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ch 32: awww. polinues' first taste of murder. and the aftermath. i think it's sort of cool that he's not so squeamish about it. it gives his character some depth.

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i enjoyed the chapter! polinues' personal touch to that necklace was so cute.

i love this story.

i've been a naughty reader and have been reading through it without reviewing(currently on chapter 26), but i will get to that after classes end for me this month when i have the time to review each chapter. i love this story!!!


i'm surprised not many people have read this. it probably has something to do with the format of your first chapter (spacing between paragraphs, or lack thereof), which some people take as a sign of a novice (aka bad) writer. but you are an EXCELLENT storyteller and i love the characters and what plot we are given. the setting and world is also pretty interesting!!

i almost skipped over this story too because of the inital lack of spacing between paragraphs, but i'm glad i gave it a go because i would have missed this jewel.

awesome awesome story! i'll be following it!

ch 27: awww..........this chapter made me cry (literally; almost had to grab the tissues but i settle for wiping them off on my shirt). poor leyjen. i wonder what happened with amraeen. i mean, it probably has to do with being bribed or cohered into cutting ties with leyjen, but that's just harsh. :(

ch 28: "the Head Healer giving him a prescription of St. John’s Wort tablets, to tide him over for the two week holiday. "

this made me laugh out loud. lol. it was so strange.

anyway, poor leyjen, again. XD

gosh i want to smack that vampyr(sp?) upside the head and tell him to spill the beans and not make everything so complicated. but i guess then it'd ruin the mystery.

ch 29: aww poor polinues. his facial disfiguration D:

at least brigale is giving him a chance. and wow tisek(Sp?) is a real bitch. i hope leyjen gets out of that trap.

30: awwwwwwwww AGAIN!

Poor BRIGALE!! that was such a surprise. i wonder why the uncle wanted to slaughter the family. ehhh...

anyway awesome chapter, again. i enjoyed reading it....only one more to go and i'm all caught up!

ch 31: goooosssssh that bitch died a good death. nice way of getting rid of tisek's character. XD

i liked how polinues isn't adversive to kicking a corpse, being 11-12 and all...

but gosh it's so cool that polinues and amraeen are more involved with one another, and it's nice to see amraeen is back (even if he's lurking). i'm thinking that leyjen will probably find out eventually (or not!). who knows....

exciting chapter and i can't wait to see what polinues needs help with!

I think authors who end their chapters with a cliffhanger should be spanked.Very often.
Don't you agree;)?You do realize that you have succeded to turn a cliche vampire story into something original and different. Yeah, I know, it's amazing.
But I must ask you already have a clear storyline form beginning to end or are you the Lost-ing your way through it(you realize the screenwriters for that series have no clue have to end it)
Where did you get an inspiration for Polineus(from th emovie El orfanato perhaps?)
I thought this will be shota because Polineus is a kid and Lenyen is not(I mean I know some ppl claim 10 years isn't a big age gap but it really is.Time is something a human being can't bypass.When someon eis 10 years older it means thhe is always ten years ahead of you no matter you're 21,31,41 he's always 31,41,51.I just don't get it th how will story evolve with Lenyen and Polinesu.

Hey! Jeez, it feels like forever since I've reviewed... Anyway, I loved chapter 31! I felt so much better finally knowing why Amraeen broke it of with Leyjen. Pretty crappy of Leyjen's father to order Amraeen to do so. What's the need to be jealous of his son's relationship with Amraeen if he has Leyjen's mom?! That pissed me off... I also wonder what the premonition he showed to Amraeen was if it was bad enough to make him shudder. The fact that Amraeen's blood tear, which Leyjen couldn't accept before, is what brought Leyjen back to life was really cute. I'm also glad that Tisek is dead. The bastard! I totally wanted to jump into the story when he was whupping Leyjen's behind. Talk about tough to read... Oh! And Polinues was so adorable with his jealousy of Amraeen and his rage with the realization that Tisek wanted Leyjen to be his slave. Ah, this seems a little much, so I'll end it here. ^.^

Wow. What an emotional and revealing episode. As always, this story has such a strong impact on me. I am so sorry for sweet Leyjen. He still cared about Tisek after all the abusive treatment. Tisek must have been drinking himself into insanity. I understand his desire for revenge but he was planning to betray Leyjen and Pol in such a horrible way. Just terrible. Like Pol, I question the motives of Leyjen's parents in separating Amraeen and Leyjen. I feel like there maybe some jealousy involved. I want Leyjen and Amraeen and Pol to be together. I want Amraeen to stay. I love him so much and I see how hard it is for him to be away from Leyjen. It hurts when I think of how happy Leyjen would be to see him. To just get an explanation of why he left like that. After all these three characters have suffered and will suffer through. I think they deserve to have a happy ending at some point. (I need to get over my Amraeen crush but I was very happy to see him again.) Good job Darkling Willow. I can't wait to read the next chapter.