rate_review Reviews

really hot sex scene!

Yaaaay! That was such a cute ending <3

wow, your fist huh?
well i can't not review this cause it's realy realy good.
i'm not saying it just lik ethat, it realy i sgoood.
the smut secene-awesome.
the torture-wearing the dress and going out publicly-awesome.
the ending of ch2-awesome.
so, you pretty much nailed it.
i can't belive noone reviewed yet.
you totaly deserve it.

First attempt? Your story was so polished, it did not read like a rookie story in any way. The sex was hot! The flow of the dialog was smooth and believable. The ending you totally nailed a perfect landing. Only one small detail, stupid on my part to complain about, the counting of the cum shots. I would love to see a second chapter about these two. What happens to them next? A relationship?? That would be so nice. I will be waiting eagerly for your next effort.

Good story. Liked the characters. Sometimes there is one fantastic character and the other is...eh. I did like it however the spacing, or the lack of spacing was a problem. Unfortunately the computer monitor is a bitching thing to read intensely. Yes, we can zoom the font up but some white space between paragraphs helps with the eye strain. Again, that's just me and I'm getting old so take it with a grain of salt.

Hope to read more of your work soon.

Kiix