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June 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You're not going to be happy with my comment..but I didn't like the first part of this new chappy (23).
Man don't talk like this : I love you, you're my everything, what would I do without you?, etc. and certainly not this long IF they happen to talk about sentiment (and we know that this is pretty rare loll). They gave me the impression of two teenage girl...brrr...loll I didn't found this scene credible. Too much sugar and sweetness.
But my fangirl is really satisfied with the kinky sex :P Make-up sex always the best nah!
I want to hang the Councilman Julius by the balls....can I??? please!!!! What an execrable man. Even if he as Aurora at heart, he acts so detestable. Chris doesn't have an easy week....go see Aunty Gwen, I'm going to make everything better :) lolll
Gwen
Man don't talk like this : I love you, you're my everything, what would I do without you?, etc. and certainly not this long IF they happen to talk about sentiment (and we know that this is pretty rare loll). They gave me the impression of two teenage girl...brrr...loll I didn't found this scene credible. Too much sugar and sweetness.
But my fangirl is really satisfied with the kinky sex :P Make-up sex always the best nah!
I want to hang the Councilman Julius by the balls....can I??? please!!!! What an execrable man. Even if he as Aurora at heart, he acts so detestable. Chris doesn't have an easy week....go see Aunty Gwen, I'm going to make everything better :) lolll
Gwen
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June 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You might want to change the story to *ch. 23 added*. Just a thought. =)
Yay Adam for fixing things! He's a good dad. I like him.
Jayden cares SO much about Devin. It's almost too much, in a way, if he's going to keep stuff like that from Devin when other people (or Devin himself) could get seriously hurt. But it's just so sweet and adorable and gah! who cares! ^_^
Councilman What's-his-face (he doesn't deserve a name) is an ASSHOLE! I hate him already. Poor Chrissybaby.....He didn't deserve that! I hope Adam is able to tell that something is wrong and sets him straight before Chris does something stupid like try to leave. I'm already imagining horrible things happening to Mr. What's-his-face. Like... painful and horrible things.
I'm glad you had a dream about boxy. Somebody needs to, since I am incapable of dreaming (sad fact...)
Yay Adam for fixing things! He's a good dad. I like him.
Jayden cares SO much about Devin. It's almost too much, in a way, if he's going to keep stuff like that from Devin when other people (or Devin himself) could get seriously hurt. But it's just so sweet and adorable and gah! who cares! ^_^
Councilman What's-his-face (he doesn't deserve a name) is an ASSHOLE! I hate him already. Poor Chrissybaby.....He didn't deserve that! I hope Adam is able to tell that something is wrong and sets him straight before Chris does something stupid like try to leave. I'm already imagining horrible things happening to Mr. What's-his-face. Like... painful and horrible things.
I'm glad you had a dream about boxy. Somebody needs to, since I am incapable of dreaming (sad fact...)
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! Hmm, now I'm interested in what Adam was climbing. I don't think they would just help them up, probably carry them around every where. And the cravings! Food they have never heard of. XD. Ahhhh goodness, my eyes are watering. Haha, funny images. Devin, hurry up and get pregnant so we can see you and Chris all lovely and large! I anxiously await the next chapters.
Curiosity
Curiosity
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
No babies for Devin and Jayden here? I'll have to live with it. XD After this you can alway write a sequel. ;) I won't stop reading. This story is too good to stop reading it. And it's good to know that there is an actual end somewhere in the future. XD Knowing that it is (or will be) finished makes it all the better for the story. If it is completed then everything is said and ended (more or less anyway) and I like that. I'll be waiting for the ramaining chapters eagerly.
