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October 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
more god i want more of this lovely pair i want to read more u have officially made me super fan of your work. so yeah i hope i make you fell good cuz u make fell nice i love your writing oh well i hope that you continue ur lovely writing so i can review more of it!
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October 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I haven't stopped by in here for while so i apologise for this late review. hehehe
I honestly only read the stories you wrote about these two characters, Tristan and Hayden. The two stories that are posted hehehe, i love them! i really do, and i hope you continue to write more of them and their developing relationship. I read this first before the other so the beginning sorta confused me, like i was missing out on episode one or something so i looked through your profile and found "Just one chance..."
then i reviewed! :D cos how cud i not! ;P
I really do hope to read more about these two guys! :D
I honestly only read the stories you wrote about these two characters, Tristan and Hayden. The two stories that are posted hehehe, i love them! i really do, and i hope you continue to write more of them and their developing relationship. I read this first before the other so the beginning sorta confused me, like i was missing out on episode one or something so i looked through your profile and found "Just one chance..."
then i reviewed! :D cos how cud i not! ;P
I really do hope to read more about these two guys! :D
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September 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh yes more corruption! love it!
tristan held out for 30 minutes! damn! hayden is so evil!
hopefully we'll get to see a more adventurous tristan. he still need to figure out what he does and does not like....hint hint nudge nudge....get your butt back here and write some more!
tristan held out for 30 minutes! damn! hayden is so evil!
hopefully we'll get to see a more adventurous tristan. he still need to figure out what he does and does not like....hint hint nudge nudge....get your butt back here and write some more!
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It just gets better x
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Damn! I had a whole review and it didn't go thru. Ok, Reader's Digest version: I really like this story! I like the fact that Tristan thinks he may be gay and he's so nonchalant w/it; where I think most boys would be totally freaking out!
And speaking of Tristan, poor thing, having Sarah pop over just when he gets to the good part! Hahah And seriously, half an hour blow job??? Isn't that kinda long? Just sayin'.....
There are a few typos; no biggies: your instead of you're, its instead of it's, bare children should be bear, and should be an, it's a long right, should be ride, to should be too, he should be we, their = they're, boney=bony, fooling = foolish, tem should be them. Anyway, sorry I don't mean to be picky. If you want someone to look over your next chapter, you can email me. I proofread a few stories on here. LisaT25@msn.com
Anyway, looking forward to reading all about the science center!
And speaking of Tristan, poor thing, having Sarah pop over just when he gets to the good part! Hahah And seriously, half an hour blow job??? Isn't that kinda long? Just sayin'.....
There are a few typos; no biggies: your instead of you're, its instead of it's, bare children should be bear, and should be an, it's a long right, should be ride, to should be too, he should be we, their = they're, boney=bony, fooling = foolish, tem should be them. Anyway, sorry I don't mean to be picky. If you want someone to look over your next chapter, you can email me. I proofread a few stories on here. LisaT25@msn.com
Anyway, looking forward to reading all about the science center!
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hilarious! Tristan is definitely in over his head with Hayden and Mitch. Hayden seems to really love him though. Poor Sarah - chased away! So funny. These guys are really good story material.
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi Maxx!
Here's all the thinking and questioning and regret and emotions of what happened in the first part that I was looking for! Bah, you should just put these in to chapters instead of calling them one-shots. :P I really enjoyed this "chapter" a lot and felt that I could really imagine how everything was going on, all the emotions flickering across people's faces and the body language. I really like the insight you provided in to Hayden's character, like how he's not sure how he feels about not being recognized/respected or having some kind of rank within his life currently. I'm also quite surprised he was able to hold out for so long with Tristan going down on him for over 30 minutes! lol.
It's too bad that Hayden didn't get in to Mitch more, but I guess he understands that school/bus ride aren't exactly the best of times to have the kind of conversation he wants to have with him. I guess Mitch will just have to wait for that meeting with Hayden's knuckle sandwich. ;)
Hopefully you plan on expanding these series and write more of these delightful "one-shots." :D
Take care and have fun writing! I can't wait!
Here's all the thinking and questioning and regret and emotions of what happened in the first part that I was looking for! Bah, you should just put these in to chapters instead of calling them one-shots. :P I really enjoyed this "chapter" a lot and felt that I could really imagine how everything was going on, all the emotions flickering across people's faces and the body language. I really like the insight you provided in to Hayden's character, like how he's not sure how he feels about not being recognized/respected or having some kind of rank within his life currently. I'm also quite surprised he was able to hold out for so long with Tristan going down on him for over 30 minutes! lol.
It's too bad that Hayden didn't get in to Mitch more, but I guess he understands that school/bus ride aren't exactly the best of times to have the kind of conversation he wants to have with him. I guess Mitch will just have to wait for that meeting with Hayden's knuckle sandwich. ;)
Hopefully you plan on expanding these series and write more of these delightful "one-shots." :D
Take care and have fun writing! I can't wait!
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
heyy
i really liked this :D i think i will see if i like any other of your stories and if i do ill comment (i will probs comment if i dont but not flames!! just saying i didnt enjoy it as much as the other ect...)
Edaj x
i really liked this :D i think i will see if i like any other of your stories and if i do ill comment (i will probs comment if i dont but not flames!! just saying i didnt enjoy it as much as the other ect...)
Edaj x