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hey! cool chapter!
So... Seph's power is thread? I don't really get it, so far...
Demeter will come to respect Hades again? I hope so!
Will she find Iason? Why didn't Seph tell her about him?
Oooh, when will sheph tell Aidon about her powers? He'll be real proud! I'm sure he'll find out about her invisibility!
Anyway, go on!!!

hey, for your new title, here are suggestions... so, maybe they're no good, or something, but they can maybe help you get your own ideas?
how'bout "veil of shadows" or something? or maybe not... (it's the same style as the current one? )
hummm... "Spring" (cool no? since seph is supposed to be godess of spring? )
"The way of Dis"; "what about death?" "down under" (isn't that one of the names of the underworld?), "six feet (or more) under"... hummm?
anyway, I'm not sure you'll find what you're searching for, but there are some directions, no? I hope they are helpful!!
keep going!! Your story's genius!!

I liked all the various interactions in this chapter, especially the final scene! The tenderness between Hades & Persephone is so sweet.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Awesome chapter. I'm glad Demeter is finally accepting the situation. And I'm sorry to hear about your title issue. If I could suggest anything, I like titles that are sort of paradox. Like in this story, Hades kidnaps Persephone and all, but in a way, he frees her, too. He takes a part of her away (her childhood, innocence, etc.), but by doing so, he helps her discover what she can be. That she was born to be more than just Demeter's daughter. I think that theme would make an excellent title.

You say you need a new title... my suggestion is to focus on the prophecy that the fates made of Persephone - the one that frightened her mother - that is a good enough place to start looking for one.

I love your story, I'd just been re-reading it the last few days so your update had perfect timing for me. I was wondering if we would see Demeter reunited with a reincarnated Iasion?

This makes me want to squeal with happiness. So much fluff! :)

You could try The Iron Queen
that was what she was called in The Odyssey

Ironically enough, I just watched an SVU episode where Olivia had the alias of Persephone. lmao, small world.

hello!!
I just discovered your story (on FP, actually. I am just a passerby, here, yet I put it on auathor alert there...)!!
It's awesome!! I loved it, mostly the characters are so well depicted!! It's just so great, and I absolutely love it!!
The story is never boring or annoying, the characters can be frustrating but we still love them nonetheless (Zeus, for instance, is hilarious! poor him ^^)
Though I will admit, I sometimes spotted some little errors (sentences cut or without a verb, spellings, some repetitions...) they are not anything that you can't remedy to with a simple rereading of your story, with a clear head. (sometimes, after too much editing you can't see anything anymore... ^^)
I love your retake on some myths, the way you tweaked things while staying close to the actual writings, giving us a much better story, I believe!!
Oh, I can't wait to have Persephone understand her new powers!! What are they exactly? I contemplated the fact that she could have anything she could see, or that she could manipulate energy, like the life force... but I'm not really sure...
Anyway, it will be great fun to see Hades chase her now she can be invisible...How will he react to have his gift turned against him? Wicked things might happen... ^^
Go on, keep writing!! I can't wait!! >.<
Oh, did you find a publisher yet?
Bye ^^
and thank you for this wonderful retake of hades and persephone. *sigh contentedly*