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Wow, this is really interesting!

Wow, really interesting so far, please continue!

I was hoping there would be a bit more action in this chapter, but alas, there wasn't any! But at least you introduced two more characters... And Dhuannar (hope I spelt it right) is the main character, not Seneca? I'm slightly confused, but oh well.

Is Dhuannar anorexic or something? His food was talking to him...?

So....Dhaunner is the prince and the Seneca thing was....mistaked identity. Is that right? Whatever, this looks very promising. I hope you update again soon :D

I liked it. Your characters are cute, and the voice is interesting. I'm also fond of witty banter and often write it in my own pieces, and I think you pulled it off rather well. My focus is shot lately, but I managed to read all of this, so that's a compliment in itself. I was curious to see what happened.

I'm not so sure I get everything that happened at the end there, but I assume as you update it'll make more sense. I do hope you're able to find a good beta. I know what you mean about being picky. Someone who can help with things beyond basic grammar and punctuation. I think this story needs a little editing, but it's enjoyable at any rate. So good job! (And sorry if this comment was weird or confusing. I'm really sick right now, so I'm kind of out of it.)