I liked this one. Poor Chris. I hope he'll come around and will start loving his unborn child. Don't let him be a bad parent that doesn't love his kid like his mother! ;) And poor Devin as well. XD He deserved that. I feel bad for Jayden, but he'll have quite a surprise when he sees that Devin is willing to do the training. Will you write it? It should be fun! XD I can so imagine Devin doing all those submissive exercises. :D
I liked this one. Poor Chris. I hope he'll come around and will start loving his unborn child. Don't let him be a bad parent that doesn't love his kid like his mother! ;) And poor Devin as well. XD He deserved that. I feel bad for Jayden, but he'll have quite a surprise when he sees that Devin is willing to do the training. Will you write it? It should be fun! XD I can so imagine Devin doing all those submissive exercises. :D
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I've been away but I have now caught up on the back chapters and I am still just in live with the story. Can't wait for Devin and Jayden's kiss and make up scene.
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 22 - Ngh.......omg what the helllllllllllllll! I came to this party SO LATE. I feel really bad, I check aff pretty much daily and I've seen the summary quite a few times and I dunno. But 7 hours ago I said what the hell and decided to click on it and I'm...oh my god, I'm so in love with this story. Honestly, either I'm crazy or your character description is beautiful. I can picture all of the characters so well in my head and I've never been able to picture characters that well. Andddddd.... I love Chris a lot. And I knew he was preggo! And omfg Jayden is so hot and so is Devin.. I mean together they are just nghhhhhh HOT. I LOVED the chapter where Devin told Zackary to fuck off. Because at the end of the chapter right before that I was like...eh..if Devin doesn't do something about this little boytoy harlot I'll go crazzzzy. AND THEN HE DID AND OMG~ so great! I hate how Devin keeps making things difficult. He finally had a decent relationship with Jayden now and ughhh. I mean, I get it but still. Jayden should realize that Devin is scared shitless but Devin should realize that Jayden is doing a lot for him and going against protocol/law is a bit much. My mind is lost.... 7 hours... its 7am now rofl. Did I mention how sinful Jayden and Dev are together? Oh, and possessive Jayden is really too hot. Hopefully, there's more of that in store for us! And...... is it strange that I find Adam really cute in a creepy kind of way? I'm not sure why it's creepy. Maybe its the whole 822 years old, with a son whose bestfriend is his consort... who is his son's reincarnated father... but I really fell in love with Adam in the beginning when he was first introduced. So, now I'm more going crazy about Jayden. Mmmm... Jayden~
And now its time for sleep~ in which I'll have lurvly dreams of Jayden and Dev.
Update soon!
P.S. It bothers me how Dev is consistantly private about certain things. Even though Chris and Sarah are his best friends he doesn't confide in them very often (at least lately he doesn't). And he has so many problems.. it would help him to talk about it a little. It would be even better to talk to Jayden or Adam about his problems, but... I don't really see that happening anytime soon.
P.S.S. I want my own personal Jayden!
And now its time for sleep~ in which I'll have lurvly dreams of Jayden and Dev.
Update soon!
P.S. It bothers me how Dev is consistantly private about certain things. Even though Chris and Sarah are his best friends he doesn't confide in them very often (at least lately he doesn't). And he has so many problems.. it would help him to talk about it a little. It would be even better to talk to Jayden or Adam about his problems, but... I don't really see that happening anytime soon.
P.S.S. I want my own personal Jayden!
