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I knew he was pregnant! Very nice :)

I just KNEW Chris was pregnant, what with him and Adam screwing each other like rabbits in heat!

Great work!!

Two great chapters!

BTW, glad that you got the opossum problem sorted out. :o)

i just found this story and it is magnificent!!!! Thank you so much for sharing this with us and I absolutely can't wait for more!!!

That was sweet. I was afraid of Devin's reaction to the cheating, but I'm glad that it only pushed them closer.

~Kati-chan

WOW!! I loved it. Finally they actually did it. Am so jealous of Devin right now(still love Adam more tho) Update soon!!
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I'm afraid to read Chapter 18. I think my heart will be broken in one way or another. I pray that Jayden did not go off with someone else. Oky. I am diving in.

Dang it. Now Jayden is a cheater. And just as Devin was starting to trust him some more. I kind of wish that a piano would fall on top of Jayden right now. I hope Devin takes it better than I do.

I just found this and have now gorged myself on all 18 chapters. It's a tad predictable, but that's probably why I like it so much (a bit like "Twilight": you know what's going to happen next but the drama and writing keep you hooked! And anyway, they wouldn't be cliches unless they were good ideas, would they? ;P). It's great fun and I just adore Jayden; he's the perfect seme! Poor Devin though, he sure has been jerked around a whole lot. And now this! I know they'll work through it, but he must feel sooo betrayed. I mean, just after he's shown the King some passion and they've both decided that they're going to give it a go, Jayden cheats on him! I mean, what the hell, King JJ?! (Oh yeah, and Sarah's a really cool character too. Go Sarah!) I'm sorry to say (sorry!) that I don't like Chris much. He's such a drama queen and is so emtional. I know that's probably cause he's pregnant right now, but there has been a general trend throughout. It would be nice to see a flawed character, or maybe one with a bit more reserve. I know Adam and Jayden are pretty calm, but they're also too perfect. The only reason they ever hurt anyone is through miscommunication or misunderstandings, which is great cause they're the main charcters and that's exactly what I like - I always like the seme to be head over heels in love with their uke - but maybe a secondary character? Maybe you should try and make the characters a little less black and white. Y'know, totally good or totally evil, with no in between? Oh god, this review sounds like I hate your story, but I actually love it! I just can't help trying to give writing advice. Some authors like that (I do, for one), but others take it the wrong way and get upset/angry. I hope you're one who likes it. Anyway, I would really love it if you added me to your mailing list if you have one. My address is mypheonixfire@hotmail.com . I can't wait to see what happens next! Oh, btw, how often do you update? I wish you luck with the writing of the succeeding chapters.

~kati-chan (who can't be bothered to log in)

Holyyyyy $#!T hella good story update as soon as you can cuz I seriously can't wait it's overly overly good