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Chapter 45 9th paragraph, I think you were aiming for " but that's how things worked out."

I've finished reading _Annie's Stories_--all 153 Chapters. Keith, you do realize, I hope, that you have an original literary universe constructed with these stories? It would take little editing to make this a novel, possibly a trilogy, worthy of print and sale. I'm greatly impressed with the depth of detail and development of your characters, history, cosmology and plot. It is obvious to me that you have more stories to add to this impressive effort as you have not resolved several major plot points to a satisfactory conclusion. The most obvious of those being: finding and neutralizing the threat posed by the Alchemists, a.k.a. the Servants of Surtur. The last two chapters would not easily fit into the literaly universe you've created, but you already noted that they are a self-indulgent excursion. However, if you got the _Repatriated_ book publsihed a cross-over between the two "universes" would not be outside the realm of possibility as a published work as well. All that said, can I play in your universe? I have an idea for a sylph story of my own inspired by your work and would like your permission to pursue it. I would give you full editorial privileges, as I would like to keep my story in continuity with the universe you have already created. Feel free to e-mail me with a "yea" or "nae," please.

Chapter 120: Hillarious! My favorite telephone message prompts were done by a friend. One day I called to hear: Thank You for calling the Mid-Missouri Psychic Research Institute. We know who you are and what you want, so at the "beep" hang up! Being well aquainted with my friends sense of humor (and luckily recognizing her voice) I left my message after I managed to stop laughing. Over a dozen caller hung up.

I just finished reading Chapter 63. I would have loved to play in that tournament. I laughed so hard at some of the descriptions that I started a coughing fit. Some ideas have occurred to me that you, Keith, may have already thought of and included as elements in you future chapters, but I'll still mention them in case you haven't thought of, or heard of, them previously. I thought about the sylphs' muscle to mass ratio and wondered how g-force acceleration would not be as taxing on them as on humans--thus sylph pilots in combat planes could make high-g turns that would knock a human pilot unconscious and there would also be the advantage of a hundred plus kilograms of mass that could be applied to plane and weaponry that were previously used for the pilot. Another thought that occurred was the idea of sylph rescue scouts with inertial mappers navigating the ruins of a recently earthquake damaged city to find survivors locations--which then informs the rescue efforts of their human companions. Space Travel--a sylph crew would require much fewer stores and resources for long missions than a human sized crew would making longer missions more feasible and vacuum is certainly no more dangerous for sylphs than for humans. I also thought a story line for a conglomerate tribe of wild sylphs might make an excellent parallel to the "Annie Stories." I would expect such a story line to be a bit more grim than the "Annie Stories;" more along an action-adventure story, but with plenty of opportunity for your wonderful sense of humor and the human compassion of your characters to shine.

Keith, did you ever read _Cold War in a Country Garden_ or the "Barrower" books? If not, I think you might like them.

omg after 8 years of being on this site you still have a shrink fetish... I thought it was a phase or thing you were going thru but damn you take shrinkage seriously lol. And you have written over a 100 stories. way to go Keith ^_^

Loved the new chapters. You're one of the few Authors on this site I follow religiously. I noticed in your newer chapters some minor mistakes, which for you is rare.

I'd like to make a note you are the only author on this site, to bring me to tears. The character I connect with is Annie, ok I may be five foot two inches taller but we both as teens suffered a life changing event that changed our view of the world. I broke my back and ended up in a wheel chair. Your characters are wonderfully written and believable. I really do love to read your works.

Also....

I'd really like to spend a day inside your head.

Kind regards

Charlie x

I see you updated! Good chapters but nothing that really jumped out at me. I'm glad to see you're still working on this. Though I'm honestly wondering if this is ever supposed to have an end, or if it will just trail off on a really happy note. Regardless, good luck with the next chapters and keep on working hard.

It took me about a week to read this from start to finish, and you did a WONDERFUL job. I really enjoyed reading about Annie, Denise and Pet, and their adventures. Can't wait for more!

So I read this story from start to the latest chapter when you finally put it in seemily understandable order. I do adore the whole story, the slyphs and just Annie. She is so funny and so witty and just, the perfect little brat roommate that you just know you can trust nine times out of ten, the tenth being when she is demanding chocolate or other forms of sweets.

D&D, silly references there, real world stuff here and there. This story makes me wonder what it would be like if this really happened one day and I kinda want it to happen.

The later plots, everything was really on edge from time to time. I adored the "Magic Dildo!". It was just so silly and stupid that it was impossible not to laugh. Plus a lot of the other comical moments made this whole story a total laugh fest. Dreams giving the characters the next steps, sylphs finding ways to slightly change back, the whole governments stand on treating slyphs as people or pets/things. Everything helped this story become very clever and a good read and I'm always hoping for new chapters. I must admit that the later plots that had me on edge were scary and made me wonder if the story was going to end on a bad note. But I should have just known better. Plus, all due respect, The Raven. Putting such a classic poem into this story made me remember my love for poetry and really added a silly pitch with edges of seriousness in as well.

The one thing I hang a question mark over is the use of a Ouija like board/fortune telling object in one of the later chapters. I would imagine due to the reputation it has in this realm, that reputation would follow into the story and the Christians would avoid such an object. But for a plot device, it worked out well.

By the way. Pet. Remember. Breathe. XD. I'm looking forward to the rest of the chapters and whatever ending you have planned. Keep writing dude.