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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG Jayden is an ASS!!!! Can no one see that Devin hasn't had time to just sit doen and recover from everything! The last 72 hours of his life has been one whirlwind after another! First Chris, then Jayden, now Adam.... Devin is going to get a stress ulcer or something....
If Jayden does what he threatened to do to Devin....then he better find a new Consort because Devin won't be chained like a dog to his master!
Great work, this was the perfect chapter to re-ignite the flames of the plot!!!
If Jayden does what he threatened to do to Devin....then he better find a new Consort because Devin won't be chained like a dog to his master!
Great work, this was the perfect chapter to re-ignite the flames of the plot!!!
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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
AFF is seriously bothering me >.< I tried to post this uber long post regarding chapters 17 - 19 or along those lines... but it only showed half of it [ not even] and when i tried to post the rest of it... it did this funky thingie.. I dont even know.
ANYHOW
I WAS SO RIGHT [ in my suspions on Chris being preggie] although I dont know how much I like the idea truthfully Mpreg is a hard thing for me to aquire, mainly b/c I know how fundamentally..impossible that it. truthfully, if I had read that there was Mpreg in the section I prob would not have been inclined to read the story.
but now that I have [ and I am VERY happy that I have] I am hooked until the end of time <3
I think some more female characters would do well... even if this is a smutty yaoi story [ YAY ] we really only have two females, janice [ EVIL] and Sarah [ UBER COOL] but w.e.
this creation in general is amazing, and I am liking it.. although not the fact that Devin And Jayden have the same power, they seemed to compliment each other so, that I would not have thought them to have the same power.
your description [ or mulitple ones] was a good idea, a 'smart' definition, than a more dumb one. YAY for Chris, def a comic reliefe when needed.
anyhow, update soon
tata
carleigh_coolgirl@hotmail.com
ANYHOW
I WAS SO RIGHT [ in my suspions on Chris being preggie] although I dont know how much I like the idea truthfully Mpreg is a hard thing for me to aquire, mainly b/c I know how fundamentally..impossible that it. truthfully, if I had read that there was Mpreg in the section I prob would not have been inclined to read the story.
but now that I have [ and I am VERY happy that I have] I am hooked until the end of time <3
I think some more female characters would do well... even if this is a smutty yaoi story [ YAY ] we really only have two females, janice [ EVIL] and Sarah [ UBER COOL] but w.e.
this creation in general is amazing, and I am liking it.. although not the fact that Devin And Jayden have the same power, they seemed to compliment each other so, that I would not have thought them to have the same power.
your description [ or mulitple ones] was a good idea, a 'smart' definition, than a more dumb one. YAY for Chris, def a comic reliefe when needed.
anyhow, update soon
tata
carleigh_coolgirl@hotmail.com
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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I just started reading your fiction and I LOVE it!!! I read all of the chapters so far in one sitting. I love the storyline and the characters! I'm so glad that Devin finally got over his fear and committed himself to his husband. Those were some pretty hot and steamy chapters. Looking forward to reading ch. 22 and more of your writing!
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June 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YAY! A baby is on its way! Haha, just imagining Chris with a tummy the size of Asia is hilariously adorable. Adding Devin with the same problem in the scene maked it even funnier and more adorable! I am really loving this story and eagerly await the chapters to come!!
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June 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey There!
I am happy that you are happy to have a new reviewer, and I am sorry for not having reviewed in the last few updates [ did not know they existed] so now I am going to review per chapter, in this one review.. if that makes sense.
So, I got slightly confused during the rescue it self, I semi recall devin saying he was surrounded by am emcompassing light or something like that. // I think victors escape was too easy // like I unno xD I like it though. More suspense.
Poor sarah! And YES I am enjoying the compromise, I can’t wait until his virginity gets taken [bwehehe] but I am enjoying how you are not rushing it.
For some reasont he format is off on my p.c so I have to read the chapters in like UBER SMALL font or have to scroll to the side… ppsshhx D
Next chapter:
Aww YESH Sarah pwns, female power in this story of mainly men [ so far!]
