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May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"SWeet "not" truly Auroraboring Alice. Sour Cupcake" review by DEadfangirlsR-us
What does that mean? Why do some readers feel the need to put down someone’s work in a rude manner? If I misunderstood the review I apologize, but why be mean about it? I’m ok with constructive criticism that will help the writer improve their skill. It’s not so easy to be able to come up with an idea and make a story out of it. I do love stories with a good plot around the main characters, and I love it when the characters come alive with true emotions and love. It just adds to the story and makes the readers really care about the characters.
And sometimes it’s wonderful when a reader can relate to the character’s situation, for example Devin being afraid to get too close to anyone for fear that he would be left behind. How many people have gone through those experiences themselves? When parents divorce, or one of them walks away, when a love one dies leaving you behind to grieve? Being put up for adoption and end up getting shifted from one home to the next. It’s enough to make anyone build a wall around themselves, for some it is easier to stand on the sidelines and keep everyone at arm’s length then risking the pain of being left behind.
As for me, I cannot wait for the next update, I really do love the characters and I especially am anxious to find out if Chris is the son of Victor. I hope that will not change anything between him and Adam, once mated they are mated for life is that right? The characters are SWEET, the story even SWEETER, and there is nothing AuroraBORING about it. As for Sour Cupcake? Stay away from them, too much of a sour anything ruins your whole attitude and the ability to keep an open mind.
Good job on your story, keep it up. I hope Jayden didn’t get too hurt from the explosion and now that it seems that he and Devin are getting a little cutesy and cuddling with each other, how about some hot monkey sex? (hehehe)Really I do love the story and like where it's going so far, thank you.
What does that mean? Why do some readers feel the need to put down someone’s work in a rude manner? If I misunderstood the review I apologize, but why be mean about it? I’m ok with constructive criticism that will help the writer improve their skill. It’s not so easy to be able to come up with an idea and make a story out of it. I do love stories with a good plot around the main characters, and I love it when the characters come alive with true emotions and love. It just adds to the story and makes the readers really care about the characters.
And sometimes it’s wonderful when a reader can relate to the character’s situation, for example Devin being afraid to get too close to anyone for fear that he would be left behind. How many people have gone through those experiences themselves? When parents divorce, or one of them walks away, when a love one dies leaving you behind to grieve? Being put up for adoption and end up getting shifted from one home to the next. It’s enough to make anyone build a wall around themselves, for some it is easier to stand on the sidelines and keep everyone at arm’s length then risking the pain of being left behind.
As for me, I cannot wait for the next update, I really do love the characters and I especially am anxious to find out if Chris is the son of Victor. I hope that will not change anything between him and Adam, once mated they are mated for life is that right? The characters are SWEET, the story even SWEETER, and there is nothing AuroraBORING about it. As for Sour Cupcake? Stay away from them, too much of a sour anything ruins your whole attitude and the ability to keep an open mind.
Good job on your story, keep it up. I hope Jayden didn’t get too hurt from the explosion and now that it seems that he and Devin are getting a little cutesy and cuddling with each other, how about some hot monkey sex? (hehehe)Really I do love the story and like where it's going so far, thank you.
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May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
rawr those two ARE hot together XD oooooh, so the plot thickens. :P
you are a fast updater ! O_O I'm not complaining!
you are a fast updater ! O_O I'm not complaining!
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May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love that you love the week-end!!!
Not going to comment about *DEadfangirlsR-us*, they are already people that exprim exactly what i think of this kind or people.
On the start of this chapter, i was affraid that the yummy sex was going to be on Jayden/Devin (to soon, really),
so now I will stop making assumptions, much better for me.
Sooo... i'm glad that the bitch no really Chris' mother, but the son of the big-bad-guy of Omega? Why? Bad author!!! nah! Hope that Adam does not be affected by this. Poor Chris, if you have problem with Adam, come see Aunty Gwen! loll!
Devin , do you have problem with your little *head* ?? Sweet kiss in the end, it's going to confuse Devin a litte more but so much fun to read loll! His not going to really appreciate when someone is going to explain that these small problems of *hard* concentration are caused by the non-consumption of the ceremony....lolll!!!
Gwen
Want to write more but it's the end of my english!
