rate_review Reviews

wanting the other 26 chapters please! I like this story so far.. and should be entertaining with the fallout...

Ah, those first two chapters were cute! Poor Madison, though - I mean, she's all miserable and sick and then has to deal with a naked hunk of man to fall through her window? Hahaha. It's great! I loved it.

I actually didn't notice any tense mistakes - mostly just a few pronoun mistakes here and there (using his for her). Other than that, your writing is refreshingly clean. Your prose, especially, in some places just made me stop and go, "Whoa, that was a great line." Ex. "...the water formed icy dewdrops that looked like broken glass covering the pavements and road." Man, sometimes it just doesn't get better than that. You also did a great job at really making me feel how Madison felt (gremlin slime in her throat? Oh, ew, but awesome all the same :) ).

As for Asher - tsk! tsk! Although, sometimes it's hard to be mad at the hottie :) I think I'll be amused to read Madison's reaction when she finds out what he told Brian.

Also, I'm excited to know that you have most of the story blocked out (I envy you...outlines are the bane of my existence and I tend to jump head first into writing without knowing how deep the pool is). I'll definitely keep an eye on this to see where it goes!

Good work so far!

~cu-kid

I really like your story so far. both of your characters are believable, and hilarious for that matter. i can't wait for the next chapter!

Yay! More more more more more more more, please. Cute story.

great two chapters!
cant wait to see where you go with this story!
cant wait for more (:

I love it!!! This has to definitely continue. I'm so glad you have it all planned out already, because I don't think I can wait very long. I love the fact that Madison has such a fiery personality. She and Asher are going to be so cute together XD!!!

cute. you asked for a review, so I'm giving ya one. I will let you know though that it appears as though your T button on your keyboard doesn't work, either that or you keep mistaking Madison for a guy, hehe. and the names don't stay the same. you referred to nina as nina drew and nina adams, which might have just been a slip on your part. but it's cute. I would like to see more of this story :)

Great, great beginning. No problem with your grammar or any of that. Flowed very nicely with good character development. Would not have known you are a first-timer. Very anxious to read more!

I am liking this, I hope you put up more chapters soon, I can't wait to read them.

omg, i love your summary and story and i hope u update soon unlike others! please email me if you can when u do. i wish they had a story alert like fanfiction.net. can you see my email?