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I absolutely love you. I'll review properly when I've read it =D
Excitement!!

grate story super bad ass i cant wait for an update

not sure how i feel about the story now. I'm stuck between wanting to throttle and slap muffin around or throttling and slapping everyone around muffin...........just very annoyed with muffin or with the people around him. can't explain it..........maybe it was because he was idiot enough to hand the gun over to someone else, especially in an unknown confusing situation where you don't know who to believe. I'd keep the damn gun so they couldn't hurt me! Especially since these guys aren't exactly upstanding citizens.... Or maybe it's the whole helpless feeling I think Muffin is giving off. I HATE that TT__TT.

But you have to be doing something right, if you can draw such strong emotions out of me. :) hope to see more soon, though i might wait til you've updated more then one chapter so i don't feel as frustrated after reading >,
Hope to see more from you soon :D

Damn you're good. I cried. NOt the big soppy tears but the ones that sting the hell out of your eyes because they squeeze out of the corners of your eyes. There are few stories that I actively search out to follow but I have been waiting for Muffin's re-appearance and you did not disappoint.

Thanks for sharing your gift.

Kiix

wow...intense chapter...thanks for the update...

I was glad to see that Vincenzo was alright. Muffin is so distant...and unemotional...its so heartbreaking to see him like this, and through the betrayal he had to suffer...and not to forget his injuries....I'm glad he was able to survive...but I wonder what will happen next!

Alrick was interesting in this chapter...tender and also called out Asher....Alrick was also the main person to take care of him.

I liked some of your sentence structures in this chapter for examples,

As the sun drifted further behind the mountains, the room better resembled the coffin I imagined it to be. If only someone would hammer in the last few nails. I was already in the dark—in every sense of the word, I didn’t think it could get any worse. -----This was very visual...the coffin, the darkness and the only thing that was needed was the nails...

Also, the comparison of Asher...having it feel like a dream, when Muffin knows he is really a nightmare...I was liked the comparison of Peter's Pan Shadow, and Asher being the needle...it really shows Muffin's unwanted attachement and his angry emotions toward Asher...and his situation...


Update soon and keep up the good work! Thanks!

I love this story so very much. Poor Muffin. This was a dark chapter, just like the last. I cann't wait to read the next chapter, but wait I must. Lol. I guess life just sucks like that ;P

This really just.. confused me.

I don't know where it started. but this last chapter I had an aduurr moment and was just like ..huh.

OH BTW the ending scene of the muffin being rescued, should be him gripping alecks arm not vicenzos.

aand
yeah.. clarity maybe?

This chapter was completely mad and wonderful. I don't really get what's up with the cell phone, but it's been a long day and I'm not thinking at maximum speed.

MUFFIN FREAKED OUT!!!!
It’s a bloody good thing he did… else, *urps* I wouldn’t want to imagine what would happen with those pliers… AAAAAAARRRGHHH!!! Why the nails… WHY THE NAILS!!! I soooo hate hate hHAAATTEE torture involving NAILS!!! *vomits*

And shits man…. Here I was thinking that Vincenzo was one of the bad guys… since Alrick asked him to run… But… HOW THE HELL DOES ONE RUN. WHEN THE BAD GUY IS RIGHT AT YOUR DOORSTEP?!?!?!
Michael… he’s like…… ashers old boyfriend? Ah cripes….

This feels like some Halloween special, what with what happened to Hannah… (Hannah Montana!!! DX not that I like her or anything but…)

Are guns really THAT heavy? How many KG’s? I never held one before…
Do gun’s really BREAK your thumb? If you don’t handle it properly? gYaaah~ they are scary things…

And Asher has A LOT of explaining to do!!!
Phantom of the opera dude had better not die on us!
Someone… ANYONE! Had better come to the rescue!!!
This is what usually happens right!!!

AAARRGHHH!!!
I better check in on this story quickly and more often. X _ x

I discovered your story awhile ago (in july, to be precise), though I'm pretty sure I've never reviewed yet. Actually, I know I haven't, which I have no idea why. This story is a definite favorite of mine over here on AFF. I adore the characters, especially Muffin and Asher. Each keep me instantly entertained. I love how Muffin can be so snide, and rude. It's just so funny, especially the scenes that involved Jenny (I think that's her name). I laughed so much when he said she was 'milking it'. And then there's Asher. He's cold, controlling, a mystery and highly amusing. I love how he makes Muffin say 'please' and how he ropes Muffin into doing things; drinking water, taking a bath, brushing his teeth, staying in his home where it's warm, practically using morphine pills as a leverage in him choosing to stay with him and work. Even if it didn’t work.

