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for Why me....

by LonleyWolf

person kylee
schedule July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was great. I can understand Vincent's temptation to use violence to deal with his feelings. I am glad he and Damian talked instead. I am glad he promised to not abandon their friendship. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
schedule July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Vincent is so closeted. It's sad really. And poor Damien. I wonder what will happen to bring Vincent out of his denial. Can't wait.
person crazykitty
schedule July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
great chapter
person Anon
schedule July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Like it so far..although its`s a story full of clichés. Don`t get me wrong, I kind of admire, that you managed to bring EVERY slash clichè into this story, that I know ;-). The beginning was a little bit rushed and the ending of the last chapter was very unexpected..kind of cool.

So, I`m not a native english speaker..but I think there were a few typos and some mismatched uhh..whats the word in english..You know: *,*.
So, I`m waiting for the next chapter.
person kylee123
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Loved that last chapter. Want more citrus. I think you did a good job of showing how much fear the average male has of being gay. I hope Vincent will forgive Damien. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
enjoying the story...interested to see how this plays out.
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Fwee! Citrisy goodness! Hahaha. I love it so far. Keep going! :3
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Vincent is so gay for Damien...he just doesn't know it. I love the tension.
person S>S
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this story can't for them to meet up I know it's gona be interesting
please update soon

S>S
schedule July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ha great chapter! But before I expel on the wonders of this chapter; I want to be a pain in the ass. Thank you for taking my suggestion; it does read better that way w/the quotes. Also, it's not just you, 99% of the writers on here misspell this word: losing, as in losing my place in line. The majority of people write down loosing, which I don't even think is a word. Loose, like the button is loose, but if you want to write losing my religion, for example, and old REM song. Oh, everyone on here is probably too young to even KNOW who REM is!!!! Hahaha Anyway, just thought I'd throw my 2 cents in. Back to the review: I loved this chapter! I'm glad Damien gave Vincent a few days to think things over and cool off. I hope Vincent doesn't decide to kick his ass; I mean after all, they were the best of friends and why would you give up a friendship b/c of that??????? Looking forward to the next chapter and thank you for updating so quickly. And sorry for being such a pain in the ass; it's just the editor in me. I even find misspelled words on "professional" signs in clothing stores! If you don't want me to point out any others, just let me know; I don't want to offend you. I really do like this story!