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for Wild Pitch

by myth

schedule May 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Amazing chapter (:
Poor poor Ayu-chan. Makes me wonder how this humiliation will reflect later on.
To be honest, I never thought Naoya will find it out this way, but I gotta admit I really enjoyed this turn in events it gave the story another great edge in it.
Really well written. Keep up the great work and looking forward to the next chapter (:
schedule May 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ahh, poor Ayumu! Being manipulated by Kaji! What's a boy to do? lol

I'm curious why Naoya told Ayumu not to hang around w/Kaji so much. Kaji wouldn't have tried what he's doing to Ayumu on Naoya? I don't think Naoya would have let him!

I didn't think this chapter had any more sexual content than your past two or three chapters. And yeah, what the heck is "sounding"? I never heard of it.
person cimke
schedule May 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Aaah, quite the pale boy in this chapter, our little Ayumu. The captain is a very very bad boy! Maybe Naoya should have warned little Ayumu a tad earlier. The captain is not only saying weird things to Ayumu, he is already doing weird things to Ayumu! I love him ^_^
schedule April 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey, good for Naoya for making the magazine! He seems to have worked hard for the recognition!

Poor Ayumu; he could have gone to the game w/Naoya, but instead Ryuuji got to go. Oh well, they were only watching the game! lol

At least if he ever gets together w/Naoya, he'll know things! Naoya will be EXTREMELY surprised to find out exactly what Ayumu knows and how he knows it! hahahha

Can't wait to find out what other goodies Kaji has up his sleeve, errr, bag!
person cimke
schedule April 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh I loooooove the captain! Poor confused Ayumu. It's funny and touching to read about his inner turmoil, his fascination and reluctance to explore sexuality. I do wonder if that picture of Naoya will inspire him for some private action ^^
person Holly
schedule April 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
:) hey there my my this story is turning interesting!!! >.<
Oh god what will happen next ??!! why did Naoya call?! *gasp*
I love all the characters and I'm looking forward to the next update!!!
person MooonlitWorld
schedule April 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
*claps* Waaahh another wicked little chapter ^^
the Phone call from Naoya was just evil.. But did Kajihara plan it
or did Naoya really need to call him..??
Hmm.. questionable
thankyou for the update, and I hope chapter 16 will be up soon too ^^
please update :)
please keep up the wicked writing like always
take care x]
xMoonlitx
schedule April 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Awww, poor Ayumu! Learning the facts of life from Kaji! What ways he'll torture Ayumu, we'll never know! lol

And I could also picture Naoya's face when Ayumu was acting so strangely! I thought at first that Naji set Ayumu and Naoya up and Naoya was going to come into the locker room also! That would have been way too embarrassing for Ayumu!

I hope you're feeling better now. If it makes you feel any better, your writing is still awesome! XD
person cimke
schedule April 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
LOL! Yeah Ayumu, what have you gotten yourself into? The "homework" had a nice humourous touch - not for Ayumu, but the reader.
Kaji sure is having a blast teasing poor Ayumu!
person cimke
schedule March 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh! LOLOLOL! I love the captain so much! He sure took much delight in Ayumu's pain & shame.
Ayumu is such a cute dummy! Love him.

It was a great chapter, I had much fun reading (just as much as the captain had with Ayumu)