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Alberta boring? u have dinasours and I an studying in guelph lol uni sucks ass.
omg this is getting me so excited stupid boys they should just stop being so clueles
btw good luck on midterms and thanx for the update

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Ooooh this story is really going somewhere nice... ;D Quin seducing Alec? AWESOME! And Alec reeeaally needs to stop being an idiot, gah!
Ahaha, I misread 'hidden gems' as 'hidden germs'... I was just like wtf? xD It's very true though.

Procedure: Seduction.

HA! I love it! I'm sooo glad that you seem to be able to read minds or something because I was totally having a not-so-good day and this made it better (it'd make any day better). I even read it during my break at work. Nothing better than having a little slashy-ness during the work day ;)

Oh! And the whole eating your friends' pizza crust thing... yeah, I totally do that.

I know what you mean about midterms week. It blows.

Wow, that's not good >_<

Quin is so oblivious to the fact he's probably gay. So much so it's funny and cute XD.

Like with most of my reviews, I'll be doing this as I read the chapter. EVERYTHING can be solved with science! Unfortunately, lately, it's girls that are performing better in science than boys, so...yeah. I would like to know what "personal cheese" is so that I may order it the next time I get pizza. And enter THE FEMALE! The only guaranteed antagonist in a slash story. People need to realize that if the two boys were to act rationally, then the whole story would probably be about three paragraphs long. That wouldn't be any fun to read now, would it? Question: Does Alec's stepdad know that he's gay? Props for bringing in the bisexual idea. A lot of people (in fiction and in the real world) forget that that's an option as well. A little wordplay that may or may not have been intentional: "And even though I was perfectly straight..." So does this mean that he NOW considers himself gay or bi? Though I know that it's probably just supposed to be grammatically correct on your part. You flatter me with your proclamation of fanitude towards my work. I retaliate by showering you with praise. *replaces all the water in the pipes of your house with praise* As for the content codes, just don't make them supernatural (this includes MPreg), and I'll be fine. Great chapter. ~Young Sage

Yay! I somehow missed the second chapter. Weird. But I read it now! Seriously though, I'm just glad you're writing something. Your stories always put me in a better mood! :)

This is wonderful. She's usually not too keen on first person perspective, but it just works here. You've characterised the people you present the reader with so strongly - after just three chapters she really feels as if she is identifying with the boy's you've introduced.

The back and forth perspective - between Quin, and Alec's notebook is well done - you said you were worried about whether it's confusing, and it isn't, it actually is a really good touch. Your writing style is nice, easy to read and very smooth. It doesn't seem contrived or choppy.

Anyway, she loved it, and hopes that you've got another chapter ferreted away somewhere to present quite soon.

aww
poor Alec
although it's really cute how clueless Quin is
it's really a miracle that Alec hasn't tackled him to the floor and ravished him yet...

Well alright. I had to wait a few days to see if this story was worth reading. Considering that it's been less than a week, and you've already got 27 reviews, I'd say it's worth reading. Actually, I read all the reviews first before even clicking on the story. That's just how I roll. Your genre (high school non-supernatural) is the same as my stories, and those that I like to read, which subtly led me to read this (albeit short) story. Chapter length is fine, as long as it satisfies the reader. A question though: WHAT content codes? All I see is M/M. That's a given in the Slash section of AFF. The time skip issue tends to confuse me at times; first they're in tenth grade, then eleventh, then back to tenth. But that's just me. Spelling, grammar, and word choice is all excellent. Plot seems smooth; not overly extended nor rushed. Sorry if this review seems a little mechanical. The story's still new, and I want to get the background stuff out of the way. It's still a good story though, whether you make stuff up as you go along or not (I tend to do both myself). I will patiently wait for the next chapter, as opposed to those reviewers who will skin you alive for not updating on a daily basis. Good luck with them. ~Young Sage

Ah, short chapters aren't too bad - they make me want the next one all the more!! ^_^ Please keep up the good work, and update soon! ^_^