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for Muffin

by kiyoai

schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awh, man, animals in pain always kills me, as I'm a vet tech and all. Dx Still written well..though.. ;__;
And moar is always nice.... ;___________; -MOURNMOURN-
person wynja
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awwww! You killed the doggie! But, to be frank, the puppy WAS cramping his style a bit... dogs like that only have two functions in a story: to die in an emotional scarring way, or try to tell people that Timmy fell down a well... and since there is no Timmy in this story... sorry doggie... *grin* No, I'm being mean! It WAS gripping, and I had trouble breathing as well... and then the hot scene in the shower COMPLETELY took my breath away... I really like that he is SO inexperienced... Poor thing... let's help him with that, shall we? ;o)
person elendaze
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Firstly, I like this story, a lot. :)
I'm likely not the first to comment on this, but its plotline reminds me somewhat of Target in the Finder or Okane na gai.
Crossing my fingers for a happy ending :)
person Natalie Logue
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
SWEET! I love this chapter! So sad that Porto had to die, but I think we are edging into the lovey dovey bits! and poor Muffin is having nightmares! OH, This is awesome. And I still maintain that Asher will be able to handle anything those bastard popo can throw at him.
person BennyPeace
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I teared up a bit when Porto died.

You're truly a brilliant author though.
person J42
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow - I'm really enjoying the rapid and substantial updates. And the nice, hot action in this chapter. Thanks so much!
person Teania
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
DUDE! YOU SUCK YOU MADE ME CRY! I was like bawling when you showed how the dog died, i hate you!

and yet I LOVE this story so far, sorry for yelling but the dog thing touched a nerve (My own dog died just last april) ANYWHO! I thought this was gonna be some kind of creature fic, with like Vampires or something but I am SO glad I was wrong lol. It's turning out to be a really cool story and I can't wait to see what happens next, keep on writing!

=Teania
person Aleks
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I liked the dog, but his part in the story was very rushed....and I think my biggest problem is that he wasn´t mentioned in the first chapters, was he?

but bringing these two a little bit more closer together - that was important :)

and our hero is a kitten already ;) so no room for a dog!
person TrayChaos
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Omfg I love this story. The way you write it is absolutely addicting. Srsly. So unhealthily addicted.

I work at a sweets shop and everytime I put out new muffins I whip out my phone to see if you've updated!

BTW do you have a set day/time you update or is it random?

Keep writing and update soon, thanks!!
person gillie
schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh! Poor Muffin now has nothing!! I feel so very sad for him.....while I DO NOT want to know how it all works out, will it have a happy ending??? The stories that end on a sad note depress me for days. I have fallen in love with little Muffin, and want him to have a happy ever after. As you can tell your story has really dug it's hooks into me! Great, fantastic, wonderful work. Thanks so much.