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How could you?!?! You tell us that Devin's were not going to be pregnant!!! You lied, you meany.
You better not let him miscarriage (I have two already and it's so hard on the heart and the head) or his baby killed.
**Oil his leather cuffs/ankles and collar, cleans his whip, paddle and flogger. Point them with a threatening finger, see this, hum?! It's in case you're not nice in the next chappy to Devin**
(Little edit. My hubby's just happen to read this part when I was to send this review and he burst out laughing. He tell me to tell you that you fear nothing since I'm just a little bunny without teeth)

I knew that you were not going to answer all of my questions (pout) but I had to ask them, because now I can say, when some were going to be answer back : I knew it! mouhahahahaha!
Ok now that Chris know what condition Devon's in, that the little-shit-slut's a traitor and can find where is Devin.... Time to let the cavalry go and kill all the bad guy and rescue Devin. Because Devin start to scare me and with all the shit that already happen to him, it's going to take time to him to escape this (the scars that will remain in his head) and be better.

Taro's makes me uncomfortable, don't know why. Who his is going to be his mate??

I fear that you reach, tranquilly but surely the end of this wonderful and beautiful story.
Glad that my review can make you laugh. It's the minimum I can do for you.
Gwengel

i had a feeling that there was two since the little boy popped up into hmm i forgot hte word but i'll call it 'chris' hybernation state' but yeah poor chris and he is so selfless that its almost heartbreaking but thats what he was used to back with his 'old master' on the earth plane, having to keep it all in or face punishment? and WHAT THE HECK DEV HAVING ASHCROFTS BABY??? you truely are insane and gonna make me cry, stupid evil mate killing, horrible husband and evil person! grr 'shakes fist at you' you truely are evil but not as evil and ashcroft at least that would be impossible, though i do wish that they would kill him already and some how wipe his spirit of its memories so that chris' 'baby momma' could be happy again i feel bad for him because hes broken i mean it seems like he definately has some of his spirit intack but it is definately broken mostly, but i know its probably impossible to strip ashcroft's spirit of its memories and force it threw a journey of ultimate cleansing since he has been evil for so long and if spelled names wrong uh like 'ashcroft' sorry im bad at memory even if i just read it seconds ago! lol 'hearts anyways' cant wait for more.

oh yeah i forgot ot add, are both the twins whats his faces made 'lol forgot his name' or is only one? i mean that has to be an intresting twist if both are his mate i mean that would have to be even rarer than twins in general and i think that would mean the soul of the twins would have had to be split in half at some point which is crazy since isnt the soul already split being that their mate is their 'other half'?

I actually went back a chapter when i first started reading this chapter becuase it was soo similary to your last chapter.

Chris is becoming a pimp with all his powers and abilities man! good for him.

Poor devin!!

I KNEW THEY WERE TWINS. I called that back when he first got pregnant!!!!! boo ya!

Thanks for the welcome!
I dont like it when people do the flames i see the point in constructive criticizism but not flames if you dont like the story dont read it! It may have been rough but it was good because its hard to catch my attention and you surely did so your doing something right lol.
I enjoyed this chapter in a weird way, cause im happy that we deffo know who chris' birth father is! Aww please let Jayden find Deving soon. Its sad what hes doing to him with the rapes and all. It would be weird if it comes back saying Devins pregnant and it turns out to be Victors! Oh that would be weird but...a good twist!!
Aww its so nice that we know that the babys Augustus mate XD Is it twins by any chance?? Ohh please please please update asap!!

Edaj xx

Oh thank goodness Kiran is there!! I was afraid Devin would succumb to the darkness surrounding him and he'd be lost (at least for a bit)!
OMG, such a good/tragic background for Ashcroft and Kiran! It was so sad! I almost felt pity for Ash when I read it...until he killed his child and the doctor, then I felt much the same as Devin did...omg, Ash is such a...bluurrgghh! Oh, and I love how Theodore became Adam and A&K's baby eventually became Chris, that was a good plot development! (I liked Devin's assumption that it was him and Jayden, that would have been interesting too! It's what i initially thought as well, lol--but now i'm really interested as to who D&J were in their past lives)
Oh, I do hope that there's no wayward souls floating about Ashcroft and Devin when they're...together...ew...
and I am intrigued by Devin's moral conundrum concerning Ash (minus the vomiting, lol), that is, whether or not to kill Ash's reincarnation right off the bat...what should one do if they knew where the Devil Child was, or heaven forbid, it was their own child? (Oh, I hope he doesn't reincarnate as D&J's child!) Should they kill him since his soul is forever tainted with evil? Is there a way to cleanse him? Which kinda makes me wonder as to the purpose of Chris' soul choosing to be the child of Ash and Kiran's souls once again...is there perhaps some purification project going on behind that? Which also makes me wonder, are Devin and Jayden even going to have a baby? For some reason I just have this feeling that they won't...
Yeah, Ash's motives seem a bit clearer now that we know he just wants to taint Adam's soul. I did initially wondered why Ash didn't let Kiran just kill Chris and be tainted so that he could be w/ Kiran again, but then as I read more it makes sense that he would rather have his intricate plan for others to suffer be his priority over reuniting w/ his other half.
Oh great, more dire warnings! I know nothing seriously bad will happen to Chris or his children, but I can't help but worry about them anyway and everyone else; ergh! I just want Ashcroft and his cronies gone! I'm so glad Jayden's finally awake so the hunt can begin!
Oh, I love that Augustus finally knows that one of Chris's children is is mate, his reaction was very endearing! I hope that soon they'll figure out he has twins; that'll be another nice emotional romp, but in a good way, lol!
Oh, I love the idea of the sequel being about Jiro finding a mate!
Also, best line ever: "It was slowly sinking in to Devin’s mind that Ashcroft was completely insane" LOL, like it wasn't already obvious, Devin! =)
Again, great work! Can't wait for the next one!

