rate_review Reviews

Ok, I meant to read this days ago, but I kept getting side-tracked from my gay porn. I wanted to be able to spend time reading this uninterrupted.

Every month (or two), I look forward to reading Muffin. And you didn't disappoint with this chapter! But Mahsa! Do not underestimate your writing capabilities! This story most certainly could be published; don't put yourself down by thanking us for reading your, and I quote: "pathetic writing". OMFG, ARE YOU KIDDING??????? If your writing was pathetic, NO ONE WOULD BE READING IT!!!!!! Every month (or two), I DEVOUR your story; I CAN'T GET ENOUGH!!!!!! For example, right now, I am totally depressed b/c I just finished the chapter and will have to wait for the next one!

Ok, on to the review: I think Muffin made a grave mistake by trusting the FBI. I think he was safer w/Asher. I think Asher would do everything in his power to protect Muffin, altho it doesn't seem that way to Muffin. I know Muffin's furious w/all of them, especially Asher, by putting him in danger and thus getting injured. But I think he needs to talk to Asher, to find out why that happened. Asher needs to show Muffin how much he cares.

Also, the imagery you use when describing Asher trying the cake batter - OMG! Only YOU could make putting a spoon in someone's mouth sexy! LOL

Anyway, awesome chapter, as always, and as always, I will patiently (well, maybe not that patiently) be waiting for the next update! Oh, I read your comment to a reader about yours and Nights updates; maybe you could get on the same updating schedule as her?????? (Hint, hint! lol)

Ahh, I missed this story !
I can't stand Muffin's meeting with the FBI !!! Don't do that !
I want Asher and Muffin together *sob*

This was totally awesome! I started reading it about two days ago and I couldn't stop until I had finished it all. I love all of your characters. They have more than one dimension to them. I love how mysterious even Muffin is. We still don't know his age or his name... I also liked how he's becoming a little more tame as the story progresses, sort of like he's maturing. He's a jackass to a lot of people (like secretaries and maids, LOL) but he really has a big heart. I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next after he tells the FBI everything he knows (which isn't all that much). I wonder what Asher is going to do when he finds out? I wish we could discover what Asher really thinks of Muffin. He didn't seem all that concerned when he had a scalpel in his stomach... but he seems to care for him. So confusing, just the way I like it. You're a great writer, thank you for sharing this story with the rest of us!

What a cliffhanger!!!!!! How can you be so cruel???

And I still like Asher.....want them to be together.....I believe Asher is in love but doesn´t want to admit it to himself (yes I´m a helpless romantic :)

I don´t think Asher is so stupid to trust Muffin after all what happened- he should know it was too much.....

But I will know next chapter, right??? (pleading, puppy look)

OMFG Mahsa!!!!!! You updated!!!!! I've been reading this one story for the past three days and haven't been on AFF to see any updates. OMG, you just made my fucking night, week, etc.!!!!!


Ok, gotta go; drown myself in the joy that is Muffin!!!! Yeah, pretty corny; where'd I pull that one from????

YES. YES. YES. I LOVE ITTT! Hi, hi! Long time reader desu. Haha, love where this is going. LOOVE MUFFIN!

It's sad to see Muffin like this. I mean, he's never been the 'happy' sort, but being depressed, and then now, vengeful is hard to read. And now the whole time I'm thinking, 'You're going to regret it!' Maybe not for awhile, but I do feel as if Muffin going to that cop isn't going to be a very good idea at all - even though technically they all deserve it, especially Asher. I guess it has a lot to do with the fact that firstly, the cop doesn't seem like a good person. He's got hate. Hate and a gun, plus Muffin working with him. Not a good idea. Then there's also the fact that although Muffin is helping him, his partner may have died while 'tagging' Muffin. The cop could place part of the blame on his shoulders, but won't say anything until he gets Asher. I'm really scared and nervous about what will happen, and all I know is, I don't want anything to happen to any of them! I love them so much - Muffin, Asher, Mario, Alrick. Just everyone. And although Asher is a bastard, I'm wishing for a miracle that he'll do something to make it up for Muffin and then they can be together. I want them together so badly, I think I'll cry if they don't :(

The chapter was great again. I loved how they obviously know something is wrong with Muffin, which you can tell by the 'looks' and them asking so often. I also love that Mario is so angry toward Asher, because if anyone is more at fault, it's him. At least that's what I feel. I did love the kiss they shared ;) and was seriously hoping for more, and maybe a change of heart within Muffin. But sadly, he's consumed with anger to let up anyone soon. Poor Muffin. I understand why he'd be so angry. If I was in that same situation, I'd be the same, if not a bit broken. And wow, Muffin is pretty smart. At first when he went to Anna's, I thought he was going to visit them, but the way he was talking, it didn't seem like it, so I was confused. Until he hid the phone there, and then I was like, 'I wouldn't have ever thought of that'. Well, that's probably because I would have forgotten that little detail. Heh. I also really liked how at times, Muffin struggled with pretending to be 'nice' and 'fine' when clearly he wanted to be snarky and, well, he isn't fine. And... I'm wondering if maybe Muffin might actually get hooked on pain medicine O:

Okay, so, I was reading through your reviews (I tend to do that, to see what others thought about the chapter) and saw an Anon asking if you were me... Now I'm not sure why they would think that, but I do have an idea why. A few, maybe three weeks ago, I recommended your story over on a livejournal community called the_slash_pile, which is where people go to either request a fic since they're having trouble finding anything, or to recommend something. Lots of stories have been rec'd there, and it goes through the necessary credits/and so on, so that everyone knows it's your story, and how to get to it here. I've linked it, so that you can see what it's like (and my rec is like) and if you don't feel comfortable with it being there, then just tell me. I do want to say that there's some pretty great comments people made in response to the rec, and it even got put in memories pretty quickly (where only a handful of good ones have gone ^^) the link is: http://community.livejournal.com/the_slash_pile/68394.html

I just wanted to clear that up since the Anon person asked that... which if they're reading this, know that I am not Mahsa at all. Though I wish I wrote as brilliantly as you, I'm not. And, I'm looking forward to reading more! In fact, I'm gonna reread the story again... for like the fifth time, I swear :) this story is just so good I can't get enough of it.

can't wait to see where this one is going (waiting is torture).. very nice chapter btw, muffin becomes increasingly clever with each chapter (loved the line "she's not exactly your type")...agree with one user who said we all know muffin's supposed to hate them, but after 21 chapters, one can easily become attached to mob bunch..(i hope you're into happy endings)

Am I on the completely wrong track if I say that that was Muffin's birthday? The cake and his mental countdown? If so, how old is he?? I love Vincenzo, I really do. Brilliant as always. Now to actually revise for my exam tomorrow morning...gah

ahh i love u for updating!! please dont leave it too long i dont think i can wait!! :D