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HEHEHEHEHE.... MATING CERMONY! (we can wait... at the rate you write it cant be that long)
“Mommy, if’n Mik ever wants Paw to popsicle him.” this cracked me up1
I cant wait for Mik's mommy and Paw to meet! thats gonna be awesome smacks!

oh and there gonna be stuff... between souse and violet... the two semi outcast males... and the one no one will talk to... he was stupid but I still feel bad for him

The mommy chapter was hysterical! I love the part where Essuan (how does she know all this????) saw the two boys doing it and the way Paw described them. Priceless! And at the end where he threatens Mik w/the popsicle and the word mommy. Great!!!!!

Amazing how Mik's mom can figure out Paw w/o even speaking w/him! She is pretty smart. And Lillow and Violet took an immediate liking to Mik's mom. BTW: does she have a name? Hahah

Oh noes! A sad Paw D': I don't know if I hope Paw becomes Whisperer or not. I mean, wouldn't Mik lose him if he did? Is Paw distencing (how do you spell that..?) himself because he feel he will become Whisperer? 8O Lol, I really don't know ^^

that's so sad 3':

The whole trip was hilarious. Mik and Koln fighting over the tree. Paw wanting help from Mik's mommy. Finally the two will meet. I can't wait to see how she gets along with the Sidhe.

65 click... you have my empathy and sympathy... I cant write a fight scene either... and Ive been in more than a few fights...
there are two ways you could improve this: either try to rewrite this chapter with someone else... fights need abit more description so the reading see it happening... so play act it out sortta even if just word play... b/c this isnt your strength... you like describing thru dialogue thats your strength. OR go with your strength and 'talk' it out... as just mik's impression of the fight... say what happened,... not desripe blow for blow... so either more or less... you are kindda caught in the centre here... but either way its not that bad... the idea of the fight still made it across

What is that sprout? I like how the Sidhe interact with Mik. Good story.

66 boops... love this ch... just do... this is your style

do do do...

Love, love me do
You know I love you
I'll always be true, so please
Love me do, who-ho love me do

Love, love me do
You know I love you
I'll always be true, so please
Love me do, who-ho love me do

Someone to love, somebody new
Someone to love, someone like you

Love, love me do
You know I love you
I'll always be true, so please
Love me do, who-ho love me do

Love, love me do
You know I love you
I'll always be true, so please
Love me do, who-ho love me do

Yeh, love me do, ooh, love me do

great now i got that song stuck in my head!