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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm not going to continue. You're style of writing is good, the idea original. But I just read the first three chapter and I don't like were this story go.
The fact that Richard is Michael or not doesn't change that what Nicholas do (and the doctor too) is morally wrong and illegal. He lie, drug and rape (yes what he do to Richard it's rape. The guy lost his memory, he is on drug and on false impression, his judgment is altered) him because he think it's a long lost lover (or something like this). The lack of moral and the egocentrism of Nicholas in the sex scene make me grrrrrr.
Since it's a love story, again, the fact that he is or not Michael doesn't change that in the end Richard/Michael going to forgive Nicholas what he do to him (personal opinion based on reading other story like this in the pass).
I have a problem with Richard attitude too. The guy lost his memory, but he accept everything that "stranger" tell him. Ho, I'm gay, ho I'm fiancé. The same day he have sex with his "fiancé"!! Homosexuality it's hard to accept, not something that people just say: ho, yes, ok...
I repeat the it's not your writing skill here that I doesn't like but the story himself. I hate manipulator without moral and this is really personal point to each person. I know since your have talent that people are going to like it. If you write an other story with an other subject, I'm going to give a try.
I hope that you don't hate me now, but I'm a frank person and I think that all opinion's good.
If you want to answer me, explain your point of view or just cry after me, email me with my nickname at hotmail.
Gwengwel
p.s. English's not my mother tongue, I hope you can read me well.
The fact that Richard is Michael or not doesn't change that what Nicholas do (and the doctor too) is morally wrong and illegal. He lie, drug and rape (yes what he do to Richard it's rape. The guy lost his memory, he is on drug and on false impression, his judgment is altered) him because he think it's a long lost lover (or something like this). The lack of moral and the egocentrism of Nicholas in the sex scene make me grrrrrr.
Since it's a love story, again, the fact that he is or not Michael doesn't change that in the end Richard/Michael going to forgive Nicholas what he do to him (personal opinion based on reading other story like this in the pass).
I have a problem with Richard attitude too. The guy lost his memory, but he accept everything that "stranger" tell him. Ho, I'm gay, ho I'm fiancé. The same day he have sex with his "fiancé"!! Homosexuality it's hard to accept, not something that people just say: ho, yes, ok...
I repeat the it's not your writing skill here that I doesn't like but the story himself. I hate manipulator without moral and this is really personal point to each person. I know since your have talent that people are going to like it. If you write an other story with an other subject, I'm going to give a try.
I hope that you don't hate me now, but I'm a frank person and I think that all opinion's good.
If you want to answer me, explain your point of view or just cry after me, email me with my nickname at hotmail.
Gwengwel
p.s. English's not my mother tongue, I hope you can read me well.
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very ineresting story. Kind of spooky too. I an eager to find out where the real Micheal is.
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I want bits and pieces of Richard to break through when he's dealing with Nick, but at the same time, I'm rooting for him to remember how much he cared about him too. the thing with the eggs was cute. My husband is a toast dunker when I fix over easy eggs for him. I like details like that.
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August 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Please email me when you update: narcoleptic86@gmail.com
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August 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm still tickled by Michael's "headache medicine." I'm smiling as I'm picturing him walking around naked and bewildered. Keep it coming.
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August 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Richard has a very interesting holiday :)