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schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 1 "LMBTOWCYB"

Ne Miriu,

why's Yiketo spelled as such if the pronunciation is 'yuh-key-toe'
I'd think "Yukito" would be better (and it is a existing Japanese name) Then keto, key-toe. sounds like another Japanese name "Keito"
But may be you want the spelling to be interesting so *shrugs*

And i like the way you styled him... dark purple hair that frames his face, and grey eyes...

and Oniah, pronounced as 'Oh-nye-uh' makes me think its a Korean name... Like "Onew"
again... *shrugs*
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 2 "LMBTOWCYB"
hohoooooooo. who is this tall, dark, and handsome sexy creature?
will Shadow come claim a body shot? XD
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM

chap 3 "LMBTOWCYB"

kyaaaaaaaaahhh Dominus... Dom... kyaaaaaaaahh!!!
well ofcause he's the Dom! what else can tall dark and sexy be man!!! XD
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 4
hehe~ that was fast... but heh. ofcause it was fast... its what Keto does every night XD
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 5.

O_O whoots!
hot smex! XD
with the amount of sex keto is accustomed to.. i wonder if he still feels sore the next morning? or perhaps he's immune~~~ XD
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 6.
aaaaaaaaawwww.. keto's so cute when he's flustered....
and heh... its too late!!! Keto!!! Dom has infiltrated your every sense!!!
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 7
waah waah! keto is missing his tall dark and sexy man Dom!!! wah wah so cute!!! ^w^
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 8
hwaaaaaaaahh!!!! kyaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh!!! EXCLUSIVES!!!!
(reminds me of this story 'heaven far away' about this club opiate)
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 9
wheeeeeeeeeee~
nice smex. *A*


(btw, in case you're wondering how come you're suddenly getting a torrent of reviews... *rubs head looking apologetic* its coz I had saved the chapters for offline reading, and can only post out the reviews when i get internet again. so it's all comming in one go.
Hope you don't mind!!!! )
schedule March 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 10.
why ash? because you're too slow that's why?
if you really want something. go for it all the way. if you went for it all the way ash, then you'd at least get a proper 'no' from keto, and at least you can move on... *sighs* ash ash...