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Very good work as always! And I'm glad to see Devin isn't fighting the training as much, even though I'd be doing the same thing - fighting back tooth and nail!!! I actually envisioned a scene where, outside of 'offficial' training, Jayden tried the Master/Apprentice rule again and pisses Devin off, whereby Devin threatens to live in the Tower like Jayden threatened a couple of chapters ago. He would even say that Jayden could go back to sleeping with his whores again, since he views Devin as nothing more than a job or obligation, mainly for kids and whatnot. LOL but thats just me throwing the angst back at that couple!

Great work again!!!

my initial respsonce to the end of the chapter was a longated

"Rawrrr" I am pretty sure that is a good thing ^_^

I like it, although i still think that devin accepted this whole tranning thing much too easily, BUT the way you did was seemed well thought out. ... I doubt i could ever do what Chris does... I would be more in line with devin's thinking *ponders if i should try.." naaahh xD

I liked this chapter better than ch 23 but I unno i think its still missing your flare... but it was good =)

OOH soon I am going to have a few stories up [ once my account comes alive again] and once that happens I'll let you know, [ hoping you will review and read - IF you like them]

keep updating ^_^

Haha, it'll probably be adorable! I was bored and started watching Disney movies, but halfway through the Lion King 2 I suddenly realized that if Jayden and Devin were lions, they could look like Simba and a male Nala. It was an odd thought but Simba's red mane and him being king made me think of this story. Anyway, I can't wait for the baby, and I'm sad but proud of Chris for refusing but considering Julius's offer/demand. You're slowly growing up Chris. Well, good night.

Chap. 23 - YAAAAAAAAAAAY! I got a really really long reply to my really really long review that I wrote really fast when I was really really tired so I thought it wasn't going to make sense at all but I still tried to smash all 22 chapter responses into it!!! WOO! I'm glad it made you happy! And I can totally see Chris being your writer creation baby thing. He really is too adorable. In a rebellious sexy child way...err... ignore the creepiness of that comment. Andddd this chapter was really hot. Jayden losing control with his adorable newlywed consort? Omg...... Calling him my pet? Ngh.... so hot. Dev becoming more agressive with his husband but still adorably shy? OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG. And, yes, I agree Adam is hot but all I really want is my sexy, possessive Jayden! I totally love your scenario of Jayden being all cute and cuddly with Devin and then casting glares when he isn't looking. So perfect! And...... ok, back to what I was gonna say first! I'm glad they talked it out in the beginning and the fluffy part infront of Adam was adorable. And I really hope Chris doesn't go along with Julius... somehow I only see it getting worse. But because of the pregnancy he is moody and... well, I dunno. Maybe he'll make some rash decision. I really hope not, though! Adam would tear Julius apart for sure.

Bless ya, as if i could ever give u a bad review. Its just not possible. Seriously tho, have u recieved any bad reviews for this story because i cant imagine why, its amazing!!
Loved the sex with Devin and Jayden, vereeee hot. Not sure if i already said this but if Chris loses interest while pregnant jus want you to kno that Adam always has somewhere to go :)
Wot an evil little man that Julius is!! Poor Chris, just hope he doesnt listen to him. He should go see Adam to make things better!!
Keep up the good work and update soon plz
lots of love (and kisses for Adam)
Vic xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Sorry forgot to say......
“You’re wrong Jayden.” Devin’s softly whispered words caused Jayden to pause. “You’re true gift is your generous heart. It’s the love and compassion that you show everyone around you. This power, or gift, or whatever you want to call is just a small part of you. I’ve never met anyone as thoughtful, and caring, and wonderful as you are. And you’ll never convince me that just because this ‘ability’ is within your power that you would ever use it to harm someone else without a good reason.”

.....nearly made me cry :)
love it!!
vic xxxxxxxx

Now, I read Ch. 2 again... and even though I only slightly recall what occured... I think this chapter is written better, but you seem to be throwing a lot of the later discovered information into that chapter, like you're trying to at least mention it once before it becomes more a a big deal. Which is a good thing, dont get me wrong,... but I think the info should bre spread out perhaps over at least on more chapter.

AND chapter 23, I dont know how much I liked it. I enjoyed Adam being all like RAWR but really. Jayden was not quite put into place the way I had enivisoned it. It seemed like the only person who really got repremended was Devin. At least in the aspect of Devin and Jayden anyways. Looking forward to the rest though ^_^

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I always use to wait an hour or two before reviewing xD I've read things all day. Brain dead...
That man was so evil! Yes, I'm bad with names. I don't want Chris to leave! I will kill Evil Man with my epic weapon: Big Fan (+80 heat resistance)!
Sunburns are such a pain. Fortunately mine has stopped hurting and has transformed to a pale brown... I'm cursed with eternal paleness

AWESOME WORK!!!

Grrr. Chracters like Chris frustertate me to no end, it's just sooo hard when they listen to the dumb ass things people say and are like omg it's true whn really the bastard councilor is just being an f-ing bastard. I just want to shake them and be like don't listen to that shit, punch the bastard, tell someone what he is saying to you! But they never do...and it's just like yelling at the people on tv not to open the door.