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Well, I think your english is pretty good ! And your story is great too !
I want to read more, please, update soon...

Holly!! What happen to that poor officer?? Wrong place wrong time perhaps? hum... I have a bad feeling about all this! ;;

Anyways, the update was as awesome as all the others! I loved it!! :D

I really can't wait to get back in the 'present' to see what's going to happen to Marcus... not that the past isn't interesting or anything (quite the contrary), but still! >__< argh!

I can't wait to read more of ur story! Past or present, I don't care!!! >> (I'm that desperate) ;; Pathetic, I know! LOL T_____T

Thanks alot fo the update! *hugs*

Good stuff! I see how your plot is thickening... with his "brother" needing a leverage and Lou needing help. While looking forward to your update, I read the story 3 more times. I realized that he's probably only been with Evans 6 months, before O'Neil went into hiding for 1.5 years. Must have made an impact -amazing that Evans was so attached to him in that short period of time. Odd also that a restaurant owner should have that much "power" - lots of questions. Love how your devious mind works and I'm very excited about where you're taking us. Thanks for your updates!!

such a great new chapter, can´t wait for the next

Wow. I really like this. Considering you mentioned that English is not your main language, you're doing great.

curses = courses (sounds almost the same but it threw me off my reading when you used it in the first chapter.)

Another thing to make it easier to read, could you put a space between paragraphs. It just helps reduce eyestrain when you are fixated on the computer screen for hours.

I'm going to be keeping an eye on this story. I just love those take it because I can antagonists. I hope Marcus can keep his spunky attitude when he wakes up in the back of the car.

Later

Kiix

This story is delightful - it has moments of scary and sexy and laughing out loud. (The latter mostly due to the stream of consciousness of your hero. He's adorable.)

loving it

Great job with the scene! I had a lot of fun reading it - love these spunky characters. I'm definitely looking forward to more adventures of O'Neill and Evans. :-) And how Evans will react when Phields is not the one he is looking for! ;-)

I might be slow... or blind... but I didn't find this story until last night and I LOVE it! LOVE-LOVE-LOVE! I now want to but you in a locked room with a computer and make sure you update OFTEN... *grin* Nah, I'll settle for just hoping and begging...

Omg! That son of a bitch! He's such an evil perverted and fucking selfish bastard!!!

I already hate his fucking guts! grr What's he gonna do to poor Marcus??! ;;

That evil man... *pulls out a gun-Bamm!*

*takes a deep breath* I really don't see how anything could work out with Julian. What's he gonna do now???

X______X He totally killed any reason for me to like him, even if it's just a tiny little bit, since chapter 2! >>

*sights* Anyways, I can't wait to see how this goes from here! It's pretty interesting (and frustrating) but still quite a nice read! :D

Thanks for the stoy! And plz update again soon! *hugs*