rate_review Reviews

I have to say, this chapter was brilliant. It's very very rare that online fiction will get me emotional, and even though I love reading Muffin, I never thought the story would manage to actually get to me. The way you described the car incident made me feel genuinely horrified and upset for Muffin. You've done it so well; you've patiently gone chapter by chapter revealing hardly any information, keeping the suspense and confusion over who-feels-what (I thought I had Vincenzo figured out but now I'm wondering if he is actually into Muffin or not and what his problem is). It's fun trying to figure things out by thinking back to stuff in previous chapters - you've foreshadowed the story really well that way. I'm wondering if Muffin's (he's still Muffin to me, despite the Matthew) 'biggest regret' that was mentioned before will be in the next chapter. Usually, with online stuff, I've already got the plot figured out after the first chapter, and it's painfully predictible, but with Muffin I have no idea what's going to happen. I'm dying to know what it is Asher, Vincenzo, Alrick, Daniel actually DO - whether it's for a good reason, or not, and what Asher's opinion of Muffin is and why he is the why he is. Vincenzo, too - what's his deal? Was that display with Muffin earlier all to goad Asher? Are they fighting over Muffin? Or is Vincenzo just trying to get at Asher for a different reason?

Please, please update soon. I don't think I could deal with months of waiting again, lol.

The story has been very dark for a while now, and although it's necessary and required for the plot, I think we need a happier chapter soon!

Oh, by the way..

I HAVE A REQUEST. If, for some awful reason, the story ends without there being SOME kind of sexual and/or affectionate scene between Muffin and Vincenzo, could you please, please, PLEASE at least write a bloody one-shot, because the sexual tension is about to explode and it's very frustrating, very, very, frustrating. :(

That last chapter was difficult to read. Just emotionally draining.
Oh and I have a suggestion for a chappie names - crumbled muffin - designer muffin - tangy muffin - love muffin lol :) - plain muffin - quick muffin - bad muffin - savvy muffin

You know I'm dying here, yes? What one or two more weeks until this is solved? I already have a gastritis. Where is my omeprazol? No, honestly your suspense curves and turning points are nerve wrecking.

Assorted special muffins: chili muffin, hollow muffin, ipecac muffin, mustard muffin, gin muffin, tequila muffin, coffee muffin, invisible muffin, muffin surprise, iced muffin

So... His name is Matthew. I wouldn't have guessed that, but I never had a clue to what it could have been. I felt a bit of empathy for Muffin and his past, and it sucks that Asher was lying to him the whole time. Also he must've changed his short and bandages so many times that day, I sort of lost count even though it was really wasn't that many times.

Are you saying that this is almost over?! Oh Lordy, I hope not. D;

As much as i would like for Matthew(ha,finally he has a name)to go kung-fu on their asses, i would really like to know what Asher is all about...i mean,he never explains anything..the guy has to many secrets!!!Reveal them,pretty please?
Great chapter...i can sense the end coming.Hope it's an interesting one.And more Vincenzo pleeeeease!!!You know we love bad sexy italian guys with burns on their bodies....

AWESOME!!!

Yay for finally knowing his name, and a bit more of his history - do we know who Jason is though?
Oh, and you could use mini muffin maybe (you know, those little bite-size ones you can get) Or...well, I think you might have run out of flavours - unless you use weird ones like white chocolate cranberry or something like that.

Can't wait to see what happens at the meeting!

Wow... That DEFINITELY gave me something to do today. I spent the day reading the entire story. Honestly, I don't know HOW you're able to write such long chapters... Then again, I'm a crappy writer anyway. Lol. I'm also bad with updating too... Anyway, can't wait to see another chapter.