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
EGADS! MIND BOGGLING! haha
Sorry about the Damien/Darien mistake. But there's only one letter difference! *pouts*
I feel awful for Jayden and Devin.... I understand why Devin is so frustrated and terrified, but I understand why Jayden is so upset too. I think he's forgetting again that Devin knows nothing about Aurora compared to him, and that includes all things about his powers. Until his little conversation with Adam, he didn't realize that just because he didn't WANT to use his powers, that didn't mean that he would be able to stop himself in some sort of an emotional high. I don't think Jayden made that clear enough for him. Perhaps if Jayden had just sat Devin down and talked to him about why he didn't want to do the training and bla bla, then those two knuckleheads wouldn't be fighting and would be involved in lots of delicious smexyness like they SHOULD be! *pouting again*
Sorry about the Damien/Darien mistake. But there's only one letter difference! *pouts*
I feel awful for Jayden and Devin.... I understand why Devin is so frustrated and terrified, but I understand why Jayden is so upset too. I think he's forgetting again that Devin knows nothing about Aurora compared to him, and that includes all things about his powers. Until his little conversation with Adam, he didn't realize that just because he didn't WANT to use his powers, that didn't mean that he would be able to stop himself in some sort of an emotional high. I don't think Jayden made that clear enough for him. Perhaps if Jayden had just sat Devin down and talked to him about why he didn't want to do the training and bla bla, then those two knuckleheads wouldn't be fighting and would be involved in lots of delicious smexyness like they SHOULD be! *pouting again*
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm kind of blank in the head at the moment, but I wanted to review and just say that it was great (I love this kind of emotional scenes)
Sun is shining bright outside and my shoulders are red because of it. Where did my can't-get-burned luck go? Last year I was as pale as a ghost xD
Must resist touching... since it hurts xD
Sun is shining bright outside and my shoulders are red because of it. Where did my can't-get-burned luck go? Last year I was as pale as a ghost xD
Must resist touching... since it hurts xD
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June 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The little devil in my head say: choose death, choose death, choose death!!! loll bad little devil!
You too you were not funny pregnant?! :P I'm not sure my hubby want an other child after this one, He fear me loll!!! I was insane, like, you don't love me, I'm too big (I gave birth at 26weeks not 40 so I was never really big loll)...the room's not going to be ready, etc.
The pregnancy and birth explication was pretty clear (well for me :P). It's almost like a cesarean. And just 4month, nothing to long. Poor Chris, you're not really selfish, it's just that for the first in your young life you have someone that love you, just you, it's normal that you're afraid for your new life.
You didn't let Jayden and Devin have a long honeymoon, bad girl. :) Devin's fear what he can do but Adam had reason that it's better prevent, than wait. Now....hot-make-up-monkey-sex!!! Hot! Hot!
Gwen
You too you were not funny pregnant?! :P I'm not sure my hubby want an other child after this one, He fear me loll!!! I was insane, like, you don't love me, I'm too big (I gave birth at 26weeks not 40 so I was never really big loll)...the room's not going to be ready, etc.
The pregnancy and birth explication was pretty clear (well for me :P). It's almost like a cesarean. And just 4month, nothing to long. Poor Chris, you're not really selfish, it's just that for the first in your young life you have someone that love you, just you, it's normal that you're afraid for your new life.
You didn't let Jayden and Devin have a long honeymoon, bad girl. :) Devin's fear what he can do but Adam had reason that it's better prevent, than wait. Now....hot-make-up-monkey-sex!!! Hot! Hot!
Gwen
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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am not pleased with this chapter in fact i suggest a revision!! In the place of Chris saying 'his sexy man' meaning of course, Adam, i think it should be changed to 'vicxn's sexy man' so no one gets confused as to who Adam really belongs with!! Lol.
And i would also like to say if Chris is really unsure about having Adam's baby then i would gladly take his place ( with a lot of practicing first of course)
The actual birth of an Auroran child sounds well scary and im really pleased im human, i mean the baby breaking out of the abdominal wall itself, what are they kung fu babies or something?
Isnt it strange how all my reviews seem to centre around Adam, you would think i had some kind of obscession would'nt you lol.
Any way, another brilliant chapter and i look forward to the next one. Update soon plz.
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And i would also like to say if Chris is really unsure about having Adam's baby then i would gladly take his place ( with a lot of practicing first of course)
The actual birth of an Auroran child sounds well scary and im really pleased im human, i mean the baby breaking out of the abdominal wall itself, what are they kung fu babies or something?
Isnt it strange how all my reviews seem to centre around Adam, you would think i had some kind of obscession would'nt you lol.
Any way, another brilliant chapter and i look forward to the next one. Update soon plz.
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