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New chapters! I'm glad I came back to check this one. I wonder what Cailean's expecting to find in the library?

Leading Chronus's hand right to the prize? I never thought Desmund could be so bold. They're off to a good start. Ha ha. Jeez, and Keir and Cailean can sure run wild in people's imagination. My favorite line was "If I'm yours then you're mine as well, damn it!" Epic. And the messenger! Oh, the messenger part had me laughing so hard!

I will try my best to post the next chapter of HAB no later than this weekend! Just for you girls.

I know I should be writing, but the block still stands. In the meantime, I like to read entertaining stories like this. One can't blame Desmund for feeling insecure because that's just how he is...I think Chronus handled the situation well enough, though. They seem to balance out Keir and Cailean's enthusiasm, don't they? Those two are something else.

OMG! I was so excited when I saw the update! I didn't think this one would update so soon. Darn! And here I was hoping for Chronus to walk right in on a naked Desmund in the shower! I'm glad they sorted things out though. And what's this? Spend the night? If I were Desmund, I'd hog tie Chron down to the bed so he'd never leave! Shyness has nothing to do with priorities? And I love Cailean! That's what I'm talking about! He didn't hold back ANYTHING.

(@ Maru & Michi) So I was like; ‘doodootdoo, let’s see if there is anything newly updated in the originals section *click, blink, look, gasp, flailage at seeing Savoring Time* Yaaay! *Sees TPTDL* Ohmygawwwwwwwd YES!!’ I am so going to read that as soon as I am done here.

And lol @ me for gushing over the art you provided for Savoring Time, when I saw one of your web comics and was like kjfekrjfgnrkjlkrg (OwO). Both of you are super super talented! And. . . .you got me hooked on web comics. Smack Jeeves has soooo many amazing ones! I kept clicking one and finding another one I liked as well.

Gah, I am a sucker for fluffy, sweet, cute stuff. I just adore the way your characters interact! Desmund being all worrisome and then Chronus wiping his tears away and wanting to know what’s wrong. "If you had rejected me, I was well prepared to spend the rest of eternity alone if I couldn't spend it with you." And saying stuff like that. Turns Desmund, and me, to mush.

Freakin’ delicious. That’s what Keir and Cailean are. Again, I love how you two taking parts flows together, how you get to know what each character is thinking/feeling, while you both get to write, but it’s not choppy. I think it’s awesome how Cailean’s wings came out as orgasmed. . .and then he blacked out. Keir must be damn good or something, lol.

(@ Michi) Spiritual twin? Pwsh, I want a spiritual twin!

(@ Maru) The losing of stuffs can be troublesome. I definitely know that. Recently lost a ton. Okay that‘s good, cause I didn’t feel like I was chatting ya up enough. I wanna be blabby-buddies with both of you ;D

(@ M and M) Well I shall always try to review for you two! Cause I love this fic.

(@ Michi) Yeah, one of my fave authors on here (I think it’s Young Sage, idk though) does that. He doesn’t give full descriptions, and said it was so that readers could use their imagination. But I haven’t read too many stories on here with OC art, so it was just cool to see the guys.

(@Maru) Pfft, oodles of people love Desmund, he is immensely lovable! And cute. I think Keri turned out great, his current hair is pretty/interesting. And I must admit to thinking lip rings are sexy, so that just adds to Keir’s level of hotness.

(@ Michi) And it was no problem pointing out that little typo. I’m happy to say that was the -only- typo I saw! So are you like your own beta? That’s basically what I am. I think I’m good enough of a writer/speller to catch most of my mistakes, and spell check is always there and handy if I mess up.

(@ Maru) I am enjoying all of the characters! Keir and Cail definitely define sex. And hotness. Smexyness. ETC. Can I go as far as saying they may be in the thesaurus, as synonyms for the word sexy? Yes, yes I can.

(@ Michi and Maru) ANYWAYS, more than enough ramblings! Thanks for another great chapter, which I greatly enjoyed; in the mushy ‘awww’ way AND the *fans self* that is hot way. It’s kind of late and my friend is talking to me, so my thoughts are getting jumbled. Hopefully the majority of this review made sense. Love ya! Keep it coming! *scurries off to read TPTDL*

Happened to me before, things getting cut off at the end. Maybe it's because it's the weekend? Now, I know I've always admired your art, but it seems that Maru's art seems to be just as beautiful as well. I'm relieved to find that I pictured them similar to how you've drawn them.

Six golden lines in Caileans back...are his wings fighting to get out? XD Another fun chapter. Maybe it'll inspire me enough to break my own writer's block.

As hot as the action going on between Keir and Cailean is, my favorite's still Desmund! I love his colors in the picture. His hair's so pretty and shiny, it makes you want to eat it. Chronus, Keir, and Cailean are all steaming hot.

Well, check out this story! *fans self* Keir and Cailean sure made my imagination run wild! If I were Desmund, I'd let Chronus have his way with me ANY day. He may be shy now, but we don't know what he's gonna be like in BED. I could see him just tugging on Chron's Rapunzel hair and using it as a whip. "I said faster!"

OMG! The way you did the review reply for me was SO fun! It made me laugh and I had a blast reading it. And since I talk way too much in my actual reviews, I decided to just make this a separate one! Haha, I shall play along!

= Michi ; Cailean is pronounced “Kay-lee-an”, but, you can pronounce it or read it any way you like! Depends on how your mind interprets it, ha ha

~ Miriu ; Kay-lee-an. Got it. Yeah, I come up with some funky names myself, and I’m sure people pronounce them wrong; whatev. I do that all the time with book characters. I say a-LON-a, my sister says a-LAN-ah. You’re right, it’s however you wanna think of it. But I like Kay-lee-an just as much as Kay-lin, maybe more.

