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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thank for all the pointer. Now I am confident in myself and I have a lot of idea.
Nah, can't do this because you forgot some important rule, that in this case apply to me.
-Your mother tongue's not English (in my case it's French) and you just learn English, no problem, nobody's going to say anything, as long as you can write about thick, long and big thing.
Seriously, there's too much story as you've described. Although that it's a 18+ site, we all know that there are a lot of teen here. Not that they hare the monopoly of cliche and stupid story. I prefer Nifty for this.
For the rape part, I am in the minority, it seems, that don't enjoy read about this. It's because I am a victim of this abomination. Surely if it's was not the case, I'd like this. Yeah sure. You can't know what's it's do to me when I see girl ask in their review for: "rape, rape him good." or "I want a guy to this to me, It's true love" (real comment read here). There are just one or two story with rape that loved reading because it's was not the main purpose of the story and it's serve the story.
You make me laugh with your description of personage and you exemple. It didn't take time to think about this but it's so true, when aply to first person that nobody talk or think like this.
I didn't read your story because of the summary and warning (N/C). It seemed cliche. Is it? Or it's a parody?
Gwengwel
p.s. As I already mentioned, English's not my mother tongue. I try to check for all my faults, I hope that you can read me and understand my writing well.
Nah, can't do this because you forgot some important rule, that in this case apply to me.
-Your mother tongue's not English (in my case it's French) and you just learn English, no problem, nobody's going to say anything, as long as you can write about thick, long and big thing.
Seriously, there's too much story as you've described. Although that it's a 18+ site, we all know that there are a lot of teen here. Not that they hare the monopoly of cliche and stupid story. I prefer Nifty for this.
For the rape part, I am in the minority, it seems, that don't enjoy read about this. It's because I am a victim of this abomination. Surely if it's was not the case, I'd like this. Yeah sure. You can't know what's it's do to me when I see girl ask in their review for: "rape, rape him good." or "I want a guy to this to me, It's true love" (real comment read here). There are just one or two story with rape that loved reading because it's was not the main purpose of the story and it's serve the story.
You make me laugh with your description of personage and you exemple. It didn't take time to think about this but it's so true, when aply to first person that nobody talk or think like this.
I didn't read your story because of the summary and warning (N/C). It seemed cliche. Is it? Or it's a parody?
Gwengwel
p.s. As I already mentioned, English's not my mother tongue. I try to check for all my faults, I hope that you can read me and understand my writing well.
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god. Seriously, I laughed so hard it was like one of those silent, body-convulsing laughs....Anyway, for as hilarious as this "story" was, it was actually quite helpful. The things you mention sound absolutely ridiculous in this context,but then a writer will look at their own piece and see they may have actually done some of these things. I'm glad you mentioned the "way to start" with an persistent, annoying alarm clock that some how actually woke you up late. I swear, if I read another story (or webcomic for that matter, because I'm just *that* cool...) that starts off this way...well I'll probably be severely annoyed. I've read a few parody guides like this and every time I find them funny and original, but a reality check as well. But hey, if there is such a huge market for writing this stuff, there has got to be people who actually enjoy reading it...whatever. I'm going to read your other story now, thanks!
~Iconic
~Iconic
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I sooo loved this! You speak so true....not to meantion the genree Torture is also (next to the usual rape and hurt) Long and often badly overdone...sadly.
I sooo loved this! You speak so true....not to meantion the genree Torture is also (next to the usual rape and hurt) Long and often badly overdone...sadly.
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
In case the two-in-one review I already gave isn't good enough....
lol XD This was a little hard for me to read (because the uke grated on my nerves >_>) but it was still very funny. ^w^ ....Yah, that's all I got. XP
See ya, dude. =3
lol XD This was a little hard for me to read (because the uke grated on my nerves >_>) but it was still very funny. ^w^ ....Yah, that's all I got. XP
See ya, dude. =3
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It would probably be more humorous if it wasn't so long,
but alas, you do raise some good points.
~WR
Onward to Part 2.
but alas, you do raise some good points.
~WR
Onward to Part 2.
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I laughed so hard I thought I would pee my panties. Okay, maybe not that hard, but that was extremely funny and true. I've definitely tried to steer clear of those stories. But you forgot to put in that the AUTHOR should not use correct grammar whether it be on purpose or not. Like using 'definately' instead of 'definitely' and other such words. Also, if you're looking for some stories that have good plot, good characters and a very unique story-line, check out Moonlight Denial by Darkness which actually has characters that are of every age and gender, ranging from youngsters to 30-40-something year-olds. Also, Undesirable by Velvet Mace where the main character actually begins as a straight guy but then kinda turns into a bi-guy. And here's the stinger...the stories actually make it past 12 chapters. In fact, they make it past 40 chapters! Now, I'm off to read your next one-shot.