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Another great chapter! I hated to see Dev go through that but would have been a bit disappointed if you had held back. Victor eyed Dev when he had been captured in the warehouse so it was kinda expected that he was raped. I was warmed that you closed the chapter with Dev even more resolute to not bend to Ashcrofts will.

I was also glad to see that you finally introduced Gabriel but suprised that Dev didn't know it was Kiran. How he was described in previous chapters of being a hero and how you portrayed him in this chapter gave me all sorts of respect for him. He is in an impossible situation and abused but not broken and still stands (err, kneels) by his destined mate; even though it is totally wasted on the POS Ashcroft. I only hope you don't kill him off so he has an opportunity to meet his son, Chris and looking forward to that.

I would have to say that the last few chapters have been outstanding. AC started out with a unique twist of Chris/Dev going to Aurora and the lengths Jayden had to go through to finally win over Devin. After that, it seriously slowed down (in my opinion at least) with too much fluff and lemon scenes. I knew it was necessary to develop the characters further and set the stage for what was to come but it came off as a "whine"-fest at times. When the characters started to get back on focus and the story started advancing again, it renewed my interest. I think you are a very good storyteller and writer and regardless of what you think, you do a great job with action and one of the few who can make the political court scenes interesting (lemon scenes are good too!). I have been working on a story myself and you are one of the AFF authors that I've studied as wanting to emulate your writing style. Lol, some of the authors here and on fictionpress make it look SOOO easy! My biggest hangups right now is keeping the correct POV, transitions, tense, and my excessive use of pronouns... =P

I guess hinting will let MY mind do the work then =) yaya
devin better kick some ashcroft[sp] arse!!! I wonder why he can't break the binding if he is on earth cuz, then my ash should not be able to do much binding at all.

so my guess is that they are not on earth.

gabriel. i wonder what his name really is =)

Errr, two things...

-- I wasnt kidding about Jayden having it out with Zach... a dull butter knife was perhaps a bit drastic but I want you to think of something fitting for the crime.

-- I'll be disappointed if Dev gets knocked up and there is question if Ashcroft is the father. =(

Fff... If anyone could die from reading, it must be something like the last two chapters. I feel like i nearly hold breath throughout chapter 33 and i nearly crushed my netbook between my hy sweaty palms the last chapter. Huh, this was really tough. But if you wonder this all is meant as compliment. I feel so much tension now, i couldn't spop reading, if there was more to read by now.
So btw i am lucky to be back home, so i can check every day for updates.

As if i could get bored of this, of Adam! How could u even think it!!
Poor poor Devin. Im glad that you didnt actually write the rape because i dont think i would have been able to read it. I hope that Jayden gets better soon and gets Devin out. Im guessing that 'Gabriel' really is Chris's father and im glad that he is there against his will (i dont mean that in an awful way) because at least he hasnt abandoned Chris but didnt really have a choice. If any of that makes sense.

I hope Zachary gets what's coming to him the devious, vicious little beast.
Im getting the feeling that this fic is going to be ending soon (dont want it to,hope im wrong) and was wondering, are you planning on doing a sequel?
xxxxxxx

OMG ive jus read one of ur reviews and they mentioned that it could be possible that Ashcroft could get Devin preggers. Thats not true tho right. Im sure i recall something about only his mate could get him preggers, or that he had to be willing. Gah i hope its not possible, poor Devin xxxx

Intriguing chapter Gabriel sounds so sweet and lovely it would be lovely if he was Chris's father that would explain a bit about Chris's sweet nature I do know for a fact that some things come genetically without anyone knowing how or why only because my father died before I was born so I never knew him but according to my mother there are certain things I do and ways I act that are a good deal of what he was like wierd huh. Anyhoo I just love this story it is so cool. Boy you have really nailed the arrogant, cruel idiot in Ashcroft one of those fools who thinks that power and ha ha respect comes from pain and humiliation along with degradation he so reminds me of a few gang leaders I use to know years ago they were idiots to and treated their gang members or anyone else like crap. I was never in any gang but I was a waitress where most of them hung out and got to know quite a few of the drip drongs. Any way I'm losing track again. It seems that Devin and Jaydens power mostly depends on focas and concentration so I think that Devin could probably learn to control his power on his own he seems to be able to already and with some deep concentration and focas I'm pretty sure that he could defeat Ashcroft in fact it seems that his worst problem is his own power and abilities because he is so powerful but he is also smart and strong and best of all a survivor so I think he could overcome his own power and learn to control it on his own when he really needs to do it. Especially if it's to save those he loved. I can imagine how freaked poor Adam is right now worrying about everyone and able to do little about it god how like father and son can you get really cool. As far as Zachary well I feel sorry for that little shit he's just a little jerk who has nothing and no one who cares for him or who he really cares for and tat is always devestating when it comes to someone's psyche and self confidence oh well he's always the type who seems to survive to cause more havoc but thank goodness he's not in any position to really cause to much. As far as how Devin reacted to his rape well that's pretty given Devin's personality isn't the type to react anything but furious and vengeful towards anyone who would hurt him or anyone else like that especially with his background on earth and what he did for a living. He knows that rape is never the vicitims fault and the only reason why a lot of people blame themselves is how they were brought up to react to it and how others react to them after it happens. I am so proud of Devin. I love how very consistent you are with the character personalities it's wonderful you are very good at writing and a pleasure to read not to mention that your imagination is fantastic. There are only a few stories I read on this site mainly because a good deal of them I'll read a little of it and then I can almost always tell how the story goes and come up with the story and ending before the author does and then I tend to find out I was right about it because so many of them are the same stuff over and over. That is why this story is so fascinating I can't do it with this one so every chapter is an exciting adventure so thank you so much I am having a blast reading this great story and can't wait for the next chapter so I'm waiting, waiting and anticipating for the next installment thank you for being who you are and for sharing with us all.

Oh man...Devin is going to kill Ashcroft painfully and slowly....I seriously cannot wait!!!

Hello, just come out of my bed 10min to read this chappy and tell you that I like when you write action scene!!! Don't say that you're not good at this. Lot of thing happens in this chappy but I can't comment much...my brain's dead! Yep too much med.
I'm find my self cold but I'm not really sad about C.Thomas's dead.
I knew that Zac the whore was not clear...now can I cut his little candy?!
He kidnap Devin??!?!!??!?!?! NOOOOOOO!!!!!!

Thank for the big bottle of ibuprofen. Already finished lolll! I'm feverish, I have asthma, the flu, can't eat, can't talk (my stupid horny hubby say that he can found an other use for my mouth ...phhhh) and all my body ache.

The worst it's that it's b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l outside!!!!! The best time this summer!!!

Gwen...who's broken but alive! loll

You may think i'll hate you more but I found this chapter more acceptable, there was no cliff hangers and no one is in immidiate danger. All is not well in the world but it is an acceptable end to a chapter without me wanting to strangle you lol. Good boy Devin, Adam you're useless, Jayden wake up, Ashcroft die.