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A new chappi!! Thank!
I like Sarah, i'm pretty sure if Sarah sees Jayden if it will be *interesting*.
Good idea the make-over, but...the poor hair....!!!
The reaction of Chris to Adam was sad but with the one-shot ( want to kill Jacob, cant I??? ), it's pretty understandable! Not for Adam however, it's going to confuse the man!
Jayden!!! Wow, you are really angry?! Calm down before you go to found Devin or you are going to do something unfortunate! You don't want to ruin your little chance with Devin? Hum? no, no....
Gwen!

*Cheers* Yay, go Chris. You tell Jayden, heck yes! Even if Chris -is- a bit emotional at that moment, still, it’s awesome. Ohmygosh, I could just kiss Chris! He is my little hero right now. Oh-ho, unfulfilled mating bond induced sex dreams? Annoying, since he can’t seem to get away from it, but still kind of hot.

Is it mean, that when Jayden is watching Devin laughing with Sarah, and wanting to be the one who put it there so bad it almost broke his heart; that I was silently thinking; Eat your little heart out!! Oh well Cx

I’m mean to Jayden and Adam, but whatev. I like Chris and Devin more. But, I’m glad Jayden acknowledges that what Adam did; basically about kidnapping Devin and making him go through all that in Aurora, was wrong. Wrong. Unfair. Flat out lame. Plus, I’m a sucker for redheads really. I just like to give him a hard time xD Devin and Jayden -would- be cute. Chris just melted in Adam’s arms, so it’s fun to have Devin give Jayden a run for his money first.

Whoa, Adam was pissed! Hoho, go Devin, score! Poor Chris though, it’s awful that he got reminded and scared like that. But Adam is a nice guy, and I’m sure they’ll work it out. Ugh, Jayden locked up his godfather? I see where his anger stems from, but still, meanie. And of course, now that Devin got away, he’s got his royal panties in a twist. I’m glad Devin got away. His little reunion with Sarah was sweet, and the outward appearance changes were a good idea. But I’m worried that he won’t be able to hide from Jayden, uh-oh. We shall see. I eagerly await!

I like the *realist* reaction of Devin: panicked, childish, not in control and...did i say... realist!
Too much author force the personnage to have the reaction they want just because 'they want' and forget how normally a human react and think. Not you, Devin just act as I would react, and i pretty normal, i think!!!
(husband say : not sure). Nobody's perfect! And Devin escape! Go boy! Daddy not going to appreciate being deceived.
It's me or Jayden react like a little uke sometime?! Poor him, don't worry Jayden, everything going to be okay...after a long long road (poke pesterme2!!!).
Gwen
p.s. Don't know if you already know this story, if no, I think you'd like to read *Independence* by 'just dreaming', the author update not really regulary but the story is in the same genre as yours (dragon, shapeshifter, a uke-sub that don't want this life, etc). The first two chapter are ardous because of all the info, but just continue....

I just love how much hard work you put into this, great work!

Yay! Devin escaped! I am so rooting for him, even if they think he is being stubborn. It’s lame and unfair, what they did and the mess they threw him into. I think Chris’s father being of the Omega is a cool spin! Now, I’m all crazy curious to see how Devin fairs back on Earth, and how people act around Chris, now they know who he is.

He he he he. Devin did it. Smart boy.
I did think that D and J were getting on to their "groove" a little to quickly, but I though, "Hey, there was the magical horniness to consider. I'll just have to wait and see." I'm glad their not riding the sack just yet. With all in D's past, it would feel a bit weird if they did jump into things quickly. You've handled it very well though. D's escape is also very interesting. I can't wait to see how Mr Dad will react. Or Mr. Love-Puppy-King. The poor dudes, but they did place themselves in that boat.
Oh, and when D yelled at J in the beginning I though "the poor king. You lead him on by being so willing too." Laugh. That's the first time I felt sorry for the Love-Pup-King.
I must say that I am impressed at how D tricked his dad. So sneaky. He he. Now I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope nothing too awful, like him being captured by the Omega, will happen. Lol. Love-Pup-King is going to be so sad. Should I really laugh at that? Yes. I dink I actually have to. He he. I’m also a bit stuck at just what kind of face Mr Dad will make when he realises that he’s been scrued.

Thanks for clearing up my question; Oh know what has Devin gotten himself into now! Doesn't he know this is a bad idea! Bad boy you should be in Aurora right now.... ;D Makin hott kinky buttsex with you mate. T.T

Oh Devin. At this rate he won't lose his virginity until the end of the story. But I can see where he is coming from. I just hope he gets to give it up to Jayden and doesn't get forced by someone else

ooh...someone is in trouble. Great story btw.