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I really loved this. Honestly, I'm not even sure which ending I liked better! They were both good!

Hello Ki-Chan, I don't know if you will read this but I hope you do.

I, LOVED, your story. It was fatastically sadistic and erotic; it was original and yet somehow not off the wall. I really really hate to admit, but my favorite character WAS Taylor. She was the only "real" dom per se, and I was so happy to read the ending where she finally got a hold of Asurie to train her. (Frankly I thought Asurie's Revenge would be on Taylor but I'm kind of glad it wasn't.)

This story was incredibly well-written and had very creative tortures and punishments! The characters were in depth and believable; Aaron did not really do anything to break her will and because of that Asurie was ultimately still rebellious. That in itself is utterly awesome and refreshing, it's hard to describe. A submissive that is pretending is the most fun, because we're all wondering when they'll be force to reveal their true colors.

All in all I sincerely enjoyed your story and all of its plots and smut and BSDM goodness! Thank you for allowing us access to your lovely characters!

for the first ending of your fanfic, the masters heart one, i think you should right another story continueing on from there:) i really like the stories though

i like ending 3!

I can't believe it's over! It was really good, I hope you'll write more soon! I liked the first ending the best, I guess it was the happiest. I've always wondered what Master's name was, I like the name Aaron for him. But I was confused at the last chapter, Asurie's Revenge- did Asurie keep Master/Aaron as a pet, or did she permanently trade with Taylor? And is there a hole in the blinding box so the pets can breathe? They'd suffocate otherwise, wouldn't they?

[Author's Response]
First off, I want to sincerely thank everyone who left a review on the story. It really helped motivate me and I'm tickled pink that you enjoyed reading my amateur work.

I figured I'd reply to some of the comments here since a few things were left... weird I guess. XD

First, the blinding box does indeed have air holes, it's not THAT sadistic. *laughs*

I'm glad you guys preferred the first ending, I do love sap but it also makes a dull read... The second ending may have been a bit unbelievable but Master and Taylor had a small history of making sexy yet threatening bets with each other, just a Taylor underestimated what Aaron would put her through after the Halloween bet, so too did Aaron underestimate what she would do. All I can say is "He thought she'd go easy on him." She didn't. XD To say the least.

As for the third ending, yes, Taylor permanently traded pets with Asurie. I tried to make it clear how much Taylor wanted Aaron through most of it, to the point where she forgot Will existed. As for Asurie becoming like the other pet owners... well she didn't. XD She was angry enough at Aaron to try to kill him several times, she can look past her occasional lustful day dream to remember his pretty brutal previous treatment. As for how she'll treat Will... "slave" is in massive quotes. They'll need to keep up appearances in the cabal but otherwise they'll be quite kind and sweet to each other.

I toyed with the idea of an ending with Taylor getting what she deserves too, but frankly three endings was a bit much for me already. Sorry if my enjoyment of femdom skewed the endings a bit beyond how the story started out. =P Admittedly, my own "cannon" ending to the story is Master and Taylor leaving the cabal and becoming a couple while freeing Will and Asurie who also became a couple but it was so gushingly sappy and non-sex-filled that I couldn't write it. I had to remind myself that I was writing smut. XD

Anyway, thanks again for reading the story everyone! Glad you enjoyed it. Be on the lookout for more! ^.^

I liked the first ending the best. It shows that Master does have a heart and that it is not made of stone. The second was, frankly, unbelievable as I doubt that however much he cared for Asurie, he would never allow himself to be degraded like that. As for the third ending, I find it hard to believe that after all the humiliation and pain she's been through, Asurie would do that to another person.

It would have been fitting and appropriate for Taylor to be forced to be the submissive, just to let her experience for herself what she regularly put other people through. Especially by Will and Asurie. Now THAT would have been a fitting ending.

Still, I loved this series and hope to read some of your other work again! Well done!

Linda

Hey, love, love, love this story. Update soon?

This is a great story, though I think you mix your tenses up now and then. I love it though.

Doesn't she realise she's his slave and has to do what she's told? Silly girl.

Keep up the good work!

wow, it's getting good!!! I thought that she would be jealous, but that's just me haha. I can't believe she's finally out! especially after such sweet sex and kisses. I'm wondering how she'll be re-captured...? or perhaps who will capture her next.