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OH NO!!!! LEAVE JAMIE ALONE!!!! >.<

I've enjoyed the storyline so far but only so much as I can follow it. My actual first thought after finshing was I wish I had a character map to help follow along. The editing needs to be worked on and it might be best to stop jumping from one storyline to another without any sort of transition. At one point I did think to try and figure out what happpened with Janus and it seemed like he just disappeared, which is something that actually happens alot in this story. Characters appear from nowhere and then simply vanish with no explanation as to where they went. Also, parts of the story like the Ran, Eli and Conor saga seem interesting but you never go into any detail as to how they went from overwhelming sadness to a happy little couple in the blink of an eye, not even explaining how their injuries healed. Overall I do wish you would go back to earlier chapters and work out some of the kinks before continuing on with this story.

It's a good story... though I admit in the middle of the story I had troubles keeping up with the relationships. It was a bit difficult keeping track with numerous characters but when I got past it I began to enjoy the story.

I wish you'd be more descriptive, though; it would help the readers' imagination of the characters and the world you created. You have the potential for story-telling - just hone your skills. :-D

Btw, how many kingdoms are there? I keep getting surprised when another prince/king comes up.

I am sorry for poor heartbroken Nicholas. Jeffrey should decide if he really loves Nicholas or not. If he loves him, how could he break his heart so many times. I wish Jamie was there to talk some sense into both of them. I understand that he feels sorry for Arian, but that is not a good reason for rejecting the person he truly loves. Especially when Nicholas has been waiting for so long. I can't wait to see how that will turn out. It is nice to see Jamie and Sebastian living happily on the mountain. I wonder how Leon will react to the news that Caelane has been changed into a 20 year old and is pregnant with Anders' child. At least Anders is free to marry Caelane now. I also wonder what is going on with Nicholas's brother Devin. I hope he and Ray have made up by now.

thank you very much! please don't do that again with Jamies' kids!

I don't think I ever read a story with more plot twists and drama. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Yaoilovers, I am so happy that Jamie's baby Ana was returned to him. That was a very heartwarming scene. I wonder what Sebastian would say if he found out who ended up saving his son from the white Zhanthia. Eli really does love Jamie. He is like his guardian angel. I laughed out loud when Jamie did not tell Caelane about his condition. That poor boy is going to give birth before someone tells him what is going on. I wonder if Sebastian will be happy living in the mountains for long. I also wonder what Jamie will say when he finds out about his decision. Would Sebastian's parents take the throne back from him or would he have to name someone as the new king?

Your welcome but I hope I didn't sound too snobish when I wrote the review, I must learn not to post reviews when I'm having a bad day ^_^
I looked 'Fey' up on the internet and I did spell it correct but I also learnt that in Scottish 'Fey' means 'fated to die' 0.0 I hope that doesn't apply to little Fey because he sounds so cute.
Poor Ana! Kidnapped twice and he hasn't opened his eyes yet, poor little thing. I really hope he gets back home safely. I now feel sorry for Arian, not an emotion I would have thought I would feel for him but I do. I still think he could have told Jeffery about Jeffery's father raping him instead of running away but I understand his reasons for leaving.
Thank you for the lovely description of Jamie, I now have a good mental image of what he looks like. That also helps me visulise the babies so thank you for that. :)
Keep writing and I look forward to the next update.

This chapter was very stressful to read with the baby's kidnapping. I am going to join Jamie in hoping and praying and begging and pleading for the baby to be returned right away. It hurts my heart too much to imagine that Jamie is separated from his newborn baby especially when Jamie and Ana are both so innocent. I can't bear it! Of course Sebastian deserves any bad thing that happens to him. I still haven't forgiven him for what he did to Eli and Conor. I can't believe Jeffrey would put Nicholas aside to help Arian after what Arian just did to Caelane. I have some sympathy for Arian's insanity, but Nicholas does not deserve suffer because of Arian's bad life decisions. I don't blame Nicholas for telling Jeffrey off. Jamie should not have left his newborn babies unattended to go checking on Arian. Even though Arian did not arrange the kidnapping, I feel like it is his fault for causing Jamie to leave his babies alone in the room.

jeez...can Jamie get a break for once? there's always trouble around the corners, if that baby is dead or raped as a grown man i am soo dropping this story.