Not going to comment about *DEadfangirlsR-us*, they are already people that exprim exactly what i think of this kind or people.
On the start of this chapter, i was affraid that the yummy sex was going to be on Jayden/Devin (to soon, really),
so now I will stop making assumptions, much better for me.
Sooo... i'm glad that the bitch no really Chris' mother, but the son of the big-bad-guy of Omega? Why? Bad author!!! nah! Hope that Adam does not be affected by this. Poor Chris, if you have problem with Adam, come see Aunty Gwen! loll!
Devin , do you have problem with your little *head* ?? Sweet kiss in the end, it's going to confuse Devin a litte more but so much fun to read loll! His not going to really appreciate when someone is going to explain that these small problems of *hard* concentration are caused by the non-consumption of the ceremony....lolll!!!
Gwen
Want to write more but it's the end of my english!
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May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I just want to know something I know Adam had a hubby b4 and he was reborn but doesn't he miss him??? And he treats Chris like the other man never exsisted... Well it seems like that to me >_< For me I wouldn't be so accepting of losing my lover then just because he was reborn forget all about him. :) Maybe you could look into this... Tell us a little more about Devin's father... Like Maybe Chris could ask questions about what I guess was his past o.o;
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May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oooohhhhh, yummy. So it seems that Devin might be the one with all the power - since you already said that he had more strength of character than the king. And Chris is darth maul to the omega *emperor*. Interesting. Having his own son be the reincarnate of the First Advisory's soul was probably a kick in the family jewels, which explains mommy dearest. Ahhhh. Can't wait for Devin to decide that it's cherry picking time. That will be a luscious encounter. Kind of just rambling here, but soo cool, phoneix soul marker - fire blowing up the bedroom - red headed hottie on the throne. Fire, burn baby burn.
Write lots.
Kiix
Write lots.
Kiix
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May 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
great chapter, poor king Jayden, I hope he doesn´t give up his hope for love with our cute devin
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May 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi! Don't think I've reviewed before, sorry, but I really like this story! Everything about it, actually, the characters, the set-up, the world, and the plot (so far at least)... the characters are a fav, though, I can quite easilly picture them, and I like all four! I'm looking forward to more!
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May 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"For lunch"... Huummm ! Devin is very innocent or very hungry ! ^^
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May 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hoo...thank for this new chapter!
You have answered many questions, virtually all those that I asked myself after Chapter 7. Did you prob my brain?! loll
The relation D/s that you describe seems more noble and 'realist'. A lot of people that I know that live this kind of relationship act more like this that some 'sh*t' that a read (the raped and tortured slave who falls in love with his tormentor, really c-r-e-d-i-b-l-e!!!) here and on Nifty. This eXplain why Adam is more dominant although he was Devin's life-bearer (I had the false impression : life-giver=dominant, life-bearer=submissive), so this explain this and that! I really like your concept, how they teach.
Is that Chris may be pregnant? Because as Adam could... can all the Aurora people can conceive children?
And i like the *new* Chris, lot of fun in perspective for Adam! Take that nah!
For Devin, i love his reaction, it's going to take time for Jayden to win his trust, his forgiveness and his heart... Devin is a little in denial but i think it's normal for the time being!
As you can see .... I really love your story!!!
Gwen
You have answered many questions, virtually all those that I asked myself after Chapter 7. Did you prob my brain?! loll
The relation D/s that you describe seems more noble and 'realist'. A lot of people that I know that live this kind of relationship act more like this that some 'sh*t' that a read (the raped and tortured slave who falls in love with his tormentor, really c-r-e-d-i-b-l-e!!!) here and on Nifty. This eXplain why Adam is more dominant although he was Devin's life-bearer (I had the false impression : life-giver=dominant, life-bearer=submissive), so this explain this and that! I really like your concept, how they teach.
Is that Chris may be pregnant? Because as Adam could... can all the Aurora people can conceive children?
And i like the *new* Chris, lot of fun in perspective for Adam! Take that nah!
For Devin, i love his reaction, it's going to take time for Jayden to win his trust, his forgiveness and his heart... Devin is a little in denial but i think it's normal for the time being!
As you can see .... I really love your story!!!
Gwen
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May 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very good