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CHERRY MUFFIN?!?!?! for a moment there... I kept my hopes low. very very low. What with your previous "lemon muffin" and "banana muffin", I knew better than to hope lest I be let down... but noooooo.... your pun... ablah- gah- knwflevg- ..... im speecheless.
You DO make too many puns, and it's not gonna do you good if someone comes hunting you down for it :P

But... WHOA.
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like seriously whoaaaaa
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O_________O

How they hell did muffin take it with no preparation for a FIRST TIME?!?! I mean, he IS freaking virgin! (reading you write about prep would've been very interesting *A* )
Like for gawds sake! He didnt even know that part A went into part B for gawds sake! So duh.
Asher! you've gotta be NUTS! to take him with no prep AND no lube! YOU NUTCASE! and what the heck did you use? Salad dressing!? mayonaise?! I mean... it was slimy so... what... jelly?

but...like.... WHAT THE HECK?! on the couch?! on the FLOOR?! the living room of ANNA's HOUSE?!?!?
whywhywhywhywhyWHYWHYY!!!.... WHY THERE OF ALL PLACES!!!??? MAhsa?!?!?! you're deliberately doing this arn't you?!
I don't know if I want to LAUGH or CRY and the absurbness of this all! ... I mean yea, not all first times are as cook as the super kind sized bed of a hawaiian resort, but.... the couch? the floor? a LIVING ROOM? add in being interupted halfway!

*headdesk* gawds. *thunk*
ah at least it hurt enough the morning after :P and he can STILL think to want it *snickers* guess it wasn't that painful XD *Sighs* goodness asher....

*head meets desk*
oh. *thunk*
god. *thunk*
... *thunk*

I guess you REALLY do love surprising your readers eh?
then all this talk about fanart is making me envy all those who are artistically capable ;_____; i has limited art skillz *sobs*

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eh. think about it.... this chapter was practically JUST about popping muffin's cherry! !____! wah!
it was smut no plot! (okay i deny, there is plot, what with asher laying down all the breadcrumbs for muffin to come picking it all back up to lead him home~~~)
aaaawwww *melts at the "stay with me" aaaaawwww *A*
that cutie putie asher has a heart softer than i thought aaawwwwww~~~~ *eyes go watery and smile becomes wobbly*

shucks XD

thank you honey, you left me grinning~ ^___^

I'm off to check on monsoon ;)

- nekoii


ps
Author’s Note: The movie Muffin was watching at the beginning was It’s a Wonderful Life.
I was cracking my head wondering how come those lines were said in Harry Potter *headwall* i should read more slowly.... =x=

*has came back after a few hours to review again*

Sorry! I was recalling my earlier review and i realized i didn't say some things... (hehe, not like you mind another extra review eh? ;) hehe~

ah anyway... other than the cherry lemon banana scene to be very unexpected in both time place and location. It was fumingly awesome!!! > w < I said fuming because it was hot! And somehow, muffin's point of view feels like it has been furthur emphasized with this scene~ it's as if, me the reader suddenly realises again that 'hey its muffin speaking!' =O
Sweet sweet, in a way, I guess you could say you treated us to 2 lemon scenes (or maybe a foreplay + lemon) *grins* something about shifting location while doing naughty things i guess XD

But haaa!!! They both had to keep their volume down for this one. Makes one wonder what it would be like in the comforts of asher's home or somewhere else private. or soundproof....
there will be another lemon won't there? *hopes like mad there is* =DDDD

while on topic.... HOW ON EARTH DID ANNA (and zack) KNOW?! I mean... other than the hickey, or muffin's odd walking, or the change of clothes. Nothing should give it away right?
Unless half the bottle of thousand island dressing is suddenly gone overnight. Aaaah so maybe that gave them away? XDDDD
and as proper foster parents.... shouldn't they say something MORE when their probably under-aged (how old IS muffin?) foster son had sex with a billionair on the living room floor!!!!
XDDD *snickers* how is muffin gonna hide that hickey? it's like on his neck yea? XD nice obvious place~ hehehe

ok. i think i'm done (for the second time) *phew* hehhehehehehhehehe~~~~
nice one!!!! *gives ya thumbs up* I've never read a cherry lemon banana scene like the one you wrote in this chapter before~ *A* so thanks you! *chuu~*

- nekoii

Oh Vey da drama....

Loved this chapter, totally enjoyed the interaction between Asher and Muffin. I truly can't imagine losing interest in this fic even though I have to admit to being a bit distracted this week. I found Big Bang Theory and I'm totally in love with that show which explains my late reading. We all know that Muffin will go find Asher, I just hope he does it with some finesse and style since I sort of hate seeing Asher have the upper hand.

Till next time....

*stares on front of herself with very large eyes*
Oh. Oh my. THat. Was. HOT.
Wait? Did anything else happen in this chapter? Was something important said or hinted at? Damn, I don't remember! My mind went completely smex-blank! I think I have to re-read it now... ;o)

I read it a second time and had to leave a second review! lol I cant believe Asher would EVER let muffin go now, despite what he tells him at the end. I bet he would end up coming after muffy if muff decided he wanted to have the freedom of the streets again. Like Ash said in the beginning, he's already "claimed the life unspoken for" (by the way that was incredibly poetic.)so he's not gonna let him go now! Also, when you do finish the story, I think it would be great if you wrote some scenes (like oneshots) from Ashers point of view from different points in the story line (whether new scenes, or familiar ones) Ok, thats my fangirl spaz for the day LOL Thank you for the fun!!

Awesome!!! Poor Muffin, I loved it when Zack offered him the cherry muffin. XD

I mentioned before that this is one of my favorite fanfics, even though I don't review every chapter. (Its actually tied as my second favorite.) I can't wait to read what happens next.

oh, and orange muffins = delicious. ^_^

.....woah!! O.o I have goosebumps all over! I waited so long for that! And I was not disappointed! You know its a good love scene when you feel like you're intruding on something private LOL! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Um, yea my computer cut out a bunch of random blather I said in the middle, so I went back to read my response and was like "... that doesn't make sense..." So this is the missing bit. Sorry for the confusion!!

Um, yea, I was in the hospital for 4 days, then was on crutches for the next 9 weeks, then down to one crutch for two more after that... it kinda sucked. Especially since it was our senior summer, our last summer before we all went off to college, the "Woo! Let's be wild!" summer... yea, that didn't happen. Then the girl who crashed us totally went to the midnight showing of the Dark Night without me. >:( Lol, she's lucky I don't hold grudges. ^^ It still gives me alot of pain, though, so I'd be lying if I said I wasn't still a little bitter about that... but thanks for feelin' my pain!

so good, awesome, chapter 15 - OMG
just great, please continue, please update, preatty pleeeeeease :)

firstly...*throw confetti* yaay, cherry popping. and a kanpai for Asher being a voyeur, poor poor Muffin, I don't think he'll stop even if Zack entered the room.
It's a great chapter and I can't wait to see how Muffin swallows his pride to go to Asher, because at some point he will unless you have something up your sleeve.ooh, and I uncovered Muffin bit by bit each chapter =D, keep on throwing hints and see if the readers can unveiled Muffin's mysteries before Asher does XD.
hahaha, hope you can reach the once a week update check soon, thou I'm flattered that the pages able to make you giddy, I'll try harder to deliver them faster...=D Nice chapter naming btw..b('v')