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Chapter 5. Jealous Ero is so tantalizing. Poor Lan getting the short end of the stick when Ero goes on a jealous rampage. Good thing Ero knows when to stop shoving the stick-. Anyways, I'd probably do just what Lan did. And Rosh is quick to open his hut to Lan and Ero must have been more than just riled to know that Lan could be heading that way than staying at his. Hm. At least Ero is reflecting and I think Lan will have it harder in the morning. The village women will probably accuse Lan of being quick wit with getting Ero under the bed covers and now Lan's heading to take down Rosh with the accusation of Ero being a danger to him. I must read more. Onto the next chapter!

Chapter 6. Last paragraph at the end of the chapter. "Shaking his head, Ero tucked the leather braid into a pouch." I think you meant to say "Lan" instead of "Ero" there in that sentence; about the middle of the paragraph. There were some words that were spelled right but wasn't the correct word for the sentence too, here and there. Of course, spell check wouldn't be able to catch it though.

Ero standing in challege to claim Lan and Rosh defending his right to claim Lan. Woo~ That was real tense and I was hoping that fists would fly. But my disappointment in that was changed when I finished reading the chapter. Now I wonder if The God will grant Rosh's or Ero's claim as a catalyst to some bigger plan. Like the barbarians in their stone fortress will come to lay siege to them in claiming territory and such stuff. -shrugs- A small window to what I've sometimes read during times of boredom. X3

Chapter 7. Woo~ I've been tense since I started this chapter and it kept getting harder to breath when I came close to the end. And now I'm giddy with anticipation on who The God possessed. I bet it's Lan. Dun, dun, dun, dun~ Onto the next chapter!

Chapter 8. Ahahahahaha~ My tummy hurts. I wouldn't want to leave the hut if I was Lan. It would be a struggle of both the village and me but I understand Lan's need to fulfill his duties as the village healer. It's sad that Lan and Ero are not going to mate but I know better that the longer the wait, the more fruitful the relationship.

Chapter 9. Woo~ Sex without penetration has never been as sexy and erotic as this. Either than or I somehow missed it. -ponders- Oh well. Next chapter!

Chapter 10. I like it that this chapter is smoothing out some of the bumps in the story and as far as I can see, it's coming down to a smooth plateau. Of course, I do expect a climb later with a spike to another climax. :3 Definitely waiting for the next chapter.

Chapter 1. Woo~ Now that was a bait and lure chapter. Ero's quiet, quick and precise movement against Lan's startled, clumsy and determined one mixed with the wild boar's stamped kept me on my seat's edge. Well, my bed anyways since I was reading it while sitting on it. You've got yourself another fan. :3

Chapter 2. My thoughts were exactly like Eros that Lan wasn't so up to in defending himself and his lack of awareness on the things happening around him. I was delightedly shocked when Lan turned his hand and not only proved a point in the war room, but won it while he's at it. And that left Ero with a stiff going to bed. X3 I couldn't help but laugh in mirth with Ero defeated and Lan satisfied.

Chapter 3. OOOO Ero's got his own cleverness. I'm happy to know that he's not only a hunter but a leader with a quick wit as well. I empathize with Lan and his position. My culture has similar trains of thoughts like the women but with more "hmph" to their silent plotting. Deeply rooted like a tree Lan and tidal wave Eros. Sooner or later Lan will not only bend to Ero but become uprooted. :3

Chapter 4. So tempting. Ero is full of honest desires and he still had enough respect and good sense to not bend to Lan's demand. Lan had every right to want to get it over with if it was his body that Ero wanted. Every man and women would feel that way if the pursuit wasn't to love and cherish. A rising climax and quick drop off the unseen cliff. I like it~.