rate_review Reviews

I loved this story! Jay was a great character, the way he thinks had me laughing over and over again. I've noticed that a lot of the stories I've read on this site have made me cry at one point or another, but this is the first one that kept me laughing. I had a great time, and can't wait to read the sequel. (Seriously. I can't wait. After I post this, I'm going to go see if you wrote it yet.)

You are right in saying that the story write it self. When I right my fics. it often turn out to be completely the opposite of what i originally wanted. But in your case your story turn out to be AMAZINGLY FABULOUS, while mine SUCKS TO THE CORE.

Hey, just wanted to tell you I LOVE this story so far. It's so imaginative and funny. It's a great read.

As far as reviewing, I only have one issue that really bugs me. It's that way you indicate who's speaking. For example:

[“Mom had a bad sense of humor, shut up.” I told him, and grabbed my license back. What an ugly picture of me. I had my BUM University hoody on that day, it was a good thing you couldn’t see it.]

Here, you did great. It is very clear that it's Jay speaking.

[“And your sister, Blue?” I sighed.]

It's the other guy speaking but it's confusing because it looks like you indicated Jay speaking.

It would have been easier reading if you had separated the lines like:

["And your sister, Blue?"

I sighed.]

Okay, critique done. Can't wait to read the rest of this!
Thanks for sharing your stories!

This story is hilarious with a capital H. I LOVE Jay's inner babbleonathon(TM). I do the same sometimes and totally space the hell out. I adore this fic. I want to marry it and have it's babies. ...or would that be ficlets? Anywho, I hope to see more from you ^_^

yum! This was really good.
It's hard for me to find demon/human stories that I like,
but I loved this one! :)

Still totally love this crazy ass story!!!!!
(Can I say that here?!)

Thanks!
R

This story was a very fun read! It took me a while to get used to your style but I ended up loving it anyway. Keep up the good work! ^_^

-Lina

LOVE IT!!!!!!

Thanks!
R

I would be creep out to if the guy from my dream was in my room. Still enjoying your story.

Ooh, I'm so glad I found this story yesterday! Lol, good timing too seeing as it was the last chapter. Anyway, I'm really excited for the sequels, especially if it had more blue, bailey, and bailey's older brother (I kind of wondered what would have happened if Jay really did get set up with him) lol :D

Also, the mpreg sequel will be hilarious, i just know it. :P