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oh my God my kids thought i finally snapped when i started to hysterically laugh out loud. That scene of the board meeting was one of the most hilarious things ever. oh the horror of utter humiliation was classic. I'm really enjoying your story.

I love this story, and I'm glad for this chapter because the last few have been so sad! Though, you just HAD to leave it on that cliffie huh? XD


Hmm, titles... how about Sweet Muffin, Stale Muffin, or Strawberry Muffin.. Sour Muffin? Oatmeal Muffin? Sour Cream Muffin, Hazelnut Muffin, Carrot Muffin, Surprise Muffin? LOL LAST TWO: Cream Cheese Muffin, and/or Pineapple Muffin ?


I want a muffin.

Mahsa~! *hugs* You are back! *hugs again* How I missed you! *hugs more*
I was beginning to think both you and Night Writer decided to move into another dimension!
How are you, how is Night? *sighs* It's been so long hasn't it. *hugs*

I hope your move, and school, and life in general is getting back on normal track, then it should be all good yeah? All the best with whatever ya're up to now eh~ ^___^

Anyway, back to proper reviewing...

... WWWwwwwhhhhyyy!!!???!
Why does Muffin -bleeeep- out his own name??! But apparently, the officials know who he is! The police know his real name!!! If the police knows his real name, they should probably know his background too yeah? Like, traumatic past, parents dead in a car accident. stuff like that.
and those HEARTLESS people still can INTEROGATE him?! and make him their 'INSIDE MAN' ???!!! HOW CAN THEY DO THIS TO THE KID!! man! Just when you thought you could actually TRUST the police... I sure as hell hope they don't freeging do this in real life man... and man.... Muffin AGREED... man oh man... does he have guts or what... I hand it to ya muffin... for all your 'traumatic past' and fears... you sure have lotsa more guts than others do.

You know that part. That muffin secretly clicked on the button of the recorder, WHILE ASHER WAS SMACK RIGHT INFRONT OF HIM! oh god.... THAT WAS CRAZY MAN! he could have sooooo easily got caught! especially when Asher suspected him from the start! What with the touch feely check for wiring. and all that... oh god oh god...
and... AND!!!
MUFFIN LEFT HIS PANTS ON THE FLOOR! with that BELT!!! I'm sure after all that fabulous sexing. He's gonna go knock-out. then... if Asher goes to pick up his clothes... and somehow realises the belt is not it usually was... thenn.... THEN!!!

OH NO!!!! OOOOHHH NOOO!!!!

then you go say.... this story is ENDING SOON?!?!?!
WHAAAAT NOOOOOWW!!!! it's still currently filled with "OOOOH MMMYYY GOOOOODD"s and "WHHHHAT THE HEEEECCCKKK"s ~!
*goes crazy*

Mahsa!!!!!! *still crazy* What the hell is going on man!!!?


aaaaaannyyyywaaaaaaaaaay~ great chapter *thumbs up*
This sure was something. I think we get to learn quite alot about muffin's emotional state...
and we get to learn alot too, via the scars....
:D oh gosh. how romanticly smexyly hot. two males getting to know each other better through their battle scars... *A*
that's hot know~ *fans self*

So yeah. I think I'm done for now.
It's been a long time since I reviewed ya yeah. I supose my character for this review is a bit more nutty... but...
I HAVENT HEARD FROM YOU FOR SOOO LONG!!! *is happy*
So glad to know you're still well alive and kicking ass with your updates ;)

Catch ya laters Mahsa~


- nekoii

I was just re-reading my review for chap 21 (rotten muffin).

and found many interesting reviews along the way~ xD Avernion sure is funny~ XD

and... I realised just how contradictory my 2 reviews were.

in chap 21. i was like dissapointed with muffin..... but in chap 22 (bitter muffin), i felt sorry for muffin and mad at the police...
Wow. didn't know that i could feel so differently... but... the way you wrote it in chap 22... it made me feel real sorry for muffin. he's breaking down. and scared. and terrified. and just wants it all to end... and he got thrown back into the lions den... you feel for him don't you...

but.. YOU'RE TEARING US APART! it's like... I WANT Asher to be happy. I WANT muffin to be happy... but somehow, the way things are now... I have NO IDEA if they BOTH will be happy...

