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Awwww... I felt really bad for Mik; it was great to find out more about him. And I completely understand his anger; heck, I'd definitely have gone rogue if I'd been in his place. He's been completely used and abused by the system and even now he's still stuck in it.
And yeah, I'd taken his assumption from the other side (meaning as a prejudice) and not as a personal experience. That actually took me by surprise, and yet it made complete sense. He's clearly a down to earth and pragmatic guy so he'd need a really REALLY good reason to hate the military and the government the way he does. And I find it amazing that even through it all, he's a delinquent, but he hasn't caused any real harm to anyone (that we know of). He's a good guy with issues. And I really like that about him.
This chapter really did clear a lot of things up! Thanks for the update! :)
Oh, and I'm glad I managed to accidentally solve your problem! :p ;)

Chapter 16

Whew! What a background story for Mik!!! Intense!!!
Thanks!

R

I love it when Paw gets a chance to shock Mik and put him in his place. like I'm sure that Mik imagined that he would be the permanent top in this relationship. Although I see Mik is starting to see Paw as more of an equal. Oh, and you are the update queen. Two gold stars for updates.

Yes! i think Mik just had an unexpectedly good time. Paw is full of surprises. He seemed a little traumatized when he came out of the room with Essuan and Souse. it was a great idea to give us more background on Mik while Paw was busy doing the deed, It certainly explains the ambivalent feelings he has had towards the military from the beginning. Even though he is a part of the military, Mik certainly does not trust the military. I also thought it was funny how Paw changed the TV from the cute kitten to the war program. I guess our cute kitten is thinking about more serious things. But he is still very cute. Keep up the good writing.

Boop! That's so cute! Interesting about Mik's background; a bit confusing tho. But great updates!

Omg, just wanted to say... you update FAST! That's so awesome, since I love this story!
Keep writing!

thanks for the chapter!!!!

Yay new chappie! Yay smex! Boo Sidhe being killed.

I liked this chapter. I'm a little confused about the interaction; does Souse want Paw to father Essuan's child? But I liked it anyway!
Just a tiny detail though. I figure that's probably not how Mik meant it; I mean he hasn't acted like an intolerant character throughout the story at all, to the contrary, but the comment about the cleaning lady having an accent and thus being an illegal immigrant... I was torn between laughing at Paw's obsession with a well made bed and cringing at the assumption. I know that's probably not how you meant it but from the interaction, that's what we (well, I at least) understand of what Mik says.
Don't get me wrong, I think it makes sense and is actually pretty interesting to have Paw confront someone who has just as much trouble with communication in English as he does, especially since the other's human (makes the language barrier less of an exclusively 'Sidhe' quirk and it can lead to some other pretty funny scenes in the future); I just think you might want to rephrase that part so it doesn't look like Mik is assuming every person with an accent is an illegal immigrant. Sorry, I guess I'm pulling at straws here, maybe others didn't read that way, but well, I just thought I'd point it out anyways, since it was bothering me.
Other than that, great chapter!

I see Paw was busy while Mik went off to work. Why doesn't Souse impregnate Essuan himself? Unless he doesn't like girls either. I think that the last part of this chapter was funny with Souse wanting Mik to arrange the whole Paw impregnate Essuan while Souse watches thing. Talk about performance anxiety. Looking forward to the next update.