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Eric and Zephyr make me so happy. Eric isn't at all grateful to Zephyr for saving him. He is quite the prickly princess. I guess it makes the chase more fun for Zephyr.

It sounds as if Logan will not give up easily on finding Erin. I was surprised that he would expect Erin to come back after he locked him up. I am wondering what Garrick's country is like since he is not used to technology. I am glad that he and Erin are starting to feel a little attraction to each other.

yeah I would aim there too;))

A little too fast pace just a little hard to follow, had to scroll back to figure out who was who cus the names were so similar, but it captured my attention, and made me want to read more, All in all I like it. I hope you continue the story.

Well you know that I love your pairings. I think that Garrick is the most arrogant and hilarious prince ever. He doesn't seem to realize that Erin is just as smart as he is. He should be thanking Erin for watching out for him. I think that Casey is going to turn out to be trouble because he will be trying to betray them at every turn. I love Zephyr and Eric. They are so cute. Zephyr is truly charming. I love how he is not shy about showing Eric that he likes him. I think that it is really cute to see them trying to communicate through the language difference. I can't wait to read more.

I still don't get what a Chivy is?And why the hell is it called Chivy?*laughs*
btw. you started with a pretty cliche storytelling with Eric( weak blond guy, strong darked haired one, one yells, other one kisses with force) so I think you owe your character a life giver position( Eric) because this story will loose a lot if it's not doen.
There are just to many blond weak life cariers in the stories online, published or not.
I'd hate to see this one become a mpreg fousome in which the bitchy blond pregnant wifes are also brothers.
See the lameness?
so, you can leave Erin as a Chivy, but the other one shouldn't be one.
But hey, I'm suggesting it.
You do what you want with your story.

Love chapter 2. Does this mean that Eric and Erin can only sleep with someone if they are married or mated to that person? I can see that Erin and Garrick are going to be stuck together for a few days.

I'm going to review, even though I edited this :) I definitely feel this story is coming along good so far. I didn't see any mistakes, which would've been my fault for not catching them (at least any obvious ones) :P I am curious as to what the key does, and this box. And hopefully the brothers won't find themselves in too much danger. Good start so far! :)

Happy New Year! Very nice new story. I love Zephyr the kiss stealer already. Little does he know that the key fell right into his arms already. Funny. Are Erin and Eric twins? I can't wait to read more.