= Michi ; Ha! See Maru? Lots of Desmund love, you should feel proud of him and trust your Uke-character making skills.

~ Miriu ; Yes yes Maru, you have lovely uke-making skills. I adore ukes. I can’t seem to help giving my on-bottom-OCs uke-like characteristics. I tend to do a lot of tops/semes + bottoms/ukes, and not a lot of seke. But one of my recent character goes both ways and I’m going to have fun with that. Desmund is uber-cute. Trust in your skills!

= Michi ; -gushing tears of joy- Thank you so much! We've been writing our stories in role-play form and I had many difficulties filling in the parts in-between and making it all flow as one whole story. I'm so happy that it wasn't in vain!

~ Miriu ; You’re welcome, oodles and oodles. I’ve read some roleplays that people have posted on AFF, and sometimes they are so. . . .choppy. So back and forth and unflowing. So your story is a pleasure to read, on top of being so interesting, funny and yummy.

= Maru and Michi ; We don't mind at all! Your review knocked our socks off and we oh-so-greatly appreciate that you even took the time to review. As for the comics, they'll be slow to update because we're both busybodies. But, we plan on updating this actual written story on a weekly basis!

~ Miriu ; Is Maru the quieter one? I feel bad cause I’m all; MICHI blah blah ohmygosh, and all. I love you toooooo Maruuuu. But yeah, my mind(/hands?) get carried away and my reviews/replies/whatever always seem to be long. Some people don’t like handling my wall-of-text-ness, but I do oh-so-love-it when I get to chat with some awesome authors/readers.

I will admit to not always reviewing, but I know how happy I am when I get reviews (I get all crazy-bubbly excited and make squeaky sounds that cause my family to look at me oddly), so when I read a story I really like, I try and review. Pwsh, you just get to stuff when you get to; I know how that can be, sort of. Lol. I update my stories whenever my characters decide they want to be written about.

= Michi ; LMAO! I came up with the 'Smut-Power-Duo' title on the spot to make Maru laugh. We keep hounding each other to update parts of the story, but most especially when we're in the middle of smutty scenes. XD This is not only our first joint account, but also our first time posting a story to share to the public in a long while. If you're curious about any of our other stories together, beg Maru to let me post them! Though I have many projects at hand, I'm a naturally lazy person. Only if Maru decides that she wants us to continue posting our stories merged like this, would I actually cave in to beta them and post them. I do anything to please her so long as she continues writing her parts of our stories...especially Keir's!


~ Miriu ; Welcome to AFF!! I was a reader on here for a bit, before I got an account so I could review un-anonymously, and then one day I had an idea I wanted to write -really- badly, so I just sat down and started my first-ever-slash-fic. Then I got more ideas and slowly started writing more and more. But anyways, enough about me.

I would be super excited if you posted more of your stories!! Especially COUGH To Please The Dark Lord HINT COUGH. I’m so lame, I haven’t checked out the comics yet, but I will!! I’ve been trying to write some lately, but haven’t gotten very far. Maybe 1.5k words into a chapter, and then I got a bit stuck and busy. I’ll try again tomorrow, if I get out of work early enough.

OH, and I don’t know if I verbally drooled enough over your art work in the other review (which I have not posted yet, lol) but it is SO goooooood. Like, blows my mind. I can make little chibi doodle-thingers, but that’s about it. I’ve tried at anime/manga-like styles and not done too bad, but I mostly draw for fun. I write more than draw though, definitely. Nothing as ass-kicking awesome as your stuff. *drools over Chronus some more*

Okay! Time for Miriu to end this freakishly long review, eh? (I typed it in word processor and now I’m afraid of how long it’s going to be on AFF) Lots of love to you two, and I look forward to more of this fabulous fic! You’ll be seeing me *wink* Or. . . .you’ll be seeing my text, but you know what I mean. Tata~

Ohmygoodness! The art you provided us with is utterly awesome! It really helps as you’re reading, since you have a better idea of what they look like. I -love- the art of Chronus!!! I love his hair and just the expression he has on in the headshot. Keir is sexy+cute, and Desmund just defines adorable! (And pretty, with that beautiful hair) Oh and Cailean! I love the color of his hair, such a dark shade of red; gorgeous!

And I totally laughed over what reviewer-IsLuRa said; [I could see him just tugging on Chron's Rapunzel hair and using it as a whip. "I said faster!"] And I can absolutely see that as well, especially with the lovely visual you gave us. Gah, I re-read the first chapter, to refresh my mind before the next one, and I couldn’t help but squeak happily in my chair when Desmund fell into Chronus’ arms. Such an ‘aww’ moment!

I just thought that I’d point out, in the first and third paragraphs in the second chapter, you used the word ‘unto’ when it should be ‘onto.’ [He held unto Desmund's waist] & [his other arm still holding unto Desmund's waist]. I think it pops up a few more times as well. I’m no grammar nazi, but I know I make silly typos myself; they seem to be good at popping up sneakily now and then.

Aww, Desmund may be dense, but he is a total cutie! I love sweet guys that are like that, unaware of the way they are affecting people. Chronus and Desmund are just so freaking delicious! I try not to overuse the words ‘cute’ and ‘adorable’ when reviewing, but sometimes, it’s hard not to, lol. Your couples are wonderful! And Cailean + Keir? Yummy. They are so hot for each other. Loved it!!

Ifiufhiuhiuef; only about 200 hits? Pwsh. This fic is worthy of so much more. Don’t ever let lack of hits or reviews get you down too much. I’m sure you’ll get more as the story goes along, because it’s so delightful and delectable. OH, while I’m thinking of it, I’m going to give you 5 + thingers for a rating, cause you deserve them all. Keep it coming, oh awesome Maru and Michi.