rate_review Reviews

This story is hot. Keep up the good work.

The story looks really good so far. The one thing I would caution you on is your use of tenses. If you write "He runs to the store," you can't follow it with "and bought some apples." because he is currently running to the store, but bought the apples in the past. With stories, stay in one tense for the whole story, it gives it a better flow and keeps your readers from getting confused. But other than that, it looks really good. I will be waiting to see what happens next.