Wow I finally got to read this update I've been so busy I didn't have time I knew it was there but of course I wanted to wait so I could read it slow and enjoy it so I finally did and it was AWESOME yes totally awesome. I love the fact that even though Devin was losing it with depression and the pain and shall we whisper yes fear turned into anger that once pointed out with Ashcrofts story he recognized it and did a emotional and mental back pedal that was so cool. I was devestated to hear of Ashcroft's pain and the result of it I realize that he has to be taken out of course but surely Devin is smart and strong enough to maybe help him overcome his curse and come back to dare I say it the light side then maybe his second half won't have to suffer throughout eternity to although I wouldn't have a clue how you could do that I mean you have such an awesome imagination and are sooooooooooo clever couldn't you think of something god listen to me I am such a schmuck. Yes I too have met way to many people who try to overcome being like someone else which is kind of lame because no one is ever exactly alike I figure if you have the same traits as someone else than whatever there still your traits to right and it makes you who you are so accept it and move on. I am so thrilled that Devin is going to work on mastering his gifts I mean like you said he knows the basics and those he can work on until he can actually use his gift and I have no doubt that he can break that binding to he just needs to concentrate and focus real hard and he knows that he's not just strong in his gift he's pretty strong in any department and that is so cool. I think Chris is so much stronger than everyone gives him credit to including him if he wasn't how in the world could he be able to see auras and even affect them now that is awesome it would be so cool if he helped Devin with Ashcroft and helped Ashcroft be able to change his ways with a gift like that maybe change the black aura into some kind of guilt of conscience color oh jeez what a silly thought sorry guess I'm tired. Well I can not wait for the next update waiting breathlessly on very painful pins and needle owwwwwww!!!! Thank you thank you for sharing your amazing writing gift with all of us I bow to your ingeniousness big huggies to keep you going with your ttaaallleeennnttt!!!!!!!!

To be honest i havnt read the one shot with Chris. Not because i dont think it will be any good, but because i like Chris too much to be able to read about him suffering. I may read it at one point but not in the near future i dont think.
Ooh a sequel, goodie. After reading this chapter i was thinking about wanting to read about Augustus and Taro. I felt really sorry for Augustus in the other chapter when Adam mentioned that he had been waiting so long for his mate. It was nice to see his reaction when he realised Chris was carrying his mate as well. Someone deserves a little happiness at the moment.
Im a bit sad that Keran is stuck with Ashcroft as his other half. Would it be possible for him to get together with someone else or does he have to stick with Ashcroft or no one. If Ashcroft's soul is tainted now, does that mean that it will be tainted with each and every one of his incarnations so Keran will never be happy?
I have no idea if any of this makes sense lol. Im just typing as it comes to me.
I think thats it for now though, no doubt if i think of something else ill let you know.
vic xxx

Ooh, lol thought of something before i posted it lol.
The sequel for flaming sounds good but i hope its not going to finish yet lol, still crave Dae and Scott naughtyness. And i look forward to the silly story you're thinking about, no doubt its going to be good.

Oh yeah, lmao , sorry i jus keep thinking of things. I just want to say how amazing you are coming up with so many details and back grounds for this story. The beginning of the chapter, the lesson, was brilliant. So much depth, i dont know how you do it. Well done.
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Hiya, long time no see lmao.
Jus realised wot u said bout my second review before. Unless im reading it wrong are you saying that it is possible for Ashcroft to get Dev preggers?
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I am so happy for Augustus, he so deserves to find his soul mate. I just wonder what's going to happen when the other baby's soul mate notices too. You give me all this wonderful plot and intrigue and I can't help but obsess over babies. Which reminds me, please do not make Devin pregnant by Ashcroft. I think that would be the most tragic thing yet.

Have I told you how much I love it that your story is so well thought out and intelligent? I think I have, but I want to say it again anyway. I am a fanatic about plot holes and things that make no sense, but yours are immaculate.