ARGH! *goes crazy*

I'm rambling! I better run off and stop! bye bye! XD

- nekoii

Did I ever tell you that I love you?
I had forgotten all about this story, and then you post more wonderfull chapters. I read it from the start, and I still love it as much as the first time I read it.
The thing I love about this story is, that even though the idea have been used before(for good reson, because it is a lovely idea), I have no idea whats gonna happen next.
I look forward to reading the following chapters.
Love from Le

Ok, whew! Busy day today. What did I do? Hmmmm, I read two chapters of Muffin. Took me awhile, in between everything else. lol

Ok, I so did not like the ending "to the moment of my greatest regret", wtf dude? What, falling in love w/Asher? What??? I need to know Muffin's greatest regret!!!! OMG, doesn't look good for our sweet Muffin boy.

Loved then Venn diagram! I actually didn't know what a Venn diagram was until a few yrs. ago when one of my kids had to make one. hahah Stupid me.

So, the cops know Muffin's real name. Muffin does not want to hear this. He also doesn't want them or Asher talking about his past, or asking him questions about it. It's obvious he blocks out, or bleeps out his name b/c it brings back too many painful memories of his past life. You noticed he had a nightmare when he was calling out for his mom; that was triggered by the cops using his real name. At least my Psych for Dummies tells me so. lol J/K.

His past is so traumatic, so horrifying, as a defense mechanism, his brain is storing those memories, along with his name, in some deep, dark crevice, hoping never to be thought of again. I think Muffin feels that if he goes back to remembering, he will be a blubbering mess. He's had this protective wall around him since the tragedy and he doesn't want this wall taken down. Of course he has a hard time trusting people and Asher, Alrick and Vincenzo were slowly but surely, breaking his trust down. Now thanks to that fucker Roger, he thinks these people who have been taking care of him, protecting him, (to some degree), have totally betrayed him. Personally, I don't believe Roger for one second. I can't believe that Alrick and Vincenzo are just acting. I truly believe they care a lot for Muffin. Didn't Alrick write all those notes for Muffin to find, telling him to run? Asher, Asher's another story. Yes, I believe Asher truly cares for Muffin. It's the little things, the subtle things he does that show it. I can't believe Asher would knowingly hurt Muffin. I don't believe they used him for their own good. I think Roger's bluffing and Muffin's too naive to know it.

I also feel that since Muffin never turned off the recording device, the cops will figure out what was going on. They may think, since it didn't sound like he was under any stress or duress, it was totally consensual. Idk, maybe they'll think twice about Muffin's motives. I'm not sure.

Also, when you had that little paragraph sort of going into the future, the one that started Nowadays..... It gave me a bad feeling. The whole story has been in the present, and then bang! Reading that paragraph, I didn't know if whatever happens from now on will be good or bad. If Muffin is thinking (as in the future), nowadays I wonder if Asher....does this mean they're not together? If they were together, Muffin would have plenty of time to ask Asher if he ever knew what his actions did to him. It gave me the feeling they won't be together in the future. Which saddens me, b/c I actually like Asher. Crazy as that may sound. lol And I'm rooting for them to be together. Muffin can't resist Asher and Asher cannot resist Muffin, that's for sure!

Ok, this review is like wayyyyy long, so I'm just gonna say THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH FOR UPDATING!!!! And since you already have four chapters written, PLEASE DON'T MAKE US WAIT FOR EIGHT MORE MONTHS, PLEASE, PLEASE...I need more Muffin NOW, dammit!!!!! :)

Ok, Mahsa, but thank you, really for updating. This story has always been one of my very favorite on here. And thank you for being such an incredibly gifter writer who can make readers like me laugh and cry within a span of mere minutes. You are so talented. Really.

I'll be anxiously awaiting for my next Muffin fix. Maybe forgiveness Muffins? Or misunderstanding Muffins? Hmmmmm....Idk, I'm rambling. Ok, thank you again and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I'm so glad you updated! ^^
You made me cry with the latest chapter, poor Muffin. He's been alone his whole life with no one to care about him and now when he thinks someone does, they betrayed him. That's just heartbroken. I'm just worried about Muffin's future tense reflecting back on his life. It sound like someone bad is gonna happen....

Yay! You have updated~Thank you! *runs off to devour every word*

I never saw him as a traitor.
But at this point I'm not sure i even know what you wrote.
I mena, it seemed like Asher and Muffin might have feelings for each other eventually.
Ever since the chapter when the apartment blow up , they ran and ended up being captured this story is inconsistent to the chapters before that event.
Abd this running away stunt that leaves a cliffhanger what will happen next.. I do not like it.

But this is one of my fav stories here. I enjoyed the first 16 chapters with its muffin names.
But burnt muffin?! :(

You're back !!! It has been so long since the last chapter !
Pleaseee don't do that again XDD

You don't want to tell Muffin's real name ! :) So funny !

Love this story ! And the characters ! I want Muffin and Archer together even if Archer is THE bad boy ! ^^