, trying to protect his younger brother and keep himself away from temptation-- namely that adorable punk kid that keeps asking him out, apparently he didn't get it when he said 'no' the first time."

I dunno, I haven't written a summary in ages, and I can only use what I know from 6 chapters, but something that lets the potential reader get more into the story might draw more readers (and reviews) in. Just a suggestion, take it or not, but I wanted to help! :)

Hi I just finished chapter three and I really love this story. I already love Jason and his family. I hope his tender heart will not get torn apart too badly. I also really like your writing style. I am happy that I get to read all these chapters at once.

Love chapter 4 and smushed is a word ☺

This is an excellent story and the characters are very endearing so please keep up the good writing. I think I fell in love with Alex when he let out that giggle in the back of Jillian's store. He seems like such a beautiful soul. It seems like Alex and Matt are in a bad situation at home. I kind of hope that Jason's story was a joke and not true. I cannot imagine living in a house like that.

Ohhh, I actually really like this story! I've seen it before, but I always skipped over it in favor of reading my regular ones, but I'm really happy I clicked this today. I absolutely love the characters, and I really wanna know what happens next! Ah, please update. xD I came in at a terrible cliffhanger~

YAY! First kiss! Sorta, and that story was sad. I can't imagine going through that especially if they never caught the dad...I love these two...hehe this is my new favorite story so please keep em comin!

I started reading this a few hrs. ago and just finished. It's a REALLY good story! I'm really curious to find out Alex's story. Why they moved there, what his mom did, etc.

I did notice two inconsistencies in the first and second chapters. You said in the first chapter that it was August, but in the second chapter, you mentioned in Alex's POV that it was a humid autumn day. Isn't August still the summer? Also in the first chapter you said Jason's last name was Brooks (an former soap actor's name btw!), but in the second chapter you mentioned another last name. Anyway, I'm just mentioning this in case you were going to go back and edit or change things. If not, don't worry about it.

Anyway, I really like this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Wow, I've been looking for a story on this site that I really liked for awhile. It had seemed that lately I couldn't find much, but then I read this and I'm defiantly excited about it. I'm shocked at the lack of reviews, because it's written very well. Defiantly better than the majority of writers on this site. Oh well, I'll review every chapter and maybe it'l jump start more reviews for you? You defiantly deserve it! :)

Also, you should post this one www.fictionpress.com, you might have better luck on that website..