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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely adore this story! You're the best!
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June 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am sorry to say that I am not liking Hades very much right now. After all the grief he has caused Persephone and Demeter, he insists on Persephone seeing his side of the situation? After how much he says he loves her, he thinks that admitting he did something wrong is unacceptable because it is showing weakness to the woman he loves? (Not to mention the hypocrisy that Persephone notes about how he treats her like a child by taking away her right to choose, while decrying Demeter for the same offense.) These are very human reactions on Hades' part, but I can't help but be disappointed in him, though I appreciate your ability as a writer to explore interesting character aspects.
Perhaps it is petty of me, but I think that Hades needs to suffer for a while in order to admit his mistakes and sincerely ask (beg?) for Persephone's forgiveness. Maybe Persephone should dip into the waters of the Styx for her previous coldness, rather than Lethe for forgetfulness, in order for Hades to truly understand the cost of his error.
As always, I look forward to your next chapter.
Perhaps it is petty of me, but I think that Hades needs to suffer for a while in order to admit his mistakes and sincerely ask (beg?) for Persephone's forgiveness. Maybe Persephone should dip into the waters of the Styx for her previous coldness, rather than Lethe for forgetfulness, in order for Hades to truly understand the cost of his error.
As always, I look forward to your next chapter.
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
How can Hypnos have a son but Hades and Hades cant?
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May 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Its horrible to have to wait so long for the cliffhanger. Pleaseee update soon!
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May 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
All I got to say is that you need to add a comma to separate the phrase from the speaker.
Example would be: "I am the ruler of this place(,)" Stanley said. Just don't add the parenthesis. I was merely showing where.
And, if you are not using names, remember to lower case the 'he' and 'she'. I think you are already doing that, but you always lower-case the 'he' and 'she' when they are talking, pondering, or questioning.
Example: "Don't rush me," she snapped.
Anyway, I'm running out of time. I am enjoying the story. It's good. Good luck publishing it -- though be prepared for anything.
Example would be: "I am the ruler of this place(,)" Stanley said. Just don't add the parenthesis. I was merely showing where.
And, if you are not using names, remember to lower case the 'he' and 'she'. I think you are already doing that, but you always lower-case the 'he' and 'she' when they are talking, pondering, or questioning.
Example: "Don't rush me," she snapped.
Anyway, I'm running out of time. I am enjoying the story. It's good. Good luck publishing it -- though be prepared for anything.
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May 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE please PLEASE keep going! I cant wait! :P
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May 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I just finished reading all the chapters and for the most part I really enjoyed it. I might be alone in this but I don't like Hades. He reminds me of Edward Cullen, they both think they know what's best for their partners. I like how human you made the gods seem, you gave them realistic personalities. Although I do like DBH I actually liked Worthy of Love better. Either way you're a great writer and update soon!
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May 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far. Love how dedicated you are to the myth. Can't wait for your next chapter.
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May 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OOOOOOHHHH!!! Hades might be in HUGE trouble with his lovely bride. Thank you so much for the update. I eagerly await more.
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May 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow!!! XD