schedule
February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First off, you're a very good writer. Your spelling and grammar are impeccable, your story was well written and entertaining, and I was very interested in reading your other works. This, of course, leads to my next point.
Are you on a mission from God or something to see how many times you can write EXACTLY the same "unsuspecting straight guy gets targeted by predatory homosexual and hypnotized into a cock slut" story? Besides the bad taste of "do you honestly believe ALL gay men are creepy date-rapists" and the undertones of homosexual recruitment, it's just plain lazy. The amount of variations on exactly the same story alone show that you aren't lacking for imagination!
Branch out, there is life beyond your kink/possible but hopefully not homophobic propaganda! It's okay to show variety! There's a big bright world of fiction and ideas out there, with things like plot and character development and relationships that aren't centered around brainwashing and, let's not mince words, rape (which you should probably add a disclaimer for before someone gets all whiny and "won't someone PLEASE think of the children?!?").
Consider this your backhanded compliment for the day. Ciao!
Are you on a mission from God or something to see how many times you can write EXACTLY the same "unsuspecting straight guy gets targeted by predatory homosexual and hypnotized into a cock slut" story? Besides the bad taste of "do you honestly believe ALL gay men are creepy date-rapists" and the undertones of homosexual recruitment, it's just plain lazy. The amount of variations on exactly the same story alone show that you aren't lacking for imagination!
Branch out, there is life beyond your kink/possible but hopefully not homophobic propaganda! It's okay to show variety! There's a big bright world of fiction and ideas out there, with things like plot and character development and relationships that aren't centered around brainwashing and, let's not mince words, rape (which you should probably add a disclaimer for before someone gets all whiny and "won't someone PLEASE think of the children?!?").
Consider this your backhanded compliment for the day. Ciao!
schedule
February 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story was amazing. I've read all of the oneshots that you've put up today on my phone. I was going to wait til I got home and review but I saw that no one had posted. I was really shocked that an great writer like you didn't receive a lot. Anyway this was great. I loved the whole hypnotizing effect even though it kinda classifys as rape. But I digress. Like I was saying you are an incredible writer and I wish I could write like you.