I was almost literally ROFL but more like ROCL [ COMPYTER CHAIR]
… it didn’t say anywhere that devin was the one to have the baby, my bet is Jaydens going to be all llike… adduurrhhh I AM having the child. We shall see.
Next chapter
…You are to be the birth father of the future king and…” looks like my guess was wrong. Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
p.s I did this throughout the chapters so I may have spazzed a bit...
doing great!
Although I wish the format would be changed i have to read it at like 7.5 size font... xD
I am happy that you are happy to have a new reviewer, and I am sorry for not having reviewed in the last few updates [ did not know they existed] so now I am going to review per chapter, in this one review.. if that makes sense.
So, I got slightly confused during the rescue it self, I semi recall devin saying he was surrounded by am emcompassing light or something like that. // I think victors escape was too easy // like I unno xD I like it though. More suspense.
Poor sarah! And YES I am enjoying the compromise, I can’t wait until his virginity gets taken [bwehehe] but I am enjoying how you are not rushing it.
For some reasont he format is off on my p.c so I have to read the chapters in like UBER SMALL font or have to scroll to the side… ppsshhx D
Next chapter:
Aww YESH Sarah pwns, female power in this story of mainly men [ so far!]
I was almost literally ROFL but more like ROCL [ COMPYTER CHAIR]
… it didn’t say anywhere that devin was the one to have the baby, my bet is Jaydens going to be all llike… adduurrhhh I AM having the child. We shall see.
Next chapter
…You are to be the birth father of the future king and…” looks like my guess was wrong. Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
p.s I did this throughout the chapters so I may have spazzed a bit...
doing great!
Although I wish the format would be changed i have to read it at like 7.5 size font... xD
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June 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
and the rest of my overly long post
. Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
. Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
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June 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am confused as to why my full is not showing.. xD
Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
Poor Devin. I still think my assumption is correct… it could just be a twist <. < ….>.>… <.<…. ^.^ hence the current mood swing of Jayden.
IS CHRIS PREGGIE????????
Would he not be happy that Janice is dead? Okay so he was her ‘mom’ but like… not even. She a bitch that threw him out and ect, a dip shizzzz xD
Stopping for now. So these are my comments until chapter 17.
I will have another post to help catch myself up from 18 – 21 [ prob sometime this night]
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June 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Once again another lovely chapter. Chris is just so adorable and I loved his reactions to morning sickness :) I have friends who went through it and we all reacted pretty much like Adam, Devin, and Sarah. It's perfect!
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June 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so, I tried to review yesterday before I went to bed, and it was just like "BAM! I don't want your review!"
This makes Surreal sad....
ANYWAY, now to RETYPE it before I read Flaming in the Dorms *giggling in excitement for that*
So. I've GOT to know something. It's like, seriously bugging me now. A mage's partner is their partner forever, right? I mean, when one dies, then they are eventually 'reborn' and then find each other in another life, correct? Does that mean that Chris is Damien? Or... well... Not exactly DAMIEN, but... Oh, you know what I mean, right?
Also... what is this kid going to think when it realizes that daddy's best friend is also his big brother? Hahaha. Talk about messing with the poor kiddo's head. =D
This makes Surreal sad....
ANYWAY, now to RETYPE it before I read Flaming in the Dorms *giggling in excitement for that*
So. I've GOT to know something. It's like, seriously bugging me now. A mage's partner is their partner forever, right? I mean, when one dies, then they are eventually 'reborn' and then find each other in another life, correct? Does that mean that Chris is Damien? Or... well... Not exactly DAMIEN, but... Oh, you know what I mean, right?
Also... what is this kid going to think when it realizes that daddy's best friend is also his big brother? Hahaha. Talk about messing with the poor kiddo's head. =D
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June 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I surely won't stop reading it as long as you keep writing it. XD I enjoy this story very much and will wait for more. I like the idea of Chris being pregnant, but I would love even more the idea of Devin pregnant. XDD Oh, well. If I have to wait for it to happen I will, and I will enjoy this story till then. :)