I also love the plot. At first when I came across your story I thought it wouldn't be my cup of tea, in a manner of speaking. The summary, though it's written good, just didn't grab me. So it took a few times of me stumbling across it, and seeing how many people have you on your recommended list, and then reading some of the reviews to give it a shot. It didn't disappoint. At all. I was instantly hooked, so much so, that I stayed up all night. Really. I didn't get to sleep until 7am, and I was SO exhausted, but it was worth it. Normally if I find myself losing sleep over a story its because I love it so much I just can't stop. Your story did that to me. I loved every moment of it, and the plot wasn't what I had expected, and so it made it all the more enjoyable. I found myself laughing at a lot of the parts, tearing up in some, and impatiently awaiting scenes of both my favorite characters, Asher and Muffin. It's also very well-written, which I'm sure you know already ;)

The other characters are great as well, Mario (I'll just call him that since it's easier) I loved in the beginning, when him and Muffin had their little spats, which were insanely funny. I'm glad to see more of him now, though scared that he might be dead... but I don't think you'd kill him off, right? I hope not. I don't want to see him and Muffin getting any closer than what they have now, unless maybe it was a sort of friendship. I was getting a bit scared that you turning toward the direction of them possibly having something going on (since he smelt his hair at that one time, and the comment Mario had on him not wearing the shirt, and there's more I think...) I love Mario, I do. I just don't want him with Muffin. I've fallen too much in love with Asher and Muffin's relationship (albeit a complicated and sort of fucked up one it is, but so entertaining and hot!) With that said, it's your story, your choice. And I'm hoping I'm just being paranoid...

Alrick is a likeable character as well. Very caring but also a mystery in my opinion. So far, he's shown that he can have different sides of him, from good to scary. I'm wondering exactly why he'd tell Muffin to 'run' if in the end it ended up causing him to get taken. Because, yes, they still probably knew he was in that apartment (I think, maybe?) but him going outside caused them to know for sure, right? Or maybe not... I'm confused. If not, maybe it was him trying to warn him to run ahead a time, due to the fact that maybe he knew there was a high chance that they'd get taken and so Muffin was supposed to discover that note sooner? Maybe. Hm.

Now, I also wanted to throw in a few things since I hadn't reviewed of it before (by then I hadn't read this story). The scene where Muffin wakes up after getting beaten up pretty badly by Michael, Asher had been worried right? Throughout those three or so days? Because it seems like you threw hints in there, his appearance, tired state, anger, concern, wanting to know exactly who'd done it. If he didn't care about Muffin at all, then he wouldn't have felt like that, right? Granted, so far, he's done lots of things that could pinpoint that he cares for him; cleaning him up, giving him food/shelter, saving his life a few times, offering a job, protecting him, and I can't think of anymore, though I know there's more. It may have started out with him wanting to repay him for saving his life, then the whole 'owning thing' and then his claim of him being his entertainment/investment, or something like that, but I feel like so far it's progressed to more than that. Maybe not complete, of course, but at least something. Maybe I'm wrong (I probably am, his character is SO hard to figure out) but in a way I think he really does care for him and would be effected if something were to happen to him, and not because he'd lose his entertainment, or sex toy, or because he had saved him in the beginning. Maybe it's wishful thinking on my part, though :)

Another thing I want to mention is the first sex scene (the one where they're on the floor at Anna's and Zack's). I just want to say that I really, really loved that scene. I've read a lot of smut (I'm such a pervert lol) but I found yours a lot different. It seemed more real. It had hints of awkwardness (in Muffin's character) which shows that he's very innocent and much a virgin. Also, I loved how he tried to do things to make Asher less controlled. Which isn't just in that scene, you've showed that in many. It just felt refreshing to read since it seemed to actually seem much more real than most smut I’ve read, which goes to show that you’ve really developed your characters and made them very much believable.

One last thing before I go. I just want to talk a little about the last chapter. Not only am I scared about Mario dying, but I’m also scared for Muffin. He shot someone! Talk about very surprising and I know for a fact, will possibly effect him later on, I’m sure. Right? Seems that way to me. But hopefully he’ll see that shooting Michael isn’t exactly something he should ever feel guilty or regret. Michael’s a bastard who deserves to die. Enough said. And what Michael’s friend is talking about has me worried. A part of me thinks that he just means since Asher has been in Muffin’s life (everything that’s happened since Muffin calling the ambulance in the alley) has lead to it being Asher’s fault for Muffin being there. Because if he hadn’t ever helped him, he wouldn’t have ever been there. But then another part of me thinks he’s talking about something different. Maybe Asher did something? Or, or... I don’t know. I’m insanely drawing a blank and am terrified about what’s to come next. Especially when we see Asher again. Hopefully he isn’t really to blame much, and Muffin can forgive him... I just want Asher and Muffin together! I love them so much :) Also, just want to throw this out here, my cat’s name is Muffin. lol. Surprisingly, I didn’t think about my cat while reading the story though. Normally when I see a muffin I think of my cat, but during the story I just thought of Muffin (the boy not the food, or cat).

Anyway, I love a lot of scenes, which I could go on and on about, but then this review would be WAY too long and I'd feel bad. Pretty much, I'm in love with your story, your characters, and I'm so curious as to what the heck is going on, and what's going to happen! So please update whenever you can. No rush of course. Also, sorry for such a long review. I didn’t mean to ramble so much. Love Muffin and Asher! Can’t wait for more! ;)