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December 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good start can't wait for more! Interesting characters! The nasty spy wears robes... does that means he endulges in a bit of hocus-pocus, as well as other amorous hanky-panky? LOL poor Frail! G
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December 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love the characters, maybe there should be more of a reason Frail is annoyed by the spy and perhaps a bit more personal depth. The pace is great, but this story needs a ton more chapters, so get to the chaptering. :D
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December 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved Chapter 2. i did not want it to end. This is a very good story. Keep up the good writing. Now I am going to be worrying about Frain and his sore thighs and behind.
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December 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like the story so far; it's very interesting. The only thing that would make it better would be if everyone was human. I think if I knew this story was about weird non-human things, I wouldn't have read it.
But anyway, I can pretend everyone's human and I like it so far!
But anyway, I can pretend everyone's human and I like it so far!
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December 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting chapter 1. I think the pacing is perfect. It is the start of a great adventure. Everyone is pushing the poor spy guy around. I would love to read the next chapter.