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I love Azale - he is such a charmer, and he is cuddly in bed too! The story is very good so far. Poor Jamie needs to lighten up and enjoy his robot. I can understand his nervousness since he stated that he prefers to be more submissive than dominant. I guess it is up to Azale to be the dominant partner. That should be interesting to see. I just hope Jamie's dad will be happy with Azale too.

At Chapter 2, I have a good sense of your main character, but the love interest is still, well, robotic. And that's appropriate. However if all he says and does is preprogrammed, then he's basically a toy that markets itself, and manipulates its own consumer. That's disturbing. Its like living with a commercial in a human body-- and having sex with a commercial! Or is Azale able to be independent, and make choices other than serving his manufacturers' interests? I know you probably plan to explore that question and I guess the tension of not knowing is good. I mean, it's suspenseful. Also it helps me get involved emotionally in the story. I hope knowing that you've provoked me to feel and think is encouraging. Finally, the promise of future kinky sex is definitely welcome! I just hope Azale is not a humanoid version of viral marketing, or if he is, that he's also more than that. Very interesting, disturbing, and exciting story! Thanks.

As of this point it is a good story. The plot line is excellent and I am looking forward to reading more.

Aww that's sweet and sexy at the same time lol I love it

Aww, you made me sound so mean! A few mistakes doesn't equal horrible ;) I swear, some of the people on here write worse than I did elementary school!
I think Jamie is hilarious all flustered in this chapter. I could just imagine Azale sitting there thinking 'what the hell is this guy's problem?' I've always had a weakness for AI/robot stories - you always have to question at what point do they truly start becoming their own person?
I don't know if you enjoy fanfics at all but there's a FF8 Seifer/Squall fanfic "Accept Me" that is absolutely amazing, dealing with robots. If you don't like/don't know S/S you might want to check it out anyway as the author freely admits their fairly out of character.
http://www.doushi-sumeragi.net/fanfic/fictions/accept1.htm
You should check it out. After you write the next chapter of H.E.A.R.T of course!!

Ooooh i likee, if only they had pretty robots in real life lol. looking forward to the next chapter xx

Very cool. Please continue to write this story. It is very unique. Can't wait for other chapters to come.

Lots of love,
Kristen

Ah ha we see he isn't so shy and sad now is he, that was all a puppy in the window act! Now Jamie better watch out.

Jamie is so naive. It's about time he "woke up". I obviously has wants and needs that have so far been unmet. Azale is delicious!

Take that pushy saleswoman lol. Good work so far. Thank you.