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March 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It's been like forever since you updated so please have mercy and continue. I hope his father rescues him and they get to punish the guy together.
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November 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Excellent story
Here is some suggestions that I would love
Enemas for long periods
vibrators and cock ring.
Also please update within six months or I will have to give on this excellent story. I hate having to do that. Cause I love this story and so want to know what is going to happen next. email me when you update if you want.
Here is some suggestions that I would love
Enemas for long periods
vibrators and cock ring.
Also please update within six months or I will have to give on this excellent story. I hate having to do that. Cause I love this story and so want to know what is going to happen next. email me when you update if you want.
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October 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like the captor's POV -- that's rare on this site for this kind of story. Looking forward to more!
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October 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Another excellent chapter. :3 I'm REALLY looking forward to the next one.
I had the thought that it would be really cool if you did a chapter from the victim's point of view. After all, you never know, maybe he does secretly enjoy it all. :)
I had the thought that it would be really cool if you did a chapter from the victim's point of view. After all, you never know, maybe he does secretly enjoy it all. :)
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October 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You fucking TEASE, Loveff! Only you do deliver on the toys.
I would have asked for catheterization but you pre-empted me there. It is a major fetish, especially induced dependency, but that is damn extreme. Yes to the sound!
Mummification.
Here's a wierd fetish for you if you like: offering food and then "feeding" it into the ass; with emphasis on humiliation and a lesson in taking nothing for granted. A nurturing act becomes punishment.
Of course an enema with a stress position and waiting until the sweat starts dripping.
Play piercing. Suturing (not cutting just suture needles, wound care and bandaging is sexy, too, the morning-after bandage is like this neat present).
I really love your boy's ballsiness. Boy does he focus on his goals! Will be an excellent fuck when/if he transfers that intensity. After all sex is an escape and he'll get no other until Dave's done with him. You're developing Dave, and I like it. It is whip-smart of him to let "slip" about the unfortunate predecessor.
The father is an awesome plot device. Please develop the hell out of that character.
About the wax; it's funny how some love it, some hate. But we're all different. Wierdly enough I can't enjoy a simple spanking by hand, and love a flogger.
I would have asked for catheterization but you pre-empted me there. It is a major fetish, especially induced dependency, but that is damn extreme. Yes to the sound!
Mummification.
Here's a wierd fetish for you if you like: offering food and then "feeding" it into the ass; with emphasis on humiliation and a lesson in taking nothing for granted. A nurturing act becomes punishment.
Of course an enema with a stress position and waiting until the sweat starts dripping.
Play piercing. Suturing (not cutting just suture needles, wound care and bandaging is sexy, too, the morning-after bandage is like this neat present).
I really love your boy's ballsiness. Boy does he focus on his goals! Will be an excellent fuck when/if he transfers that intensity. After all sex is an escape and he'll get no other until Dave's done with him. You're developing Dave, and I like it. It is whip-smart of him to let "slip" about the unfortunate predecessor.
The father is an awesome plot device. Please develop the hell out of that character.
About the wax; it's funny how some love it, some hate. But we're all different. Wierdly enough I can't enjoy a simple spanking by hand, and love a flogger.
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October 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting concept, loving the descriptions going on - not often you see this already humbled approach (going on with a kidnapped person) but it seems to suit the character that you are building. As for Dave - I wait to see his background, if your going to disclose it at all. The toys sound good too, and the dependancy issues as well, he's going to have to give in completley to survive this - by the looks of it!!!
Definetly going to keep an eye out for this fiction to be up-dated.
Definetly going to keep an eye out for this fiction to be up-dated.
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October 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story is truly amazing, and I hope to read more very soon. If that little sub reacts so badly to wax, I can't imagine what penetration would do for him.
The captor is excellently portrayed too. : ) Perhaps a few toys pulled out of his bag would be a fun addition to it all?
Looking forward to the update!
The captor is excellently portrayed too. : ) Perhaps a few toys pulled out of his bag would be a fun addition to it all?
Looking forward to the update!
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October 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hooottttt. you're very creative and you write well, two very big thumbs up. most people who go for this kind of scenario overplay the psychosis of the captor and make it unconvincing; you did a great job making me believe. this is definitely worthy wank material. :) i hope there will be more!
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October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, now you're bookmarked! I was surprised you have only one story so far. You write very well, so I guess you have other stories elsewhere. Please add them here, too.
This is one of my favorite scenarios and you're doing it very well. If I have crit, it's that the captive is too perfect a sub for a young near-virgin. Unless he watches a lot of porn, and reads a lot of Adultfanfiction! He knows too well to say "sir" and how to respond appropriately. But I think you should go on in this vein because the other option, having him struggle emotionally and resist, gets tedious. That's how most people write these victim characters, and I like that yours is different. I just would encourage you to give him a background that justifies his very sensible submission. Maybe a strict upbringing, maybe he's just very wise. Let us know where he's coming from. In fact, I would really like to know his name and all about him. More exposure means he's more helpless, more powerless, and much more sexy!
But a slow reveal is best, I guess. You've just got me all excited and impulsive here.
In terms of realism, personally I do not find hot wax painful unless its spilled very close, so almost the flame's closeness is the pain. It's relative though to each person. I think hot wax is a fucking reward! I suppose some people must try it once and never again, but lucky me, I love the hell out of it and its cheap and convenient.
Requests, if its not too bold: God I love toys. Just basic stuff really is hot, every time, to read about. But if you want to unload an entire catalog's worth of silicone on this charactor you would get no argument here.
Thank-you for writing!
This is one of my favorite scenarios and you're doing it very well. If I have crit, it's that the captive is too perfect a sub for a young near-virgin. Unless he watches a lot of porn, and reads a lot of Adultfanfiction! He knows too well to say "sir" and how to respond appropriately. But I think you should go on in this vein because the other option, having him struggle emotionally and resist, gets tedious. That's how most people write these victim characters, and I like that yours is different. I just would encourage you to give him a background that justifies his very sensible submission. Maybe a strict upbringing, maybe he's just very wise. Let us know where he's coming from. In fact, I would really like to know his name and all about him. More exposure means he's more helpless, more powerless, and much more sexy!
But a slow reveal is best, I guess. You've just got me all excited and impulsive here.
In terms of realism, personally I do not find hot wax painful unless its spilled very close, so almost the flame's closeness is the pain. It's relative though to each person. I think hot wax is a fucking reward! I suppose some people must try it once and never again, but lucky me, I love the hell out of it and its cheap and convenient.
Requests, if its not too bold: God I love toys. Just basic stuff really is hot, every time, to read about. But if you want to unload an entire catalog's worth of silicone on this charactor you would get no argument here.
Thank-you for writing!