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Please, please, tell me you are going to write more on this one... If not I think I'm going to think your a tease ;) Good work, great characters, everything that makes a story good and your writing style is fantastic.

hi there. I must say you have a very captivating way of writing. i think the way you draw your audience in and keep them engaged in the plot is amazing. i hope you don't mind that i review both chapters in this one review. ch.1- i like the fact that you are so descriptive. it makes it easier to envision the images and that's always a plus. (i admit though i would have liked to get more of a description of the main character, although it is possible i overlooked it in which case disregard this statement) i also like the fact that you leave some mystery to everything without making it seem aloof that readers will pass it off as irrelevant. and the closing sentence to the chapter does it's job well to make readers want to continue the story. ch.2- i think it was a nice touch to give some insight to the main character's (jessica) daily life before jumping back into the action. in my opinion it sets a good pace and tone for the story. and i like the easy interaction between the characters. i realize i may have rambled on a bit and i apologize for that. in any case i hope you decide to continue this story and look forward to reading your works. later :]

wow this story is really good hope you decide to continue with it
-shade

Hey I really like this story, you should really update it. I wonder who this woman is, the one who saves her (Actually I don't think you have said the name of the main character either).

I like the fact the knight in shining armor is a she for once.

I've never bothered reviewing a story here on AFF due to lack of interest, but yours has certainly caught mine.

Please do continue. I look forward to your next update.

It has potential, please do continue.

Not bad, not bad at all. This looks like it'll really be interesting. I can't wait to read more, hope you update soon!